Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct grammar (e.g., "I look out the window" not "look at the out the window"). Use one or two supporting details and a linking phrase. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I usually do look out the window when I travel, especially by plane, because I find the landscape very beautiful. For example, I enjoy watching cloud formations and the view of cities from above, which makes flying more interesting. So yes, I always try to get a window seat.

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition and improve grammar and cohesion. Give a clear reason and one or two specific examples. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas, and avoid filler phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph the scenery because I want to remember special views. For example, I take pictures of dramatic sunsets or unusual cloud formations and sometimes post the best shots on social media so friends can see them.

Gợi ý: Provide a concise direct answer, avoid repetition and filler sounds, and give specific contrasting reasons. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "whereas") and correct small grammar issues ("mountains have" not "mountains has"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because there are more activities to do, such as hiking and paragliding, which I enjoy. Whereas the beach often feels monotonous to me, the mountains offer variety and adventure.

× 'I don't usually travel by car or bus, but more by plane.'

✓ 'I don't usually travel by car or by bus; I travel more by plane.'

'More by plane' is informal and the sentence lacks parallel structure. Use parallel prepositional phrases ('by car', 'by bus') and a clear verb for comparison. Suggestion: keep consistent structure and use 'I travel more by plane' or 'I usually travel by plane.'

× 'I still look at the out the window.'

✓ 'I still look out of the window.'

Redundant 'the' and incorrect preposition order 'look at the out the window'. The correct phrase is 'look out of the window' or simply 'look out the window.'

× 'I think this guy is one of the most amazing and mesmerizing thing in the whole world.'

✓ 'I think this view is one of the most amazing and mesmerizing things in the whole world.'

Incorrect noun choice 'guy' for scenery and mismatch between singular 'thing' and 'one of the ... things' which requires plural. Use 'view' or 'scene' and plural 'things.'

× 'Nature is the most amazing thing in the world.'

✓ 'Nature is the most amazing thing in the world.'

Sentence is grammatically correct but consider consistency with previous sentence: if referring to 'the view' or 'scenery', keep nouns aligned. No change needed.

× 'So yeah, I always do.'

✓ 'So yes, I always do.'

Informal 'yeah' is acceptable in spoken English but 'yes' is more appropriate in formal responses. Tense is fine.

× 'I'm very fan and and mesmerized by the nature.'

✓ 'I'm a big fan of nature and I'm mesmerized by it.'

Incorrect collocation 'very fan' and repeated 'and'. Use 'a fan of' and replace 'the nature' with 'nature' or 'it.' Also split into two clauses for clarity.

× 'I sometimes post it on the Internet and I do that because I think this is something I should remember.'

✓ 'I sometimes post it on the Internet because I think it is something I should remember.'

Pronoun consistency: 'it' rather than mixing 'this' and 'it'; redundant clause 'and I do that because' can be simplified. Tense and agreement are fine.

× 'Sometimes the sky is too pretty for me to forget it.'

✓ 'Sometimes the sky is too pretty for me to forget.'

Unnecessary object 'it' at the end; 'forget' can be used without repeating the noun. Present tense is correct.

× 'I I'm just thinking if I forget this, it's too bad.'

✓ 'I'm just thinking that if I forget it, that would be too bad.'

Extra 'I' and awkward conditional phrasing. Use 'that would be' for hypothetical present/future regret and replace 'this' with 'it' for clarity.

× 'I want to remember that day and how the sky was.'

✓ 'I want to remember that day and how the sky looked.'

Use 'looked' to describe appearance at that past moment; however, if speaking generally, 'looked' is preferable. Present tense 'was' is grammatically possible but 'looked' is more natural when describing appearance.

× 'I prefer to go hiking hiking on the mountains instead of the sea.'

✓ 'I prefer to go hiking in the mountains rather than by the sea.'

Duplicate word 'hiking' removed. Use 'in the mountains' not 'on the mountains'; 'rather than' is more natural than 'instead of' here. Also match preposition for sea: 'by the sea.'

× 'I think there's much more things to do in the mountains rather than the sea,'

✓ 'I think there are many more things to do in the mountains than by the sea,'

Use 'there are' with plural 'things' (subject-verb agreement). 'Much' is used with uncountable nouns; use 'many' for countable 'things.' Use 'than' for comparison and 'by the sea' for natural phrasing.

× 'and the sea is kind of boring with the sand umm, whereas the mountains has paragliding,'

✓ 'and the sea is kind of boring with the sand, whereas the mountains have paragliding,'

Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains' is plural, so use 'have' not 'has.' Also punctuation and filler 'umm' removed for clarity.

× 'which is something I really like to do in my free time.'

✓ 'which is something I really like to do in my free time.'

Sentence is correct. No change needed.