Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid minor grammar mistakes (use present simple consistently) and reduce redundancy. For example, say you enjoy Muay Thai, then briefly explain how it benefits you with specific examples and a linking word.

Ví dụ: I practise Muay Thai, a martial art from Thailand. It keeps me fit and improves my agility and flexibility, so I move more confidently during sports. Additionally, it helps my mental health because regular training reduces my stress and boosts my concentration.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary and grammar, remove filler words, and organise the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two concise details (who taught you, a notable achievement). Use past tense consistently and specific wording (e.g. "into chess", "city's competition", "took fourth place").

Ví dụ: Yes, I was really into chess as a child. My dad taught me to play, and after two years I entered my city’s chess competition and took fourth place, which encouraged me to keep practising.

Gợi ý: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details about progression and current situation. Use consistent tenses and avoid awkward phrases like "is that one hobby" or "eventually it becomes".

Ví dụ: Yes, programming is a hobby I started at 12 and I still enjoy it. Over time I improved my skills, built several projects, and it eventually became my profession — I now work as a software engineer.

Gợi ý: Clarify and simplify: give a direct answer (no), then briefly explain why with specific reasons and avoid wrong word choices (use "unique" and "path", not "trope"). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences natural.

Ví dụ: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. I prefer to explore activities that suit my interests because I value being independent, and choosing my own path has helped me develop skills that are meaningful to me.

× It is Muay Thai martial art that came to us from Thailand.

✓ It is the Muay Thai martial art that came to us from Thailand.

Missing definite article before a specific martial art: use 'the' when referring to a specific, known thing. Add 'the' to make the noun phrase correct. Suggestion: Use 'the Muay Thai martial art' when specifying that particular martial art.

× I really enjoy this martial art because it improves my agility, flexibility and even improved my mental health.

✓ I really enjoy this martial art because it improves my agility and flexibility and has even improved my mental health.

Mixed tenses: 'improves' (present) and 'improved' (past) used together about the same ongoing effect. Use consistent present perfect 'has improved' to show an effect that began in the past and continues now. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent; use present simple for general effects and present perfect for past actions with present relevance.

× When I was a kid I was skin into chess.

✓ When I was a kid I was into chess.

Incorrect verb phrase 'skin into' is not valid. The correct expression is 'be into' meaning 'interested in'. Remove 'skin'. Suggestion: Use 'be into' to express interest: 'I was into chess.'

× My dad taught me how to play it and uh, I played for two years and then came to our cities competition and take a fourth place in it.

✓ My dad taught me how to play, and I played for two years. Then I entered our city's competition and took fourth place.

Several issues: punctuation and sentence separation for clarity; incorrect verb forms and prepositions. 'Came to our cities competition' is wrong — use 'entered' or 'took part in' and possessive 'city's'. 'Take a fourth place' should be past tense 'took fourth place'. Suggestion: Use 'entered' for participating in a competition and past tense 'took' to describe the result.

× Yes, programming is that one hobby that I've been doing since I was 12 years old and I'm still coding and eventually it becomes my main profession, so I'm working as a software engineer right now.

✓ Yes, programming is a hobby that I've been doing since I was 12 years old, and I'm still coding; eventually it became my main profession, so I'm working as a software engineer right now.

Tense inconsistency: 'I've been doing' (present perfect continuous) is correct for ongoing activity, but 'eventually it becomes my main profession' should be past 'became' because it already happened leading to current job. Use past simple 'became'. Also 'that one hobby' is awkward; use 'a hobby' or 'the hobby'. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent: use present perfect for duration and past simple for events that led to the present.

× Now I have a different ones because I think it is important to be a unique person and pursue your own trope or path in your life.

✓ Now I have different ones because I think it is important to be a unique person and pursue your own path in life.

Pronoun and article errors: 'a different ones' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'ones'; remove 'a'. 'Trope' is incorrect in this context — use 'path'. Also 'in your life' is okay but simpler 'in life' is natural. Suggestion: Match number between article and noun ('different ones' without 'a') and use appropriate nouns ('path' not 'trope').

× So I'm choosing something unique for me.

✓ So I choose something unique for myself.

Use of progressive 'I'm choosing' is acceptable but 'for me' is less natural than reflexive 'for myself' when referring to personal choice. Simple present 'I choose' fits habitual action better. Suggestion: Use reflexive pronoun 'myself' for actions affecting the speaker, and simple present for general habits.