Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, and you provide reasons and strategies, which is good. To improve: make the response more concise (max 5 sentences), use smoother linking words, correct small phrasing issues (e.g., “throughout the street” → “during the journey”), and vary vocabulary (use ‘travel’ or ‘trip’ consistently). Also add a brief topic sentence at the start and one specific example to enrich content.

Ví dụ: I usually don’t look out of the window when I travel because I suffer from motion sickness. For example, on a two-hour bus trip last month I felt nauseous, so I listened to podcasts and music on my headphones to distract myself. As a result, I was able to relax and avoid feeling worse during the journey.

Gợi ý: Good direct answer and personal preference. To improve: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition of the phrase “live in the moment,” correct grammatical issues (use ‘rather than’ not ‘than’), and replace awkward words like “throughout the shift” with “during the trip.” Add one specific example or brief explanation of why you prefer not to take photos to make your answer more convincing.

Ví dụ: I prefer not to take photos of the scenery because I like to experience the view directly. For instance, when I travel to the countryside, I put my phone away and watch the landscape pass by, which helps me relax and remember the trip more vividly.

Gợi ý: Your preference is clear and you give a reason, which is good. To improve: produce a grammatically correct topic sentence, avoid vague phrasing like “mysteriousness,” use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “mystery” or “mysterious nature”), and expand with one supporting detail or a short example (e.g., activities you enjoy at the sea). Keep responses within five sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I find its mystery and vastness fascinating. For example, I enjoy walking along the shore and watching the waves at sunset because it makes me feel peaceful and curious about the life beneath the water's surface.

× No, I do not look out the windows because I get motion sickness which causes me to vomit or feel nauseous the entire trip.

✓ No, I do not look out the window because I get motion sickness which causes me to vomit or feel nauseous for the entire trip.

The noun 'window' should be singular to match 'out the window' as a fixed expression referring to the side view from a seat; 'windows' is not ungrammatical but inconsistent with common collocation. Also 'the entire trip' is fine but 'for the entire trip' is more natural to indicate duration. Suggestion: use 'look out the window' and include 'for' to show duration.

× Instead, I focus on my phone or divert my mind using the radios or music playing through my headphones.

✓ Instead, I focus on my phone or divert my mind using the radio or music playing through my headphones.

'Radios' is plural and implies multiple devices; in this context 'the radio' (mass noun) or 'music' is more natural. Use singular 'radio' or simply 'music'. Suggestion: choose 'the radio' or 'music' to sound natural: 'using the radio or music.'

× This way I get more comfortable throughout the street.

✓ This way I become more comfortable during the trip.

'Throughout the street' is incorrect: 'throughout' means 'all over' and 'street' is wrong context. The intended meaning is duration of travel, so use 'during the trip' or 'for the whole journey.' Also 'get more comfortable' is acceptable but 'become more comfortable' is more natural. Suggestion: replace phrase with 'during the trip' or 'for the whole journey.'

× No, I do not take pictures of the environment during a trip.

✓ No, I do not take pictures of the scenery during a trip.

'The environment' is grammatically correct but collocationally odd when referring to views seen from a car; 'the scenery' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'scenery' or 'the scenery outside the window.'

× Instead I like to live in the moment than focusing on taking pictures with my phones or other devices.

✓ Instead I prefer to live in the moment rather than focus on taking pictures with my phone or other devices.

Incorrect comparative structure: 'like to X than Y' is wrong. Use 'prefer to X rather than Y' or 'would rather X than Y.' Also 'phones' should be singular 'phone' to match a typical device reference. Verb forms should be parallel: 'prefer to live' and 'rather than focus.' Suggestion: use 'prefer to... rather than...' and make verbs parallel.

× I like to live in the moment by being active and present and enjoying the view with my own eyes throughout the shift.

✓ I like to live in the moment by being actively present and enjoying the view with my own eyes throughout the trip.

'Being active and present' is slightly awkward; 'actively present' is more natural. 'Throughout the shift' uses 'shift' (a work period) which is wrong context; 'trip' or 'journey' is appropriate. Suggestion: use 'throughout the trip' and 'actively present.'

× I prefer the sea because of the mysteriousness of the ocean.

✓ I prefer the sea because of the mysteriousness of the ocean.

Sentence is grammatical but 'mysteriousness' is a correct noun but sounds awkward; a more natural word is 'mystery' or 'mysteriousness' can be accepted. No mandatory correction required under the provided list, but consider: 'because of the mystery of the ocean.'

× I like the depths of the sea is not known to any man and this is just a very intriguing thing for me.

✓ I like that the depths of the sea are not known to anyone, and this is very intriguing to me.

Original combines clauses incorrectly. Use 'I like that...' to introduce a clause. Subject-verb agreement: 'depths' (plural) requires 'are' not 'is' (this also relates to subject-verb agreement ID 27). 'Any man' is archaic and gendered; 'anyone' is neutral. 'Intriguing thing for me' is wordy; 'intriguing to me' is natural. Suggestion: restructure sentence: 'I like that the depths of the sea are not known to anyone, and this is very intriguing to me.'