Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
As there are numerous rules in our in my school like we need to dress well and cleanly, we are not allowed to take our mobile phone in our school and we need to do our works like et cetera.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Yes, I believe that estrogen will be more benefited by the rules said by the schools because people like student will be more concentrated in their studies when there is rule when the school is strict and can be more successful in.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Thí sinh
As there there is many teachers who do their job very well but one of them is Durga Laser which very attending, attentive and very.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Your answer should be more organized and clear. Try to avoid redundancy and incomplete phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of rules.
Ví dụ: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear clean and proper uniforms, are not allowed to bring mobile phones, and must complete their assignments on time.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Focus on expressing your opinion clearly with correct grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid irrelevant words.
Ví dụ: Yes, I think students would benefit from more rules because strict regulations help them focus better on their studies and improve their success.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details about the teacher's qualities. Use correct grammar and linking words.
Ví dụ: Yes, I have a teacher named Durga Laser who does her job very well. She is very attentive to students' needs and always explains lessons clearly.
× As there are numerous rules in our in my school like we need to dress well and cleanly, we are not allowed to take our mobile phone in our school and we need to do our works like et cetera.
✓ As there are numerous rules in my school, like we need to dress well and cleanly, we are not allowed to take our mobile phones to school, and we need to do our work, etc.
The phrase 'in our in my school' is incorrect due to repetition and wrong preposition use. Also, 'take our mobile phone in our school' should be 'take our mobile phones to school' because 'to' is the correct preposition for movement towards a place. 'Works' should be 'work' as 'work' is uncountable in this context.
× As there are numerous rules in our in my school like we need to dress well and cleanly, we are not allowed to take our mobile phone in our school and we need to do our works like et cetera.
✓ As there are numerous rules in my school, like we need to dress well and cleanly, we are not allowed to take our mobile phones to school, and we need to do our work, etc.
The word 'phone' should be plural 'phones' because it refers to mobile phones of multiple students. Also, 'works' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable and should be singular here.
× Yes, I believe that estrogen will be more benefited by the rules said by the schools because people like student will be more concentrated in their studies when there is rule when the school is strict and can be more successful in.
✓ Yes, I believe that students will benefit more from the rules set by the schools because students will be more concentrated on their studies when the school is strict and can be more successful.
'Will be more benefited' is incorrect; 'will benefit' is the correct modal verb usage. 'Estrogen' is a wrong word here; it should be 'students'. 'Said by the schools' should be 'set by the schools'. 'People like student' should be 'students'. 'When there is rule' should be 'when there are rules'. The sentence ending 'can be more successful in' is incomplete and corrected to 'can be more successful'.
× Yes, I believe that estrogen will be more benefited by the rules said by the schools because people like student will be more concentrated in their studies when there is rule when the school is strict and can be more successful in.
✓ Yes, I believe that students will benefit more from the rules set by the schools because students will be more concentrated on their studies when the school is strict and can be more successful.
'Estrogen' is incorrect and should be 'students' (plural). 'People like student' should be 'students' (plural). 'There is rule' should be 'there are rules' (plural).
× Yes, I believe that estrogen will be more benefited by the rules said by the schools because people like student will be more concentrated in their studies when there is rule when the school is strict and can be more successful in.
✓ Yes, I believe that students will benefit more from the rules set by the schools because students will be more concentrated on their studies when the school is strict and can be more successful.
The phrase 'concentrated in their studies' should be 'concentrated on their studies' because 'concentrate on' is the correct prepositional phrase.
× Yes, I believe that estrogen will be more benefited by the rules said by the schools because people like student will be more concentrated in their studies when there is rule when the school is strict and can be more successful in.
✓ Yes, I believe that students will benefit more from the rules set by the schools because students will be more concentrated on their studies when the school is strict and can be more successful.
The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and completeness, such as removing repeated 'when' and completing the final thought.
× As there there is many teachers who do their job very well but one of them is Durga Laser which very attending, attentive and very.
✓ There are many teachers who do their job very well, but one of them is Durga Laser, who is very attentive and caring.
'There is many teachers' is incorrect; it should be 'There are many teachers' because 'teachers' is plural. 'Which' should be 'who' when referring to a person. 'Very attending' is incorrect; 'attentive' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion.
× As there there is many teachers who do their job very well but one of them is Durga Laser which very attending, attentive and very.
✓ There are many teachers who do their job very well, but one of them is Durga Laser, who is very attentive and caring.
The pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used for a person; 'who' should be used instead.
× As there there is many teachers who do their job very well but one of them is Durga Laser which very attending, attentive and very.
✓ There are many teachers who do their job very well, but one of them is Durga Laser, who is very attentive and caring.
The sentence is incomplete and awkward. It needs to be restructured for clarity and completeness, including removing repeated words and completing the description.