Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more precise and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid uncertain phrases like "it may have been." Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "for instance" or "such as").

Ví dụ: Yes. My neighbourhood has many tall buildings because I live in central Sidomeda. For instance, the Tourist Building has 25 floors and houses offices and hotels, which makes the area very busy.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons with specific examples. Avoid confusing references (e.g., "scenery of Iran area") and use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because I prefer nature. For example, I often photograph sunsets, tree canopies and the sky because these images make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

Gợi ý: Give a clearer topic sentence naming the building and its location. Provide one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, and finish the sentence—avoid hanging phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "such as" to explain.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit QVB in Sydney because it is a historic shopping arcade. It has many shops such as chocolate stores and artisan boutiques, and I want to see its stained-glass windows and Victorian architecture.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear short answer, then give a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid contradictory phrases ("I don't want to leave such a kind of building") and repetitive statements. Use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence.

Ví dụ: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because earthquakes are common in Japan. For example, during a strong tremor I would feel unsafe living on a high floor, so I prefer low-rise houses.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings because I live in the central city of Sidomeda. For example, the tourist building has 25 floors and it may have been.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings because I live in the central city of Sidomeda. For example, the tourist building has 25 floors.

The phrase 'and it may have been' is incomplete and unclear; it does not fit as a continuation of the sentence. Remove the fragment to make the sentence grammatical and clear. If the speaker intended a completion (for example 'and it may have been built recently'), they should provide a full clause with subject and verb. Suggestion: avoid leaving sentence fragments and ensure each clause has a clear verb and object.

× No I don't because I like nature and I don't like the scenery of Iran area so I usually take a photo of the sky or trees or sunlight and sunsets.

✓ No, I don't because I like nature and I don't like the scenery in the Irani area, so I usually take photos of the sky, trees, sunlight, and sunsets.

Use 'in' rather than 'of' for location ('scenery in the Irani area'). 'Iran area' is unclear; use 'Irani area' or 'areas in Iran' depending on meaning. Also pluralize 'photo' to 'photos' because multiple items are listed and use commas to separate items. 'Sunlight and sunsets' is redundant; listing both is acceptable but maintain parallel structure. Add commas for clarity.

× It makes me happier and refreshing.

✓ They make me happier and feel refreshed.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: 'It' does not agree with plural 'photos/sky/trees', and 'refreshing' is an adjective that does not fit after 'and' without a verb. Change to 'They make me happier and feel refreshed' so the plural subject matches the verb and the second result is expressed correctly with 'feel' + adjective. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun and use parallel structure for compound predicates.

× Yes, I have and I want to visit a QBB which is very famous in Sydney.

✓ Yes, I have, and I want to visit the QBB, which is very famous in Sydney.

The response 'Yes, I have' is vague; include a comma and keep 'the' before the building name if it is a specific, known place. Also add commas around the non-restrictive clause 'which is very famous in Sydney.' Use 'the QBB' if referring to a specific building. If 'QBB' is a proper name, capitalise consistently and treat it as a singular noun with 'the' only if customary. Suggestion: make pronoun references clear and use definite article when referring to a specific known building.

× This building is a shopping center and it has a lot of kinds of shops, for example chocolate shop or.

✓ This building is a shopping center and it has many kinds of shops, for example a chocolate shop.

'a lot of kinds of shops' is awkward; use 'many kinds of shops'. Also 'chocolate shop or' is an incomplete list; finish the example with 'a chocolate shop.' Use an article before 'chocolate shop.' Suggestion: use 'many' with countable plural nouns and finish examples completely.

× Actually, no, I don't want to leave such a kind of building because it's dangerous when I have an earthquake in Japan.

✓ Actually, no, I don't want to live in that kind of building because it's dangerous if there is an earthquake in Japan.

Several issues: 'leave' is incorrect in meaning; 'live in' fits the question about living. 'Such a kind of building' is ungrammatical; use 'that kind of building' or 'such a building.' Also 'when I have an earthquake' is incorrect because people do not 'have' earthquakes; use 'if there is an earthquake' or 'when there is an earthquake.' Suggestion: choose verbs that match the intended meaning ('live in' not 'leave') and use correct existential construction 'there is' for events like earthquakes.

× In Japan we have a lot of earthquakes, and so it's risky for me too.

✓ In Japan, we experience many earthquakes, so it's risky for me too.

'Have a lot of earthquakes' is colloquial; 'experience many earthquakes' or 'there are many earthquakes' is more appropriate. 'And so' is wordy; 'so' is sufficient. Add a comma after 'In Japan' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'experience' or 'there are' for natural phenomena and simplify conjunctions.