Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Fix verb forms and sentence fragments (e.g. use full sentences and correct articles).

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk a lot. I find walking is the best way to relax my mind and body, and it helps me stay fit and lose weight, so I enjoy doing it regularly.

Gợi ý: Improve accuracy and clarity: use past tense consistently, correct noun phrases, and give one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because my grandmother was an athlete. For example, we used to walk every weekend, and she taught me how to walk with good posture, which helped me stay active.

Gợi ý: Make the sentence structure clearer and more natural. Give specific reasons and use linking phrases like 'because' or 'for example.' Avoid awkward expressions such as 'unwind their feelings' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy nature and fresh air, which helps them relax after a sedentary day or long study sessions. For example, seeing trees and birds can lift their mood and reduce stress.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use conditional structure correctly and keep supporting details specific and grammatically correct. Remove redundant phrases and correct tense agreement.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a park near the mountains because seeing greenery and open views helps me relax and forget my usual sedentary routine.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense for recent past and improve cohesion. Start with a clear time phrase, then explain reason concisely. Fix verb forms and plural agreement.

Ví dụ: Lately I have been walking in parks. For the past few months I usually walk there with my teammates after intense practice because it helps our bodies recover and relax.

× I would say definitely yes, As for me, walk is the best way to restore your mind and body.

✓ I would definitely say yes. For me, walking is the best way to restore the mind and body.

Issues: sentence structure and incorrect word form. 'I would say definitely yes' is awkward word order; place 'definitely' before 'say'. 'As for me' should be 'For me'. 'walk' is a noun here but the gerund 'walking' is required to mean 'the activity of walking'. Also 'your mind and body' is inconsistent with the speaker perspective; use 'the mind and body' or 'my mind and body' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use gerund for activities and simpler sentence splits to improve clarity. Suggested fixes: move adverb before verb ('would definitely say'); use 'For me' and the gerund 'walking'.

× Helps you to be fit and shed your weights.

✓ It helps you stay fit and lose weight.

Problems: sentence fragment lacking an explicit subject and auxiliary. 'Helps' starts a clause without subject; use 'It helps'. 'Be fit' is better expressed as 'stay fit'. 'Shed your weights' is unnatural; use 'lose weight' (singular, uncountable). Suggestions: always include subject and use natural collocations ('lose weight').

× That's why I like walking.

✓ That's why I like walking.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. It correctly uses the gerund 'walking' to refer to the activity and has proper structure.

× I would say definitely yes because my grandma was athlete who achieve greatness.

✓ I would definitely say yes because my grandma was an athlete who achieved great things.

Errors: missing article before 'athlete' ('an athlete') and wrong verb tense/agreement: 'achieve' should be past 'achieved' to match 'was'. 'Greatness' is abstract and fits poorly here; 'achieved great things' is clearer. Also adverb placement: 'definitely' before 'say'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and match verb tense to past context.

× So when I was a child I always used to walk with her when I have a free time and she also taught me how to walk balanced.

✓ When I was a child I always used to walk with her when I had free time, and she also taught me how to walk with balance.

Problems: tense inconsistency — 'used to' and 'was' are past, but 'have' should be past 'had'. 'a free time' is incorrect article usage: 'free time' is uncountable so no article. 'How to walk balanced' is unidiomatic; use 'walk with balance' or 'walk in a balanced way'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past for past habitual actions and use correct forms for uncountable nouns and adverbial phrases.

× I think that people like walking while looking at nature and other things which is unwind their feelings after passive lifestyle and studies.

✓ I think people enjoy walking while looking at nature and other sights, which helps them unwind after a passive lifestyle and studying.

Errors: 'like' vs 'enjoy' preference and wordiness. 'Which is unwind their feelings' is ungrammatical: relative clause needs correct verb and subject — 'which helps them unwind'. 'After passive lifestyle and studies' is awkward; use 'after a passive lifestyle and studying' or 'after long periods of study'. Also 'other things' vague; 'other sights' or 'the scenery' works better. Suggestion: use correct relative clause structure 'which helps them...' and choose clearer nouns/gerunds.

× So walking in park encourage them more than.

✓ So walking in the park encourages them more.

Errors: missing definite article before 'park' — use 'the park'. Subject-verb agreement: 'walking in the park' (singular noun phrase) takes singular verb 'encourages'. The sentence ends with 'more than' but lacks a comparison object; removing 'than' corrects it. Suggestion: include articles and ensure subject-verb agreement; if making a comparison, specify 'than what'.

× If I had a chance to take a long walk I would definitely choose parks because while I'm walking I can see I can clearly see nature surrounded by mountains and greens which is helps me to relax and unwind my passive lifestyle.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would definitely choose parks because while I'm walking I can clearly see nature surrounded by mountains and greenery, which helps me relax and unwind from my passive lifestyle.

Issues: article usage 'a chance' -> 'the chance' is more natural here; comma after conditional clause improves readability. Repetition 'I can see I can clearly see' remove redundancy. 'Greens' is unnatural; use 'greenery'. Relative clause 'which is helps me' incorrect — should be 'which helps me'. Use 'unwind from' or 'unwind after' rather than 'unwind my passive lifestyle'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct relative clause verbs, and choose correct nouns ('greenery').

× The last few months I tend to walk in parks because I always walk with my teammates after long practice which is help us to relax our body after intense practice.

✓ In the last few months, I have tended to walk in parks because I always walk with my teammates after long practice, which helps us relax our bodies after intense training.

Errors: tense and aspect: 'The last few months I tend' should be 'In the last few months, I have tended' or 'I have been tending' to indicate recent habitual action. Relative clause 'which is help us' incorrect; use 'which helps us'. 'Relax our body' number agreement: 'bodies' plural to match 'us'. Repetition 'practice' twice is redundant; use 'training' or remove one. Suggestion: use present perfect to describe recent habits and ensure subject-verb and number agreement.