Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh). Correct verb forms and article use (e.g. "when I travel" not "when I'm often travel").

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, I enjoy watching forests and fields because they help me relax and break the monotony of a long journey. Also, I sometimes notice local villages and landmarks, which makes the trip more interesting.

Gợi ý: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct. Use a topic sentence followed by a specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases ("click a picture" is okay but "give a give a" is wrong). Use linking words such as "because" or "so" appropriately.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the window because it relaxes me and I want to keep the memory. For instance, last month I photographed a dramatic mountain view through the bus window and later used the photo as a desktop background.

Gợi ý: Answer directly (choose one or say both briefly) and explain with clear, specific reasons. Fix grammar and awkward expressions (e.g. "I prefer both the mountains and the sea"; avoid unclear phrases like "think so much in high standard" and typos). Use linking words ("because", "also", "for example").

Ví dụ: I like both the mountains and the sea. I enjoy mountains because they are peaceful and good for hiking, which helps me think and relax. I also love the sea for its wide views and calming sound of waves, so I appreciate different experiences from each.

× When I'm often travel via car or a bus, then I often look at the outside window because I think it gave a lot of refreshment during the traveling when I look at the beautiful objects and scenery of the nature.

✓ When I often travel by car or by bus, I often look out the window because I think it gives me a lot of refreshment during the journey when I see the beautiful objects and scenery of nature.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms: 'I'm often travel' should be 'I often travel' (present simple for habitual action). 'Via' is awkward here; use 'by car/by bus'. 'Look at the outside window' should be 'look out the window'. 'It gave' is past tense but the sentence describes a habitual feeling, so use present simple 'it gives me'. 'During the traveling' should be 'during the journey' or 'while traveling'. Remove redundant articles in 'scenery of the nature' to 'scenery of nature' or simply 'nature scenery'. Suggestions: use present simple for habits, use 'look out the window', use 'gives' for present habit, and prefer 'by car/by bus' or 'while traveling'.

× And yes, I really enjoy the, my whole traveling through watching, uh, the beauty of the nature.

✓ And yes, I really enjoy my whole journey by watching the beauty of nature.

The phrase has unnecessary commas and incorrect article use: 'the, my whole traveling through watching' is ungrammatical—use 'my whole journey' or 'the whole trip'. 'Traveling' as a noun is awkward here; 'journey' or 'trip' is better. 'The beauty of the nature' should be 'the beauty of nature' (no definite article before 'nature'). Suggestions: streamline the phrase, remove extra commas, use 'journey' or 'trip', and omit 'the' before 'nature'.

× Yes, while traveling when I see so many beautiful scenery of the nature and it give a give a relaxation to my mind and also refreshes my brain then definitely I will click a picture because I think there is a rare chance when we have look on such a beautiful scenes while traveling.

✓ Yes, while traveling, when I see so many beautiful scenes of nature and they give relaxation to my mind and refresh my brain, I will definitely take a picture because I think there are rare chances to see such beautiful scenes while traveling.

Multiple errors: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun; when referring to multiple items use 'scenes' or keep 'scenery' without 'so many'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it give' should match plural subject 'they give' or use 'it gives' for singular. 'Give a give a relaxation' is redundant; use 'give relaxation' or 'are relaxing'. 'Click a picture' is informal; 'take a picture' is more natural. 'There is a rare chance' should be 'there are rare chances' or 'it is rare to have the chance'. 'Have look on' should be 'get to see' or 'see'. Suggestions: use 'scenes' or 'scenery', ensure subject-verb agreement, replace 'click' with 'take', and use natural phrasing like 'it is rare to see such beautiful scenes'.

× Actually I give preference to both of the mountains or a sea because mountains are the high altitude landscape and person can think so much in high standard.

✓ Actually I prefer both the mountains and the sea because mountains are high-altitude landscapes and a person can think more clearly there.

Problems: 'give preference to both of the mountains or a sea' is awkward; use 'prefer both the mountains and the sea' or 'I like both'. 'The high altitude landscape' should be plural 'high-altitude landscapes' or 'a high-altitude landscape' and needs hyphenation. 'Person can think so much in high standard' is incorrect pronoun and phrasing; use 'a person can think more clearly' or 'it helps people think more deeply'. Suggestions: use 'prefer', correct noun number and hyphenate 'high-altitude', and use 'a person' or 'people' with clear comparative wording like 'more clearly' or 'more deeply'.

× And moreover when we see her toward the CNO Sheen, then these are the beautiful nature landscapes and I think person can think broader like the sea.

✓ Moreover, when we look out toward the ocean or shore, these are beautiful natural landscapes and I think a person can think more broadly, like when looking at the sea.

This sentence contains unclear and incorrect words: 'see her toward the CNO Sheen' is unintelligible—likely meant 'look toward the ocean/sea' or 'shore'. 'Beautiful nature landscapes' should be 'beautiful natural landscapes'. 'Person can think broader like the sea' needs article 'a person' and 'broader' should be 'more broadly' or 'think more broadly'; compare structures properly. Use 'look out toward' for direction. Suggestions: replace unclear phrase with 'look toward the ocean/shore', use 'natural' instead of 'nature', include the article 'a person', and use adverb 'more broadly' or 'think more broadly'.

× So I like both of the sea and mountains.

✓ So I like both the sea and the mountains.

Minor article and plural issues: 'both of the sea and mountains' is incorrect; say 'both the sea and the mountains' or 'both the mountains and the sea'. Ensure parallel structure and include 'the' consistently. Suggestions: use parallel structure 'both the X and the Y' and keep noun forms consistent.