Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether there are tall buildings near your home, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use "I have lived" not "I'm living").

Ví dụ: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I have lived in a semi-rural area for almost ten years. However, when I lived in the city centre I saw many skyscrapers, which made me feel stressed due to noise and crowds.

Gợi ý: Use present simple for habits and improve sentence flow. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct collocations (e.g., "I enjoy architectural photography", "I habitually take photographs").

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy architectural photography and I often take photos of impressive tall buildings because my son studies architecture. For example, I photographed a recently completed office tower so he could study its façade and structural details.

Gợi ý: Be precise with vocabulary and correct phrases. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases like "executed white marble" or "mobile architecture"; instead describe materials and decorative details accurately.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal in Agra because it is one of the Seven Wonders and is famous for its white marble and detailed inlay work. It is about 200 kilometres from my city, and I want to see the fine carvings and symmetrical gardens in person.

Gợi ý: Make your answer clearer and correct grammar. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid vague or incorrect expressions (e.g., "miserable expression", "mantle energy"); use "uncomfortable" or "tiring" instead. Keep sentences short and complete.

Ví dụ: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I once lived on the 14th floor with my family and found it tiring to climb stairs during power cuts. Also, the apartment felt cramped and noisy, so I prefer lower-floor houses.

× It has been almost a decade since I'm living in semi rural area and there is hardly any high riser or tall building.

✓ It has been almost a decade since I have been living in a semi-rural area, and there are hardly any high-rises or tall buildings.

Two issues: (1) 'since' with a duration requires present perfect continuous: 'I have been living' not 'I'm living'. (2) 'there is' disagrees with plural 'high-rises or tall buildings' so use 'there are'. Also add hyphen in 'semi-rural' and pluralize 'high-rises.' Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'I have been living' for actions started in the past and continuing now, and match 'there' + verb to the plural noun: 'there are'.

× But when I used to live in the city center that time I was occupied by many towers and skyscrapers.

✓ But when I used to live in the city center, I was surrounded by many towers and skyscrapers.

The phrase 'used to' correctly indicates a past habitual situation, but 'that time' is redundant and 'occupied by many towers' is unnatural; use 'surrounded by' to express being among towers. Add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: Remove redundant time markers and choose verbs collocating with buildings (e.g., 'surrounded by').

× But I used to feel stressful due to lot of noise and chaos.

✓ But I used to feel stressed because of a lot of noise and chaos.

'Feel stressful' is incorrect: people feel 'stressed.' Also use 'because of' or 'due to' with a noun phrase; include the article 'a' before 'lot.' Suggestion: Use 'feel stressed' for emotional states and 'a lot of' for quantity.

× Yes, I enjoyed architectural photography and I'm habitual to take photograph of any sophisticated tall building especially for my son who is doing a study in architecture and those images are quite useful for him to analyze the design and progress of particular building.

✓ Yes, I enjoy architectural photography, and I'm in the habit of taking photographs of any sophisticated tall building, especially for my son who is studying architecture; those images are quite useful for him to analyze the design and progress of a particular building.

Multiple problems: 'enjoyed' (past) conflicts with present habit—use present 'enjoy.' 'I'm habitual to' is incorrect; use 'I'm in the habit of' or 'I usually.' Use plural 'photographs.' 'Doing a study in architecture' is awkward—use 'studying architecture.' Add articles: 'a particular building.' Use punctuation to break long sentence. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habits (present simple) and use correct collocations: 'in the habit of taking' and 'studying architecture.'

× Yes, I would really like to visit the Taj Mahal. It is in Agra, not far from Delhi and it is one of the seven wonders of the world. I want to see its executed white marble, intricate in clay work and unique mobile architecture in person. It is about 200 kilometer away from my city.

✓ Yes, I would really like to visit the Taj Mahal. It is in Agra, not far from Delhi, and it is one of the seven wonders of the world. I want to see its exquisite white marble, intricate inlay work, and unique mobile architecture in person. It is about 200 kilometres away from my city.

Issues corrected: 'executed white marble' is unidiomatic; 'exquisite white marble' fits. 'intricate in clay work' is incorrect—likely 'intricate inlay work' (inlaying marble). 'Mobile architecture' is unclear but left as 'unique mobile architecture' though context may mean 'monumental architecture'—confirm meaning. '200 kilometer' needs plural 'kilometres' (and spelling variant depending on region). Add comma before conjunction. Suggestion: Use precise adjectives ('exquisite') and correct nouns ('inlay work'); pluralize units: 'kilometres' or 'kilometers.'

× I want to see its executed white marble, intricate in clay work and unique mobile architecture in person.

✓ I want to see its exquisite white marble, intricate inlay work, and unique architecture in person.

Repeated: 'executed' is wrong for describing marble; 'in clay work' is incorrect; 'mobile architecture' likely misused—'architecture' alone or 'monumental architecture' fits. Ensure parallel structure in the list (adjective + noun). Suggestion: Use parallel items and correct collocations: 'exquisite white marble,' 'intricate inlay work.'

× I had really bad and miserable expression of living in a tower when my father was an army officer and we uh, shifted in a apartment which was on 14th floor.

✓ I had a really bad and miserable experience living in a tower when my father was an army officer, and we, uh, moved into an apartment on the 14th floor.

Errors: 'expression' should be 'experience.' Use article 'a' before 'really bad...' and 'an apartment.' 'Shifted in' is incorrect—use 'moved into.' Use 'on the 14th floor' with ordinal and article. Remove redundant 'which was.' Suggestion: Use 'experience' for events, 'move into' for changing residence, and include appropriate articles.

× It was so exhausted.

✓ It was so exhausting.

'Exhausted' describes a person being tired; 'exhausting' describes an experience that causes tiredness. Since the tower experience caused tiredness, use 'exhausting.' Suggestion: Choose correct adjective form: '-ed' for feelings, '-ing' for causes.

× Also drained my mantle energy to reaching at this floor and.

✓ It also drained my mental energy to reach that floor.

Multiple issues: 'mantle' is wrong word—should be 'mental.' 'Drained my mental energy' is correct. Use infinitive 'to reach' not 'to reaching,' and 'reach that floor' or 'get to that floor' rather than 'reaching at.' Remove trailing 'and.' Suggestion: Use correct word 'mental,' correct verb form 'to reach,' and complete the sentence without trailing conjunction.