Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you often go to the library?
Thí sinh
I don't go to library often, I just went there if I need a certain requirement for my graduation. So most of the time I spend time using the Internet resource.
Giám khảo
What do you usually do in the library?
Thí sinh
I normally just explore for the history book because I think, yeah, not all interesting history book I can get from Internet. So I think library is the best place where you can get a amazing history book.
Giám khảo
Did you go to the library when you were a kid?
Thí sinh
Nope, never. I only I start to visit librarians since I was in high school because that's the time when I need I I was introduced to library and I never know about library before.
Giám khảo
Do Chinese kids often go to the library?
Thí sinh
I think that many Chinese kid visit, like most of Chinese kids visit the library, the library because I think it's their culture. Also also to read as many as possible about books and I think the culture in their family.
Do you often go to the library?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban lebih alami serta efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata. Misalnya, gunakan kalimat langsung dan hindari kesalahan seperti 'I just went there if I need'.
Ví dụ: I don't often go to the library; I usually visit only when I need materials for my graduation. Most of the time, I rely on online resources.
What do you usually do in the library?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan linking words untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Gunakan kosakata yang tepat dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'I think'.
Ví dụ: I usually look for history books in the library because not all interesting books are available online. Therefore, the library is the best place to find amazing history books.
Did you go to the library when you were a kid?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat lengkap yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan.
Ví dụ: No, I didn't go to the library as a kid. I only started visiting the library in high school when I was introduced to it and needed to use its resources.
Do Chinese kids often go to the library?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dan hindari pengulangan kata.
Ví dụ: I believe many Chinese children often visit the library because reading is an important part of their culture and family values.
× I don't go to library often, I just went there if I need a certain requirement for my graduation.
✓ I don't go to the library often, I just went there if I need a certain requirement for my graduation.
The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.
× I just went there if I need a certain requirement for my graduation.
✓ I just go there if I need a certain requirement for my graduation.
The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present tense 'need'. Since the condition is general, the present tense 'go' should be used with 'if I need' to express habitual action.
× So most of the time I spend time using the Internet resource.
✓ So most of the time I spend time using Internet resources.
The noun 'resource' should be plural 'resources' because it refers to multiple materials available on the Internet.
× I normally just explore for the history book because I think, yeah, not all interesting history book I can get from Internet.
✓ I normally just explore the history books because I think, yeah, not all interesting history books I can get from the Internet.
The verb 'explore' does not require the preposition 'for' in this context. Also, 'history book' should be plural 'history books' to match 'all interesting'. 'From Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'.
× So I think library is the best place where you can get a amazing history book.
✓ So I think the library is the best place where you can get an amazing history book.
The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'a amazing' is incorrect; 'an amazing' is correct because 'amazing' starts with a vowel sound.
× I only I start to visit librarians since I was in high school because that's the time when I need I I was introduced to library and I never know about library before.
✓ I only started to visit libraries since I was in high school because that's the time when I needed, I was introduced to the library and I never knew about the library before.
The verb 'start' should be in past tense 'started' to match 'since I was in high school'. 'Need' should be past tense 'needed'. 'Know' should be past tense 'knew'. 'Librarians' is incorrect here; 'libraries' is appropriate. Also, 'library' requires the definite article 'the'.
× I think that many Chinese kid visit, like most of Chinese kids visit the library, the library because I think it's their culture.
✓ I think that many Chinese kids visit, like most Chinese kids visit the library because I think it's their culture.
The singular noun 'kid' should be plural 'kids' to agree with 'many'. The repeated phrase 'the library, the library' is redundant and should be corrected to a single 'the library'.
× Also also to read as many as possible about books and I think the culture in their family.
✓ Also, they try to read as many books as possible and I think it's part of the culture in their family.
The phrase 'Also also to read as many as possible about books' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be rephrased to 'Also, they try to read as many books as possible'. The conjunction 'and' connects two clauses properly. Adding 'it's part of' clarifies the meaning.