Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Of course there is. I went to a professional nursing school and there are many rules like we should all keep our we should not put all our hairs, we should not let it down or touch our shoulders. We should always dress corporately, we should always make sure that everything go accordingly as our dream.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course they will. I am also a student and I understand all those rules that they lay for us in our school. So it benefits us positively, especially during our clinical posting, how they teach us well and we all have to meet up with the rules and regulations.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Thí sinh
Yes I do and that was my class coordinator. Her name is Missus Yaru. The woman was like a mother to every student in my school. We really love her because she love everyone and she don't she doesn't allow us to failed in any exam of ours. She really tried all her best you know.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Your answer has good content but it is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better. For example, you can say: "Yes, there are several rules at my nursing school. For instance, we must keep our hair tied up and not let it touch our shoulders. Additionally, we are required to dress professionally to maintain a corporate appearance."
Ví dụ: Yes, there are several rules at my nursing school. For instance, we must keep our hair tied up and not let it touch our shoulders. Additionally, we are required to dress professionally to maintain a corporate appearance.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. Also, avoid repeating the same idea. For example, you can say: "Yes, I believe more rules would benefit students. This is because during clinical postings, strict rules help us learn better and ensure we follow professional standards."
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe more rules would benefit students. This is because during clinical postings, strict rules help us learn better and ensure we follow professional standards.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Your answer shows good feelings but has some grammar mistakes and unclear parts. Try to use correct grammar and link your ideas clearly. For example: "Yes, my class coordinator, Mrs. Yaru, does her job very well. She is like a mother to all students and always supports us to succeed in our exams."
Ví dụ: Yes, my class coordinator, Mrs. Yaru, does her job very well. She is like a mother to all students and always supports us to succeed in our exams.
× Of course there is.
✓ Of course there are.
The subject 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.
× I went to a professional nursing school and there are many rules like we should all keep our we should not put all our hairs, we should not let it down or touch our shoulders.
✓ I went to a professional nursing school and there are many rules, like we should all keep our hair; we should not let it down or touch our shoulders.
The sentence is run-on and unclear. 'Hairs' is incorrect; 'hair' is uncountable here. Also, the phrase 'put all our hairs' is incorrect. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.
× We should always dress corporately, we should always make sure that everything go accordingly as our dream.
✓ We should always dress appropriately; we should always make sure that everything goes according to our dream.
'Corporately' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'appropriately'. Also, 'go' should be 'goes' to agree with singular subject 'everything'. 'Accordingly as our dream' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'according to our dream'.
× So it benefits us positively, especially during our clinical posting, how they teach us well and we all have to meet up with the rules and regulations.
✓ So it benefits us positively, especially during our clinical posting, because they teach us well and we all have to meet the rules and regulations.
The phrase 'how they teach us well' is awkward and incorrect here; 'because they teach us well' is clearer. Also, 'meet up with the rules' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet the rules'.
× We really love her because she love everyone and she don't she doesn't allow us to failed in any exam of ours.
✓ We really love her because she loves everyone and she doesn't allow us to fail in any of our exams.
'She love' should be 'she loves' to agree with third person singular. 'She don't' is incorrect; it should be 'she doesn't'. 'Failed' is past tense; after 'allow us to' the base form 'fail' is correct. 'Any exam of ours' is awkward; 'any of our exams' is better.