Food— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and minor grammar errors (e.g., “most people” not “most of the people”; “I love it” not “I loved it really much”).

Ví dụ: My favourite food is durian. Although many people find its smell off‑putting, I enjoy its rich, creamy texture and sweet, custard‑like flavour. For example, I often have it with sticky rice during the fruit season, which highlights its sweetness.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a reason. Use linking words like ‘for example’ and ‘because’. Avoid vague phrases such as “sort of cakes” and correct tenses (e.g., “I couldn’t eat sweets” not “couldn't eat sweet”).

Ví dụ: When I was young, I loved sweet foods. For example, I used to eat ice cream and chocolate cake every weekend because I had a big sweet tooth. However, later I developed a throat condition, so I had to cut down on sugary treats.

Gợi ý: Be specific and concise. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two clear examples linked with connectors like ‘for instance’ or ‘in summer’. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing (e.g., ‘different season has different sort of different food’ is redundant).

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. For instance, in summer I eat refreshing fruits like mangoes and watermelon, while in winter I prefer warm soups and stews because they are comforting and seasonal ingredients are fresher.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons with connected linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea twice and use correct grammar (e.g., ‘I have grown up’ or ‘as I grew up’; ‘harm my throat’ not ‘harm our throat’).

Ví dụ: Yes, my preferences have changed. As a child, I craved sweets and fruits, but as I grew up I became more health‑conscious because sugary foods aggravated my throat and contributed to weight gain, so now I prefer savoury and nutritious meals.

× It has a sharp shell and it smells kind of stinky from most of the people.

✓ It has a sharp shell and it smells kind of stinky to most people.

Use 'to' rather than 'from' when saying how something appears or is perceived by people. 'From most of the people' is unnatural here. Also omit 'of' after 'most' when followed directly by a noun like 'people'. Suggestion: say 'smells kind of stinky to most people.'

× They don't accept the smell of it.

✓ Most people don't accept its smell.

Pronoun reference and word order are awkward. 'They' is vague; replace with 'Most people' to match previous clause. Use the possessive pronoun 'its' before 'smell' rather than 'the smell of it.' Suggestion: 'Most people don't accept its smell.'

× However, I loved it really much.

✓ However, I really loved it.

Adverb placement: 'really' should come before the verb phrase 'loved it.' 'Really much' is nonstandard in this position. Use 'really loved it' or 'loved it very much.'

× When I was young I loved sweet food, for example, like ice creams and sort of cakes.

✓ When I was young, I loved sweet foods, for example ice cream and cakes.

Count and form: 'sweet food' should be plural 'sweet foods' for general category. 'Ice creams' is usually uncountable as a flavor or 'ice cream' is better. 'Sort of cakes' is informal and redundant after 'for example.' Suggestion: 'for example ice cream and cakes.' Also add a comma after the introductory clause.

× However, when I grew up I got a bad throat that makes me couldn't eat sweet.

✓ However, when I grew up I developed a bad throat condition that made me unable to eat sweets.

Multiple issues: 'got a bad throat' is awkward; use 'developed a bad throat condition.' 'Makes me couldn't' mixes tenses and uses incorrect auxiliary; use past 'made me unable' or 'made it so I couldn't.' Use 'sweets' plural for types of sweet foods. Suggestion: 'made me unable to eat sweets.'

× So yeah, I missed the time when I could eat a lot of sweet food.

✓ So yeah, I miss the time when I could eat a lot of sweet food.

Tense consistency: the speaker refers to a present feeling about the past ('I miss the time when...'), so use present 'miss' rather than past 'missed.' Alternatively 'I miss the times when I could eat a lot of sweet foods.' Also 'sweet food' -> 'sweet foods' or 'sweets.'

× Well, for me, definitely yes, since every season has its iconic food and different season has different sort of different food that were great.

✓ Well, for me definitely yes, since every season has its iconic foods and different seasons have different kinds of food that are great.

Subject-verb agreement and plural forms: 'different season has' should be 'different seasons have.' Use plural 'foods' and 'kinds of food' instead of 'sort of different food.' Also verb agreement with 'that were great' should be 'that are great' because it's a general statement. Remove extra commas for clarity.

× So definitely yes I do.

✓ So definitely yes, I do.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after 'yes' for natural speech flow. The sentence is otherwise grammatical. Suggestion: 'So definitely, yes, I do.'

× Well, definitely yes. When I was young I used to crave sweet food, sweet fruits.

✓ Well, definitely yes. When I was young I used to crave sweet foods and sweet fruits.

Consistency of countable nouns: 'sweet food' should be plural 'sweet foods' when referring to types. 'Sweet fruits' is acceptable but keep parallel structure with 'sweet foods and sweet fruits.'

× However, now I grew up and I found that sweet foods are bad for our throats.

✓ However, now that I am grown up, I have found that sweets are bad for our throats.

Tense and aspect: 'now I grew up' mixes past with present; use 'now that I am grown up' or 'now that I have grown up.' 'I found' better as present perfect 'I have found' to indicate a recent or current realization. Use 'sweets' for general category. Suggestion: 'now that I am grown up, I have found that sweets are bad for our throats.'

× It will harm our throat and make us gain weight.

✓ They can harm our throats and cause us to gain weight.

Pronoun and number agreement: 'It' refers to 'sweets' (plural), so use 'they.' 'Throat' should be plural 'throats' for general reference. 'Will harm' is strong prediction; 'can harm' is more natural when speaking generally. Use 'cause us to gain weight' instead of 'make us gain weight.'