Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Dùng câu trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “def definitely”) và dùng cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn cho ‘recharge my bad energy’ và ‘lead my mood’. Tăng tính liên kết bằng 1-2 câu bổ sung cụ thể về khi nào bạn hát và cảm giác sau đó.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I often sing in my free time because it helps me relax and improve my mood. For example, I usually go to karaoke with my family on weekends, and singing together makes me feel refreshed and closer to them.

Gợi ý: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (tense, word order). Tránh cụm từ khó hiểu như ‘canvas story subject’ và ‘let me is fresh my feelings’. Nên nêu thời điểm cụ thể, loại lớp và một lý do rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

Ví dụ: Yes. I started formal singing lessons in high school because it was part of the curriculum. I enjoyed the classes since they helped me express my emotions and spend time practising with my friends.

Gợi ý: Tránh nhắc lại từ giống nhau (‘beloved, beloved’) và sửa cấu trúc câu không hoàn chỉnh. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh (ví dụ: sinh nhật, hội họp gia đình) để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

Ví dụ: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because I feel comfortable with them. For instance, I often sing at family celebrations like birthdays, which helps me share my feelings and create happy memories.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có nội dung tốt nhưng cần ngắt câu, loại bỏ tiếng phụ (umm) và sửa một vài cấu trúc lủng củng (‘after a headache day’). Thêm liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng và cho ví dụ cụ thể, ngắn gọn về hiệu quả.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Singing helps relieve stress and improve people’s mood. For example, singing along to my favourite songs after a stressful day helps me relax, distracts me from worries and slows my breathing.

Gợi ý: Tránh lặp từ (‘I often I often’), sửa ‘other people's song’ thành ‘others sing’ hoặc ‘other people singing’. Thêm một câu giải thích vì sao bạn thích nghe họ hát và một ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh nghe.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially if they are talented. For instance, I often listen to my family members and close friends when they practice, because their voices are beautiful and I can really get lost in the melody.

Gợi ý: Sửa ngữ pháp (haven't took → haven't taken/ haven't had; attended). Nên nói rõ bạn đã tham gia loại bài học nào ở trường và nêu mục tiêu cụ thể khi muốn học thêm (ví dụ: breathing, pitch, stage confidence). Giữ câu ngắn, mạch lạc và dùng liên từ để nối mục tiêu học.

Ví dụ: I haven't taken any formal private singing classes, but I did attend mandatory singing lessons at school. In the future, I’d like to join a proper vocal course to improve my breathing, pitch control and stage confidence so I can enjoy singing even more.

× I'll def definitely.

✓ I'll definitely.

The student used an unnecessary duplication 'def definitely'. Remove 'def' to leave the correct modal/auxiliary contraction 'I'll' plus adverb 'definitely'. Suggestion: say 'I'll definitely' or 'I definitely will'.

× it helps me recharge my bad energy and lead my mood.

✓ it helps me recharge my energy and improve my mood.

'Bad energy' is nonstandard; use 'energy'. 'Lead my mood' is incorrect collocation; use 'improve my mood'. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives and common collocations: 'recharge my energy' and 'improve my mood'.

× I often go to karaoke with my family and our friends when I have time.

✓ I often go to karaoke with my family and friends when I have time.

Redundant 'our' is unnecessary. While sentence is acceptable, removing 'our' makes it natural. Also 'go to karaoke' is okay in spoken style; could say 'go to karaoke bars' for clarity.

× I started learning to sing when I was at high school.

✓ I started learning to sing when I was in high school.

Use preposition 'in' with 'high school' to indicate being enrolled at that level. 'At high school' is used in some varieties but 'in high school' is standard in this context.

× High school student singing was actually a canvas story subject in the curriculum and I really enjoyed it because it let me is fresh my feelings and spend more time with friends while listening to them sing.

✓ High school singing was actually a compulsory subject in the curriculum, and I really enjoyed it because it allowed me to express my feelings and spend more time with friends while listening to them sing.

Multiple issues: 'High school student singing' is awkward; 'High school singing' or 'the singing class' is clearer. 'Canvas story subject' is incorrect — likely 'compulsory' or 'a core subject'. 'Let me is fresh my feelings' is ungrammatical; use 'allowed me to express my feelings'. 'Let' requires base verb form; here 'allowed me to' is better. Suggestion: simplify phrase and use correct verb structures: 'allowed me to express'.

× I honestly want to sing for my friends or family because they are my beloved, beloved one Once.

✓ I honestly want to sing for my friends or family because they are my beloved ones.

Problems: 'they are my beloved, beloved one Once' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use plural 'beloved ones' to match 'friends or family' (plural). Remove repeated words and stray 'Once'.

× Singing lets me express my feelings and share my stories.

✓ Singing lets me express my feelings and share my stories.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Explanation: sentence structure is fine and verbs parallel; keep as is.

× For example, my family gatherings when I celebrate together.

✓ For example, at family gatherings when we celebrate together.

Original fragment lacks verb and correct preposition. Add preposition 'at' and 'when we celebrate together' to form a full clause. Suggestion: include a verb and correct preposition: 'at family gatherings when we celebrate together'.

× I think singing is a great way to relieve stress and lift up people's mood.

✓ I think singing is a great way to relieve stress and lift people's moods.

Use 'lift' without 'up' is acceptable but 'lift people's moods' is more natural and 'mood' should be plural to refer to different people. Suggestion: use plural 'moods' when referring to multiple people.

× For example, singing UMM singing along to my favorite songs can help me feel refreshed after a headache day because of focusing on the music.

✓ For example, singing along to my favorite songs can help me feel refreshed after a tough day because focusing on the music distracts me from headaches.

Remove filler 'UMM'. 'After a headache day' is unnatural; use 'after a tough day' or 'after a day with a headache'. Reorder clause: 'because focusing on the music' should be linked to how it helps; make result clearer. Suggestion: simplify and clarify cause and effect.

× UMM distracts me from worries and helps me breathe more slowly.

✓ It distracts me from worries and helps me breathe more slowly.

Replace 'UMM' (hesitation filler) with proper pronoun 'It' referring to singing or music. Filler words should be omitted in corrected sentences.

× I enjoy listening to other people's song.

✓ I enjoy listening to other people's songs.

Singular 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match 'people's' (plural possessive). Use plural to indicate songs by various people.

× I often I often listen to my family members and my best friend because they have a beautiful voice and I can really immerse myself in the melodies.

✓ I often listen to my family members and my best friend because they have beautiful voices and I can really immerse myself in the melodies.

Remove duplicated phrase 'I often'. 'They have a beautiful voice' mismatches plural subject; use 'beautiful voices'. Maintain present tense 'listen'.

× Actually, I haven't took any formal singing classes, although I did TA attend some singing lessons at school because it was a mandatory subject.

✓ Actually, I haven't taken any formal singing classes, although I did attend some singing lessons at school because it was a mandatory subject.

Use present perfect 'haven't taken' (past participle 'taken' not 'took'). Remove typo 'TA'. 'Did attend' is acceptable for emphasis; here keep 'did attend'. Suggestion: use correct past participle and remove extraneous characters.

× In the future, I'd like to join a proper vocal class to improve my vocal technique and to relax and enjoy singing more.

✓ In the future, I'd like to join a proper vocal class to improve my vocal technique and to relax and enjoy singing more.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Explanation: 'I'd like to' correctly expresses future intention; parallel infinitives are correctly used.