Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition to sound more natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping. For example, when I have free time I often go to the mall with friends to browse new products, and if I find something interesting I may buy it because shopping feels exciting to me.

Sugestão: Provide a direct answer first, then give a specific reason and example. Use linking words (but, so, therefore) to make the logic clear and avoid hesitations.

Exemplo: Not usually, but I sometimes compare prices when I'm unsure. For instance, if I see an expensive item in a mall, I check online reviews and compare prices between the store and web retailers to decide which option gives better value.

Sugestão: Be clear about why decision-making is difficult and give a concise example. Avoid repeating phrases and incorrect words; use correct expressions like “leave empty-handed.”

Exemplo: Yes, I often find it hard to choose because I want something unique and I prefer to compare many options. For example, I sometimes spend hours browsing the mall and end up leaving empty-handed when I still can’t decide.

Sugestão: Answer directly and then qualify your opinion with specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (e.g., “pay only for the brand”).

Exemplo: Not always. Expensive brands often offer higher quality and better warranties, but sometimes you pay mainly for the brand name. For example, I once bought an expensive headphone for the label but later found a cheaper model with similar sound quality.

× Yes, I like shopping whenever I get some time, I go outside with my friends to hang out with them and also see new products and new things and new stuffs to whenever I uh, feel something and or I see something interesting, I I try to buy these things and also I feel it very thrilling and enjoying and I like shopping.

✓ Yes, I like shopping. Whenever I have some free time, I go out with my friends to hang out, see new products and new things, and when I see something interesting I try to buy it. I find shopping very thrilling and enjoyable.

Multiple issues: incorrect use of 'get some time' (use 'have some free time') and 'go outside' (use 'go out'); 'new stuffs' is uncountable/plural error (use 'new things'); excessive use of 'to' and filler words removed; verb + -ing and adjective/adverb choice: 'enjoying' used incorrectly as adjective (use 'enjoyable'). Also sentence fragments were combined into clearer sentences. Suggestion: simplify into shorter sentences, use correct gerunds/adjectives and uncountable nouns. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I do not compare the price usually but sometimes I compare whenever I'm confused to buy like whenever I'm a shopping mall and I'm seeing a very expensive product.

✓ I do not usually compare prices, but sometimes I compare when I'm unsure about buying something, for example if I'm in a shopping mall and I see a very expensive product.

'the price' should be plural 'prices' when speaking generally; word order for 'usually' was incorrect. 'Whenever' crowded the sentence; use 'when' or 'for example'. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'usually' before the main verb and use plural for general nouns. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Now I'm researching about it and and watching the quiet result from the Internet and comparing from the online and the offline store which one would be value for money.

✓ Now I research it online and look at the results on the Internet, comparing online and offline stores to see which one offers better value for money.

Do not use 'researching about' — research is transitive (research something) or use 'looking into'. 'Watching the quiet result' is incorrect phrase; use 'look at the results'. 'Comparing from' should be 'comparing online and offline stores' or 'comparing prices between'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with verbs and clearer collocations like 'research online' and 'value for money'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So these are the things that I see.

✓ So these are the things I look for.

'see' is less appropriate for active evaluation when shopping; 'look for' or 'consider' fits present habitual action. Suggestion: choose verbs that match the intended meaning (evaluate/consider/look for). Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, absolutely, because I because I believe that my choice is very unique and I have to look around whole over the shopping mall or whenever I'm going to buy something new product for me.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because I believe my choices are very personal and I have to look all around the shopping mall when I am buying a new product.

Redundant 'because I because I' and poor word order 'look around whole over' and awkward phrase 'something new product for me'. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'personal' instead of 'unique' for choices, and correct word order: 'look all around the shopping mall' and 'buying a new product'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× But after all, whenever, sometimes I when I can't decide, sometimes then I have to come home zero hand like with buying nothing.

✓ But sometimes, when I can't decide, I have to go home empty-handed, without buying anything.

Multiple issues: 'come home zero hand' is incorrect — correct idiom is 'go home empty-handed'. 'with buying nothing' should be 'without buying anything'. Suggestion: learn common idioms and correct negative constructions with 'without'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Well, that's a tricky question, but I don't know exactly what is the exact answer would be.

✓ Well, that's a tricky question, and I don't know what the exact answer would be.

Word order and redundancy: 'don't know exactly what is the exact answer would be' contains both duplicate words 'exact' and incorrect clause order. Suggestion: remove redundancy and place 'would be' at sentence end: 'I don't know what the exact answer would be.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× But from my perspective, I want to say that the big, uh, the big giant companies or like the very expensive products, very expensive brands uses better quality and better, they give the better warranty service.

✓ But from my perspective, I would say that large companies and very expensive brands use better quality materials and provide better warranty service.

'big giant' is redundant; 'uses' should be 'use' to agree with plural subject 'companies and brands' (subject-verb agreement). 'better quality' needs a noun: 'better quality materials'. Remove filler words and extra 'the'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and ensure verb agrees with compound subjects. Grammar problem type ID:27

× So sometimes they are good, but sometimes the customers also pay for the only brand.

✓ So sometimes they are good, but sometimes customers only pay for the brand name.

'the only brand' is incorrect; intended idea is 'pay for the brand name' or 'pay only for the brand'. Use 'customers' without 'the' for general statement. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases like 'brand name' and omit unnecessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:12