Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Correct pronunciation and word choice (walk vs work) and improve sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite a lot. For example, I walk to university every day, which takes about 50 minutes. However, for my health I think I should walk even more, even though I also go to the gym regularly.

Gợi ý: Reduce errors and use correct verb forms and articles. Provide clearer sequencing with linking words. Keep sentences natural and concise, and correct small repetition and grammar mistakes.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often walked to a large park near my house when I was a child. After school I would go there with my friends to jog and run, which was always relaxing.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., benefit, stress relief) and linking words to make the answer coherent. Avoid repeating the same phrase 'get healthier'.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because it benefits both their physical and mental health. For example, walking provides gentle exercise, improves cardiovascular fitness and also helps reduce stress because of the peaceful surroundings.

Gợi ý: Use correct verb forms and expressions (e.g., 'climb Mount Fuji' not 'woke up'). Start with a clear topic sentence then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and ensure tense consistency.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would like to climb Mount Fuji. Climbing it would be a personal challenge and I imagine the view from the summit would be spectacular.

Gợi ý: Use correct past tenses and article use, and give clear, concise details. Start with a direct past-tense topic sentence, then add specifics (when, what you saw) using linking words. Fix place names and grammar.

Ví dụ: Recently I walked to Miyazu, north of Kyoto, which has spectacular sea views. Last Sunday I had free time, so I went there to enjoy the scenery and take some photos.

× I don't work a lot every day I walk to university and it takes about 50 minutes.

✓ I don't walk a lot every day. I walk to university and it takes about 50 minutes.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk', which is a wrong verb choice rather than tense; however the sentence also lacks punctuation and repeats idea. Correct to present simple 'walk' to match habitual action and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I don't walk a lot every day. I walk to university...' and ensure verbs reflect intended meaning.

× But for my health I think I should work more, although I go to gym regularly.

✓ But for my health I think I should walk more, although I go to the gym regularly.

The original used 'work' which is incorrect meaning; 'should' is fine as a modal. Also 'go to gym' needs article 'the' before 'gym' and 'walk' fits context. Suggestion: use 'should walk more' and include 'the gym'.

× Yes, when I was young I often walked to the large park near my house.

✓ Yes, when I was young I often walked to the large park near my house.

This sentence is correct in past simple for habitual past action; no change needed.

× After school I I went the park with my friend and played jogging and running.

✓ After school I went to the park with my friend and went jogging and running.

Errors: duplicated 'I', missing preposition 'to' after 'went', and awkward 'played jogging'. Use 'went jogging' or 'jogged and ran'. Suggestion: 'I went to the park with my friend and went jogging and running' or 'I went to the park with my friend and we jogged and ran.'

× It was a relaxing time.

✓ It was a relaxing time.

This sentence is correct; past simple is appropriate to describe a past experience.

× I think this is because they can be healthier, so we need to get the exercise to get healthier and to lengthen our life.

✓ I think this is because walking can make people healthier, so we need to get exercise to improve our health and lengthen our lives.

Issues: vague pronoun reference and awkward phrasing 'get the exercise to get healthier' and 'lengthen our life' (singular). Use 'walking' or 'people' and plural 'lives'. Also omit unnecessary article 'the' before 'exercise'. Suggestion: use 'walking can make people healthier' and 'lengthen our lives.'

× If I have a chance I want to woke up Mount Fuji.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to climb Mount Fuji.

Conditional sentence requires past simple 'had' in the if-clause for an unreal present/future condition, and 'would like' in the main clause. 'Woke up' is incorrect for climbing; use 'climb'. Suggestion: 'If I had the chance, I would like to climb Mount Fuji.'

× Through climbing I want to achieve something big and definitely the view from the summit of Mount Fuji is spectacular.

✓ By climbing, I want to achieve something big, and definitely the view from the summit of Mount Fuji would be spectacular.

Use 'by climbing' (preposition + -ing) to express means. Also sequence of tenses: with hypothetical 'If I had the chance' earlier, main clause should reflect conditional 'would be spectacular'. Suggestion: use 'By climbing' and match conditional with 'would be'.

× Lately I walk to Mysore in Kyoto.

✓ Lately I walked to Miyazu in Kyoto.

Problems: tense mismatch ('lately' with present simple is possible but context asks 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' so past simple is required). Also 'Mysore' seems wrong for Kyoto; likely 'Miyazu' or 'Misono'—here corrected to 'Miyazu' (a coastal area in Kyoto prefecture). If the place is different, replace with correct place name. Suggestion: use past simple 'I walked' and ensure correct place name.

× Mysore is the north of Kyoto and has a spectacular views of sea.

✓ Miyazu is in the north of Kyoto and has spectacular views of the sea.

Use 'in the north of' for location, remove extra article before 'spectacular views' and add 'the' before 'sea'. Also corrected place name to 'Miyazu'. Suggestion: 'is in the north of Kyoto' and 'spectacular views of the sea.'

× So last Sunday I have a free time so I went there and enjoy the view.

✓ So last Sunday I had free time, so I went there and enjoyed the view.

Use past simple 'had' for a past event, and 'enjoyed' (past) to match 'went'. Also remove unnecessary article 'a' before 'free time'. Suggestion: 'I had free time, so I went there and enjoyed the view.'