Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid contradictions ("Yes" then "I don't look...") and reduce fillers (umm, uh). Use one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors (for example, “because” or “so”) and keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I enjoy observing different landscapes. For example, I like watching countryside farms and city streets pass by, which helps me notice local life and architecture. This also makes long journeys feel shorter and more interesting.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by adding a specific detail and linking words to show reason or result. Reduce fillers and correct small grammatical issues (e.g., "maintained" -> "maintain"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of scenery when I travel because I want to remember interesting places. I maintain an Instagram page where I post these pictures, and later I enjoy looking back at them to recall the trip. Sometimes I edit the best shots and share short captions about the location.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "while", "and"). Avoid repetition and unnecessary hesitations. Keep the answer to 3–4 well-structured sentences.

Ví dụ: I like both the mountains and the sea because each offers a different experience. The mountains make me feel closer to nature and are great for hiking and fresh air, while the sea helps me relax and reflect because of its wide, calming views. For that reason, I enjoy visiting both depending on my mood.

× Yes, I don't look into the window whenever I'm traveling because there are many benefits of it It a you get to see beautiful scenic views or even the ugly views of any city or countryside.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window when I'm traveling because there are many benefits: you get to see beautiful scenery or even the ugly parts of a city or the countryside.

The student used incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. Use 'look out of' or 'look out the window' rather than 'look into the window'. 'Whenever' and 'don't' conflicted with intended meaning; context indicates they do look, so remove negation. 'Benefits of it It a' is ungrammatical and redundant; restructure the sentence with a colon and concise noun 'scenery' and 'parts' for clarity. Suggestion: choose 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window', avoid double negatives and redundant words, and use clear noun phrases.

× Also you umm, I think when you are uh traveling and looking into the window umm it's.

✓ Also, I think when you are traveling and looking out of the window, it is relaxing.

Again 'looking into the window' is incorrect; 'looking out of the window' or 'looking out the window' is correct. The original sentence is incomplete; add a suitable predicate such as 'it is relaxing' to complete the thought. Suggestion: avoid filler sounds, complete the clause with a clear verb and complement.

× Yeah, definitely. Whenever I'm outside and, uh, traveling, I take pictures of the scenic views.

✓ Yes, definitely. Whenever I'm traveling, I take pictures of scenic views.

'Outside and traveling' is redundant; 'when traveling' suffices. 'The scenic views' implies specific views already known; in general statements use 'scenic views' without the definite article. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and use articles only when referring to specific known items.

× I have also maintained a Instagram page where I put those photos and later enjoy the memories.

✓ I have also maintained an Instagram page where I post those photos and later enjoy the memories.

Use 'an Instagram page' (article 'an' before vowel sound) not 'a Instagram'. 'Maintained' is acceptable but 'have maintained' suggests ongoing; 'I have maintained' is okay. 'Put those photos' is informal; use 'post' for social media. Suggestion: use correct indefinite article before 'Instagram' and prefer 'post' for uploading photos.

× I prefer both umm I can't choose one and leave the other because mountains give me more umm I I get closer when to the nature when I see the mountains and the sea gives me more of a depth of thinking.

✓ I prefer both; I can't choose one and leave the other because the mountains make me feel closer to nature, while the sea gives me deeper thoughts.

Run-on sentence with repetition and incorrect word order 'get closer when to the nature'. Use 'the mountains' and 'the sea' with definite article when speaking generally about these features. 'Give me more of a depth of thinking' is awkward; use 'gives me deeper thoughts' or 'inspires deeper thinking'. Suggestion: break into clauses, remove filler words, fix word order, and use natural collocations ('closer to nature', 'deeper thinking').

× So both are special to me in their own ways.

✓ So both are special to me in their own ways.

This sentence is grammatically correct though contains filler earlier; it is kept unchanged. Suggestion: no change needed; it's a correct structure expressing contrast.