Patience— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Use a more natural, concise topic sentence and avoid unusual words ('enduring person'). Give one brief supporting detail with linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I consider myself a patient person. For example, when I face difficulties at work, I stay calm and keep trying different solutions until the problem is solved.

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly (what makes you feel impatient), avoid filler words, and be consistent in meaning (student talked about patience not impatience). Use linking words and one clear example. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I feel impatient when I can't see progress quickly. For instance, when learning a Capoeira trick, I get frustrated if I don't improve after several practice sessions, so I focus on short-term goals to stay motivated.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence about your feelings, use linking words to show progression (initially, then), avoid repetition and vague phrases. Give a specific example of a long-term task and your attitude toward it.

Ví dụ: At first I usually feel uncomfortable, but over time I become more determined. For example, when studying for exams, I initially struggle with the workload, but then I set a study schedule and steadily improve.

Gợi ý: Give a direct, natural answer and one specific reason or example about the job. Correct grammar (e.g., 'by nature of my work', 'from morning to evening') and avoid redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work long hours. For example, I often work from Monday to Saturday, handling detailed tasks that need careful attention to complete.

Gợi ý: Provide a concise comparison with a clear reason and one concrete example. Avoid repetition ('making efforts' repeated) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I am more patient now than as a child because I stick with activities longer. For instance, I used to give up on hobbies quickly, but now I practice Capoeira regularly until I improve.

× Yes, I believe I'm an enduring person.

✓ Yes, I believe I'm a patient person.

The speaker used 'enduring' incorrectly. 'Enduring' is an adjective meaning 'lasting for a long time' and is not typically used to describe a person's temperament. The correct adjective for someone who can tolerate delays or hardships calmly is 'patient'. Use 'patient' to describe personality traits. Suggestion: Replace 'enduring' with 'patient' when describing temperament.

× Whenever I have to go through difficult situations, I will try to be persistent to overcome that difficulty.

✓ Whenever I have to go through difficult situations, I try to be persistent to overcome them.

The original mixes present simple meaning (habitual action) with 'will', which is unnecessary for habitual actions. Use present simple 'I try' for regular behavior. Also 'that difficulty' is singular while 'situations' is plural; use 'them' to refer back to plural 'situations'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits and make pronoun number agree with the noun it refers to.

× What makes me patient is that, umm, strong desire to get improved.

✓ What makes me patient is a strong desire to improve.

An article 'a' is missing before 'strong desire'. 'Get improved' is awkward and non-idiomatic; use the infinitive 'to improve' instead. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a strong desire to improve' for natural phrasing.

× For example, I am so enthusiastic about Capoeira, a Brazilian martial art, and if there is, uh, some kind of, uh, tricks that I want to learn, I will keep making efforts until I can master.

✓ For example, I am very enthusiastic about capoeira, a Brazilian martial art, and if there are tricks I want to learn, I will keep practicing until I have mastered them.

Use 'capoeira' lowercase unless at start of sentence. 'Some kind of tricks' is ungrammatical: use 'tricks' or 'a kind of trick'. 'There is' should be plural 'there are' to agree with 'tricks'. 'Keep making efforts' is awkward; native speakers say 'keep practicing' or 'keep making an effort'. 'Until I can master' lacks an object and wrong verb form; use 'until I have mastered them.' Suggestion: Use plural agreement, natural collocations ('keep practicing'), and include pronoun object for 'master'.

× If I have to do something for a long time, at first I will feel awkward, but in a long long I will feel determined to keep making efforts.

✓ If I have to do something for a long time, at first I feel awkward, but after a while I feel determined to keep trying.

Use present simple for habitual reactions ('I feel') instead of 'will'. 'In a long long' is ungrammatical; use 'after a while' or 'after a long time'. 'Keep making efforts' is awkward; use 'keep trying' or 'keep making an effort'. Suggestion: Use natural temporal phrases ('after a while') and present simple for habitual states.

× Everything is not achievable unless we keep making efforts.

✓ Nothing is achievable unless we keep making an effort.

The original 'Everything is not achievable' is awkward and can be misinterpreted. Use 'Nothing is achievable' or 'Not everything is achievable'. Also prefer singular collocation 'keep making an effort' or 'keep trying'. Suggestion: Use clearer negative structures: 'Nothing is achievable unless...' or 'Not everything is achievable'.

× So I believe I should make efforts for a long time that.

✓ So I believe I should keep making an effort for a long time.

Word order is incorrect and 'that' is misplaced. Use 'keep making an effort' or 'make efforts consistently for a long time'. Suggestion: Use natural verb collocations and place time expressions at the end if needed.

× Yes, my job requires me to be patient for a long time.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient for long periods of time.

Saying 'for a long time' is possible but 'for long periods of time' or 'to be patient for extended periods' is more natural when describing job requirements. No article needed but phrasing improved for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'for long periods of time' to describe recurring lengthy patience demands.

× As a nature of my work I will have to work for in a long time from Monday to Saturday, from morning to evening and other otherwise I will not be able to finish the job I'm assigned.

✓ By the nature of my work, I have to work long hours from Monday to Saturday, from morning until evening; otherwise I will not be able to finish the jobs I am assigned.

Use the idiom 'By the nature of my work' or 'Because of the nature of my work'. 'Work for in a long time' is ungrammatical; use 'work long hours'. 'From morning to evening' is fine but 'until' clarifies duration. 'Other otherwise' is incorrect; use 'otherwise'. 'Job I'm assigned' should be plural or rephrased: 'jobs I am assigned' or 'the job I am assigned'. Also use present simple 'I have to' for regular obligations. Suggestion: Use idiomatic expressions ('work long hours') and correct conjunctions ('otherwise').

× I believe I'm a more patient than I was in my childhood.

✓ I believe I'm more patient than I was in my childhood.

The indefinite article 'a' is incorrect before comparative 'more patient'. Comparatives do not take 'a' in this structure. Suggestion: Remove the article before 'more patient'.

× In my childhood I was not patient enough to keep making efforts so I quit it many of my hobbies.

✓ In my childhood I was not patient enough to keep trying, so I quit many of my hobbies.

'Quit it many of my hobbies' is ungrammatical. Use 'quit many of my hobbies' or 'gave up many of my hobbies'. Also change 'keep making efforts' to 'keep trying' for naturalness. Add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Use 'quit many of my hobbies' or 'gave up many hobbies' and natural verbs like 'keep trying'.

× But now I am so determined to keep making efforts and making efforts consistently.

✓ But now I am determined to keep trying consistently.

The phrase 'keep making efforts and making efforts' is repetitive. Use 'keep trying consistently' or 'make consistent efforts'. Suggestion: Avoid repetition by choosing a concise collocation such as 'keep trying consistently'.