Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and ensure clarity. For example, combine short sentences and clarify expressions like "something over" to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy singing even though I'm not very good at it. I've loved it since I was a kid because it helps me relax and clear my mind, allowing me to forget distractions and enjoy the moment.

Gợi ý: Focus on clarity and correct vocabulary. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like "school queer" and "just to know. Or is this something I would want to?" Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide a clear timeline of your learning experience.

Ví dụ: Yes, I used to learn singing when I was at school; I was part of the school choir. Additionally, I took extra classes with a music teacher. Just before moving to Australia, I attended some professional singing lessons to see if I wanted to pursue it further.

Gợi ý: Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions like "with God's grace are a part of. What's magical powers?" Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas and clearly stating your intentions. Keep sentences complete and relevant.

Ví dụ: At the moment, I sing just for myself because it makes me happy. However, if I ever get the chance and with a bit of luck, I would love to sing for a platform like Coke Studio, which I admire.

Gợi ý: Make your answer more natural and fluent by combining short, fragmented sentences into complete ones. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and avoid unclear phrases like "Droid life."

Ví dụ: I consider singing a form of therapy because it transports you to a different world. It helps you detach from reality for a while, allowing you to enjoy the moment and feel positive vibes.

× Although I'm not good at it, but singing is something over I really enjoy since I was a kid.

✓ Although I'm not good at it, singing is something I have really enjoyed since I was a kid.

Using both 'although' and 'but' together is redundant and incorrect. Choose either 'although' or 'but' to connect clauses, not both. Also, 'over' is unnecessary and 'have really enjoyed' fits better to express a continuous action from past to present.

× It helps me to freshen up my mind.

✓ It helps me freshen up my mind.

The verb 'help' is commonly followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Using 'to' here is unnecessary and less natural in English (Australia).

× And just shut down all the distractions.

✓ It just shuts down all the distractions.

This sentence fragment lacks a subject and verb agreement. Adding 'It' as the subject and changing the verb to 'shuts' agrees with singular subject 'singing'.

× And just enjoy the present.

✓ And I just enjoy the present.

This fragment lacks a subject. Adding 'I' clarifies who enjoys the present, making the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× I used to learn.

✓ I used to learn singing.

The sentence is incomplete and vague. Adding 'singing' clarifies what was learned. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× When I was back in school, I was in school queer. In.

✓ When I was back in school, I was in the school choir.

The phrase 'school queer' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'school choir'. Correcting it clarifies the meaning. Also, 'in' at the end is unnecessary and removed.

× Then I used to take some extra classes from one of my music teachers and just right before I was coming to Australia, I took some professional classes just to know.

✓ Then I used to take some extra classes from one of my music teachers, and just before I came to Australia, I took some professional classes to find out.

The phrase 'right before I was coming' is incorrect; 'just before I came' is the correct past tense. Also, 'just to know' is incomplete; 'to find out' better expresses the purpose.

× Or is this something I would want to?

✓ Whether this is something I would want to do.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'Whether' and 'do' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Nobody at the moment. I just. Sing for myself, it makes me happy as I mentioned,

✓ Nobody at the moment. I just sing for myself; it makes me happy, as I mentioned.

The original has sentence fragments and punctuation errors. Combining sentences properly and adding commas improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× If I ever get any opportunity and with God's grace are a part of.

✓ If I ever get any opportunity and, with God's grace, am a part of it.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and object. Adding 'am' and 'it' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun usage.

× What's magical powers?

✓ What magical powers?

'What's' is a contraction of 'what is', which is incorrect here. The correct form is 'What magical powers?' as a question.

× If I happen to get a beautiful voice, I would love to sing for this Coke studio there.

✓ If I happen to get a beautiful voice, I would love to sing for Coke Studio there.

'This' before 'Coke Studio' is unnecessary and incorrect because 'Coke Studio' is a proper noun. Removing 'this' makes the sentence correct.

× I consider singing as a therapy.

✓ I consider singing to be a therapy.

The verb 'consider' is followed by 'to be' rather than 'as' when expressing a role or function. Using 'to be' is grammatically correct in English (Australia).

× It just takes you to a totally different world.

✓ It just takes you to a totally different world.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Helps too. Just. Detached from the reality for a little bit.

✓ It helps you to just detach from reality for a little bit.

The original is fragmented and uses 'detached' incorrectly. 'Detach' is the correct verb form here, and the sentence needs to be complete with subject and verb.

× And enjoy the moment and be in the moment.

✓ And enjoy the moment and be in the moment.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Enjoy. The Vibes. Droid life.

✓ Enjoy the vibes of daily life.

'The Vibes' should not be capitalised mid-sentence, and 'Droid life' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'daily life'. Correcting the phrase improves clarity and grammar.