Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. “I live” twice) and minor grammar issues ("block my site" → "block my view").

Ví dụ: Yes. I live in central Hong Kong, so I'm surrounded by many skyscrapers that often block my view. However, they make the area very convenient because shops and offices are nearby, and to me they also represent the city's prosperity.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid colloquial fillers like 'cause' and repetitive phrasing. Use a slightly wider vocabulary (e.g. "prefer to admire" instead of "prefer using my eyes").

Ví dụ: Not usually. I prefer to admire interesting buildings with my own eyes because I find that observing details in person feels more memorable than photographing everything.

Gợi ý: Make the answer grammatically correct and more specific. Begin with a clear statement, then explain reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Fix unclear parts like "when I stand on it I can what I can see" and use precise vocabulary (e.g. "observation deck").

Ví dụ: Yes, I'd love to visit the IFC in central Hong Kong because it's one of the tallest buildings here. I'm curious to go up to the observation deck to see the panoramic views of the harbor and skyscrapers, which I think would be impressive.

Gợi ý: Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear contrast phrase (e.g. "I used to... but now...") and give one concise reason for the change, using linking words like "however" or "because." Replace informal phrases like "kind of" with stronger vocabulary (e.g. "a bit" or "somewhat").

Ví dụ: I used to want to live in a tall building because as a child I found heights exciting. However, now I feel somewhat uneasy about very high floors because standing near the edge makes me feel dizzy and frightened.

× ...so they kind of block my site from seeing the views.

✓ ...so they kind of block my sight from seeing the views.

The student used 'site' (a place) instead of the correct pronoun 'sight' (ability to see). This is a word choice error involving pronouns/lexical choice. Use 'sight' to refer to vision: 'block my sight' or better 'block my view'. Suggestion: Replace 'site' with 'sight' or rephrase as 'block my view'.

× But they're really convenient and they're a symbol of success, I guess.

✓ But they're really convenient, and they are a symbol of success, I guess.

This sentence has a comma splice and a contraction/colloquial phrasing issue rather than strict grammar type; correcting punctuation and keeping pronoun agreement improves clarity. Suggest adding a comma and expanding contraction for formal clarity. Alternatively combine with 'and' properly.

× Actually, not really 'cause in my life I prefer using my eyes to watch buildings instead of taking pictures of them, 'cause I think it's really important to remember things by our eyes instead of always taking photos.

✓ Actually, not really, because in my life I prefer using my eyes to look at buildings instead of taking pictures of them, because I think it's really important to remember things with our eyes instead of always taking photos.

Use 'look at' rather than 'watch' for viewing buildings; 'remember things by our eyes' is unnatural—use 'remember things with our eyes'. Also replace colloquial 'cause with 'because'. These are verb+ -ing and preposition choice issues. Suggest: 'prefer looking at buildings' and 'remember things with our eyes'.

× I would like to visit the city center called IFC and it's no doubt the tallest building in Hong Kong.

✓ I would like to visit the city center building called IFC, and it's undoubtedly one of the tallest buildings in Hong Kong.

'No doubt the tallest building' is likely factually incorrect and absolutist; grammatically, change 'no doubt' to 'undoubtedly' and 'tallest building' to 'one of the tallest buildings' for accuracy. Also add 'building' after 'city center' for clarity. This addresses present tense/state and article/use.

× So I'm curious about how tall it is and when I stand on it I can what I can see and if they will amaze me.

✓ So I'm curious about how tall it is and what I can see when I stand on it, and whether it will amaze me.

The original sentence has incorrect word order ('when I stand on it I can what I can see') and a vague pronoun 'they' referring to the views or building. Reorder to 'what I can see when I stand on it' and use 'whether it will amaze me'. This fixes sentence structure and pronoun reference errors.

× Well, I love to live in tall buildings when I was little 'cause I think being tall is really exciting.

✓ Well, I loved living in tall buildings when I was little because I thought being tall was really exciting.

Mixed tenses: 'I love to live... when I was little' mixes present and past. Change to past tense consistently ('loved living','was little','was really exciting'). Also replace colloquial 'cause with 'because'. This addresses tense consistency and pronoun/tense usage.

× However, now I'm kind of afraid of too high buildings 'cause when I stand at the that high level I will feel that I'm dropping down.

✓ However, now I'm kind of afraid of very tall buildings because when I stand at that height I feel like I'm going to fall.

Use 'very tall buildings' instead of 'too high buildings'; 'stand at the that high level' is ungrammatical — use 'stand at that height'. Change future 'will feel' to present tense 'feel' for current ongoing feeling and 'I'm going to fall' or 'I feel like I'm falling' for natural expression. This fixes adjective choice, article use, and tense.

× So it's really frightening.

✓ So it's really frightening for me.

Sentence is grammatical but can be clearer by adding 'for me' to show subjective experience. This addresses clarity of adjective use.