Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Yeah, there were many rules. In my junior high school, for example, students must wear the uniforms and they were not allowed to wear black.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
No, I think less rules are more appropriate for students because if there are so many rules, students will lose their opportunities to learn how to self-discipline.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Thí sinh
Yes. Uh, when I was in primary school, uh, I had a very great fine art teacher. He was a calm, reserved person and also he was very kind and he used to teach me how to draw by watercolors.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答は基本的に質問に答えていますが、文法の一貫性(時制の一致)と自然な表現を改善しましょう。また、詳細をもう少し具体的に述べると良いです。例えば、「must wear uniforms」や「not allowed to wear black」について、なぜそのようなルールがあるのか説明すると効果的です。
Ví dụ: Yes, there were many rules at my junior high school. For example, students had to wear uniforms, but black clothing was not allowed because it was considered too formal and not suitable for school. These rules helped maintain a sense of unity among students.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答は明確で論理的ですが、「less rules」ではなく「fewer rules」が正しい表現です。また、理由をもう少し具体的に説明し、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。
Ví dụ: No, I think fewer rules are better for students because having too many rules can limit their chances to develop self-discipline. For instance, when students are trusted to manage their own behavior, they learn responsibility more effectively.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答に「uh」が多く含まれており、流暢さを妨げています。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、文をつなぐ接続詞を使うと良いでしょう。また、「very great」は不自然なので「excellent」などに置き換えましょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had an excellent fine art teacher in primary school. He was calm and kind, and he taught me how to paint with watercolors, which greatly improved my artistic skills.
× students must wear the uniforms
✓ students must wear uniforms
In English, when talking about clothing in general, we usually do not use the definite article 'the' before plural nouns like 'uniforms'. Using 'the uniforms' implies specific uniforms already known, but here it is general, so 'uniforms' without 'the' is correct.
× they were not allowed to wear black
✓ they were not allowed to wear black clothes
The phrase 'wear black' is understandable but incomplete. Adding 'clothes' clarifies the meaning. However, this is more about clarity than grammar. The past tense 'were not allowed' is correct here.
× less rules are more appropriate for students
✓ fewer rules are more appropriate for students
'Rules' is a countable noun, so we use 'fewer' instead of 'less'. 'Less' is used with uncountable nouns. Therefore, 'fewer rules' is grammatically correct.
× students will lose their opportunities to learn how to self-discipline
✓ students will lose their opportunities to learn how to self-discipline themselves
The verb 'self-discipline' is usually reflexive, so it should be followed by a reflexive pronoun like 'themselves'. Without it, the sentence sounds incomplete.