Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct repetitions and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'most of the time', 'rather than').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping, but most of the time I prefer online shopping rather than going to malls. In Korea there are many apps that deliver quickly, so it’s very convenient and saves time.

Sugestão: Organize your answer into a topic sentence and a concise supporting example. Use past tense consistently for past events and linking words (first, then, after that). Pronounce brand names clearly and avoid repetitions.

Exemplo: Yes, I always compare prices between brands to get the best value. For example, I recently bought shoes: first I checked the quality at New Balance, then I compared prices with Nike, and after comparing both quality and price I chose the pair that offered better value.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer and then support it with specific reasons using linking words (because, therefore). Avoid repetition and make sure subject-verb agreement is correct ('products have', not 'product have'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: No, it isn’t difficult for me because having more options makes shopping enjoyable. For example, I compare the pros and cons of each product, so I can pick the one that best suits my needs.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give one clear reason with an example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'many expensive products are just branded versions of cheaper ones', 'electronics are an exception'). Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify 'electronic background' if relevant.

Exemplo: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better because many are just branded or stylish versions of similar items at lower prices. However, electronics can be different since higher-priced models often have better components and longer lifespans.

× Yes, I enjoy shopping but most during this day I don't go to the shopping mall by myself rather instead instead, I would use online shopping, especially in Korea.

✓ Yes, I enjoy shopping but nowadays I don't go to the shopping mall by myself; instead, I use online shopping, especially in Korea.

The phrase 'most during this day' is incorrect; 'nowadays' fits the intended meaning. 'the shopping mall' can be used but 'go to the shopping mall by myself' is acceptable; reduce redundancy 'rather instead instead' to a single 'instead'. Also use simple present 'use' for habitual action. Suggestion: replace awkward time phrase with 'nowadays' and remove duplicated words.

× Yes, of course we have to I usually compare the prices between different brands.

✓ Yes, of course we have to. I usually compare the prices between different brands.

This sentence runs two clauses together without proper punctuation or conjunction. Insert a period to separate the statements and ensure clear structure. Also 'compare the prices between' is acceptable though 'compare prices of different brands' is more natural.

× For example, recently I bought a new shoe and first I went to new balance and I check the quality and then I check the price and then I go I went to another brand nicknike and after comparison I choose

✓ For example, recently I bought new shoes. First I went to New Balance and I checked the quality and the price, then I went to another brand, Nike, and after comparing I chose one.

Tense consistency errors: 'recently I bought' is past simple and following verbs must also be past simple ('checked', 'went', 'chose'). 'new balance' and 'nicknike' need capitalization and correction. 'compare' should be in '-ing' form after 'after' ('after comparing'). Also plural 'shoes' is more natural. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing a past shopping event and correct brand names.

× I don't think so. I think the experience of shopping is more enjoyable if you have more options.

✓ I don't think so. I think the experience of shopping is more enjoyable if you have more options.

Sentence is correct; no grammar change required. Included here to explicitly indicate no error of subject-verb agreement. Maintain present simple for general truth.

× Like you can choose which is the better option for you and you can choose which product have what kind of pros and cons.

✓ For example, you can choose which option is better for you and you can see which product has what kinds of pros and cons.

'which product have' is incorrect because 'product' is singular and requires 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'what kind of pros and cons' is awkward; 'what kinds of pros and cons' or 'the pros and cons' is clearer. Suggestion: match singular subject with singular verb and prefer 'see' or 'determine' for clarity.

× So you can choose a more suitable product for you for you for you for you

✓ So you can choose a more suitable product for you.

Repetition 'for you' is redundant and likely a speech disfluency. Remove the duplicates to form a concise sentence. Keep present simple for general statement.

× I don't think so like I think most of the cheap expensive products is just a exaggerated version of the same product in affordable price range.

✓ I don't think so. I think most of the expensive products that are cheap copies are just exaggerated versions of the same product in a more affordable price range.

Multiple issues: sentence run-on and unclear expression. 'most of the cheap expensive products' is confusing; rephrase to 'expensive products that are cheap copies' or 'cheap copies of expensive products'. Subject-verb agreement: 'most ... products is' should be 'are'. 'a exaggerated' should be 'an exaggerated' or better rephrased. Use plural 'versions' to match 'products'. Suggestion: reword for clarity and ensure subject-verb agreement and article use.

× But this is a different story in electronics.

✓ But this is a different story when it comes to electronics.

'in electronics' is understandable but 'when it comes to electronics' is more natural. Adjust prepositional phrase for idiomatic usage.

× I came from the electronic environment in electronic background so

✓ I come from an electronic background, so...

Tense and phrasing: use 'I come from' for background and 'electronic background' is the appropriate noun phrase. 'electronic environment' is awkward. The sentence is incomplete; add an ending or ellipsis to indicate trailing off. Suggestion: use 'I come from an electronic background' for clarity.