Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incorrect phrases (e.g. "a 2 vehicle", "any of my brother or sister"). Use past/simple present consistently.

Ví dụ: Yes, I always look out of the window because I enjoy sightseeing. For example, when I travel with family or friends I usually sit in the passenger seat so I can watch the city attractions and notice interesting buildings or parks.

Gợi ý: Make tense consistent and be more organized. Begin with a direct statement about your habit, then give one clear, specific example with correct tense and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "amuse park the famous of my district."

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car. For instance, yesterday my sister and I drove to a well-known amusement park nearby, and I photographed a large flowering tree because its colours were beautiful.

Gợi ý: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, remove redundant phrases) and avoid unclear references like "sit by that" and "in senior."

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because they offer peaceful scenery and fresh air. For example, during my recent summer vacation I visited the hills and enjoyed quiet walks and scenic viewpoints that helped me relax and recharge.

× Yes, I often look outside the windows because I love enjoying the environmental views.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window because I enjoy the scenery.

'Look outside the windows' is awkward; 'look out the window' is idiomatic. 'Love enjoying' is incorrect collocation here; use 'enjoy' or 'love' plus noun. 'Environmental views' is unnatural; 'scenery' fits. Use present simple 'enjoy' to match habitual action.

× Whenever I was, uh, traveling on a 2 vehicle with my family members or with my friends or any of my brother or sister, I always used to be the one who sits beside them, not the driver, because I love to see the attractions of the city.

✓ Whenever I was traveling in a vehicle with my family, friends, or any of my brothers or sisters, I always used to sit beside them, not drive, because I love to see the attractions of the city.

'2 vehicle' is incorrect; use 'a vehicle' or 'in a vehicle'. 'Family members or with my friends or any of my brother or sister' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'family, friends, or any of my brothers or sisters.' 'Used to be the one who sits' mixes past habitual 'used to' with present 'sits'; change to 'used to sit' for past habitual. 'Not the driver' is better as 'not drive' for parallel structure.

× Yes, I definitely took a picture.

✓ Yes, I definitely take pictures.

Question asks about a habitual action; use present simple 'take pictures' rather than past 'took a picture.' If referring to a specific occasion, keep past but context is general. 'A picture' singular is limiting; 'pictures' fits habitual behavior.

× I never miss a chance to take the picture of something that is very attractive to you.

✓ I never miss a chance to take a picture of something that I find attractive.

Pronoun 'you' is inconsistent with speaker perspective; use 'I' or 'I find.' 'The picture' is unnecessary; use 'a picture.' Maintain first-person narrative.

× Yesterday I along with my sister was traveling to amuse park the famous of my district.

✓ Yesterday my sister and I were traveling to the amusement park that is famous in my district.

Word order is incorrect: 'I along with my sister' should be 'my sister and I.' Use past progressive 'were traveling' for past continuous. 'Amuse park' should be 'amusement park.' 'The famous of my district' is ungrammatical; 'that is famous in my district' clarifies meaning.

× We went there and there was a beautiful tree with a lot of flowers and I took a lot of pictures of that.

✓ We went there and there was a beautiful tree with many flowers, and I took a lot of pictures of it.

Use 'many' for countable 'flowers' instead of 'a lot of' (acceptable but 'many' is more natural here). 'Pictures of that' is awkward; use 'pictures of it.' Maintain past tense consistently.

× Although both of these are very beautiful and enhances our mood and moreover, these both play a significant role in nourishing the planet, but I prefer mountains because they provide us a very beautiful view.

✓ Although both are very beautiful and enhance our mood and play a significant role in nourishing the planet, I prefer the mountains because they provide a beautiful view.

Do not combine 'although' with 'but'; remove 'but.' 'Both of these' -> 'both' is fine. Verb agreement: 'both...enhance' not 'enhances.' 'Moreover' is unnecessary when using 'although.' Use 'the mountains' for specific reference and 'a beautiful view' for natural phrasing.

× We can relax our mind. Sit by that.

✓ We can relax our minds and sit by them.

Fragment 'Sit by that' lacks clear subject; combine sentences. 'Relax our mind' should be 'relax our minds' (plural) to match 'we.' 'Sit by them' refers back to mountains or views.

× I remember clearly the recently I visited there during my summer vacations in senior.

✓ I clearly remember that I recently visited there during my summer vacations in senior year.

Word order 'the recently I visited there' is incorrect; use 'that I recently visited.' Add 'year' after 'senior' for clarity: 'senior year.' Maintain present tense 'remember' with past action 'visited.'