Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to sequence actions and give a precise duration. Aim for 2–4 coherent sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I usually walk from my home to the bus stop in the morning, then from the bus stop to my office, and I do the same on the way home. In total I walk about 20–25 minutes each day.

Gợi ý: Improve sentence structure and verb forms, and avoid filler words. Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details (activities, places, or reasons) with linking words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. My family and our friends met every Sunday and we explored nearby forests and countryside, usually walking for two to three hours while enjoying the scenery and playing games.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Give one clear reason, then add a second reason with a linking word. Use natural collocations (e.g., "well maintained", "smooth paths").

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they are well maintained and have smooth paths, which makes walking comfortable. In addition, parks are often easy to reach by public transport, so they are convenient for people of all ages.

Gợi ý: Be natural and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Start with a direct statement, give specific reasons, and avoid filler words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "sprawling", "scenery") and finish the sentence clearly.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Hyde Park in London. I enjoyed it when I visited before because it is a sprawling park with varied landscapes, beautiful scenery and many paths to explore, and it is easy to reach by public transport.

Gợi ý: Use more natural collocations and reduce redundancy. Begin with a clear time reference (e.g., "Recently") if appropriate, then state the place and two concise reasons using linking words.

Ví dụ: Recently I went for a walk around the lake in Zurich. The paths are well maintained and easy to walk on, and from many viewpoints you can enjoy picturesque views of the mountains.

× For example I when I leave my home in the morning I walk to the bus stop which takes me to the to my workspace and from the bus stop there I also walk to the office.

✓ For example, when I leave my home in the morning, I walk to the bus stop that takes me to my workplace, and from that bus stop I also walk to the office.

The original sentence has word order mistakes and extra words ('I' after 'For example', duplicate 'to the to my', and extraneous 'there'). This is a sentence structure error because clauses are not organized correctly. To improve, remove the extra 'I', fix 'to the to' to 'to', replace 'which' with 'that' for defining relative clause with 'bus stop', and reorder the final clause to 'from that bus stop I also walk to the office'. Use commas to separate introductory and dependent clauses.

× In total I would say I walk around 10:15 minutes and for going home.

✓ In total, I would say I walk around 10 to 15 minutes when going to work and the same when going home.

The original has awkward time expression '10:15 minutes' and unclear phrase 'and for going home.' This is a tense and expression issue: use simple present for habitual actions and a correct time range '10 to 15 minutes'. Clarify both directions by saying 'when going to work and the same when going home.' Add commas for readability.

× Usually my family and our family friends, we met up every Sunday and then explores the area around our home, the forest, the scenery.

✓ Usually my family and our family friends met up every Sunday and then explored the area around our home, such as the forest and the scenery.

The original mixes past-tense 'met up' with present 'explores'. This is a past tense error: both verbs should be in the past ('met' and 'explored'). Also remove redundant pronoun 'we' after the subject phrase. Use 'such as' to list examples. Keep consistent past tense for habitual past actions.

× And we usually walked, I don't know, maybe around 2 to 3 hours every walk.

✓ We usually walked, I don't know, for around two to three hours on each walk.

The sentence mixes conversational filler with awkward time phrasing. Use past tense 'walked' (consistent with previous past context) and a clearer duration phrase 'for around two to three hours on each walk.' Spell out numbers in words for formal speech and place the duration after 'for'.

× People like to walk in parks because it's well maintained by the government.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they are well maintained by the government.

The original uses singular 'it's' to refer to 'parks' (plural). This is a pronoun/number agreement and preposition context issue: use plural 'they are' to match 'parks'. Also ensure passive 'well maintained by the government' is fine after the plural subject.

× You don't have any usually you don't have any rocks in the pavement or in The Walking way.

✓ Usually you don't have any rocks on the pavement or on the walkway.

Original repeats 'you don't have any' and misuses prepositions and capitalization. Use 'on the pavement' and 'on the walkway' (not 'in') and avoid repetition. Lowercase common nouns like 'walkway.' This fixes pronoun repetition and preposition choice.

× Especially for elderly people it's easier and parks are usually super easy to reach by public transportation.

✓ Especially for elderly people, it's easier, and parks are usually very easy to reach by public transportation.

Using 'super' is informal and 'easier' needs a comparison target; better to say 'it's easier for elderly people' or combine clauses: 'it's easier, and parks are usually very easy to reach.' Replace 'super' with 'very' for correct register. Add comma after introductory phrase.

× I've been there several times in the past and honestly, I lost it.

✓ I've been there several times in the past and honestly, I love it.

'I lost it' is likely a mistake for 'I love it'; this is a sentence structure/word choice error altering meaning. Replace with 'I love it' to express positive feeling. Maintain present perfect 'I've been' and present simple 'I love' for general sentiment.

× It's a soup, it's a big park, you have lots to explore and the scenic is very beautiful.

✓ It's a huge park with lots to explore, and the scenery is very beautiful.

'It's a soup' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'it's superb' or 'it's huge'. Also 'the scenic' is incorrect noun use; use 'the scenery.' Combine clauses to be fluent: 'It's a huge park with lots to explore, and the scenery is very beautiful.' This fixes adjective/adverb and noun errors.

× Umm yeah. And it's super easy to reach from.

✓ And it's very easy to reach by public transport.

The original sentence is incomplete ('reach from' requires an origin). This is a sentence structure error. Provide a complete phrase: 'easy to reach by public transport' or 'easy to reach from central London.' Replace 'super' with 'very' for register.

× In Zurich I usually go for a walk around the lake because it's an easy pavement, it's well maintained, and from every viewpoint you have such an amazing picturesque scenic view to the mountains.

✓ In Zurich I usually go for a walk around the lake because the path is easy and well maintained, and from every viewpoint you have an amazingly picturesque view of the mountains.

The original misuses 'an easy pavement' (pavement is uncountable/incorrect here) and repeats similar adjectives 'amazing picturesque scenic.' Also preposition 'view to the mountains' should be 'view of the mountains.' Replace 'pavement' with 'path' or 'promenade,' use 'amazingly picturesque' and correct preposition to 'of.'