Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "refreshes me" and "makes me feel happier" convey similar ideas) and fix awkward phrases like "my mom and boasts my confidence."

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I especially like visiting malls to buy clothes because trying on new outfits boosts my confidence. For example, when I find a well-fitting jacket I feel more confident for social events.

Sugestão: Correct word choice and repetition, and streamline the answer. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly (e.g., "because," "so"). Replace awkward verbs like "compile prices" with "compare prices," and avoid repeating words. Provide one specific example of how you compare prices.

Exemplo: Yes, I compare prices because I want good quality without overspending. For example, I check three online stores and read reviews to compare features and prices before I buy electronics.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and sentence flow, remove small errors (e.g., "prioritize for," "choses", stray punctuation). Use a clear topic sentence, then one linked supporting detail and an example. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I find it difficult sometimes because I like several items but have to prioritize due to budget limits. For example, I usually make a shopping list and compare prices so I decide whether I need clothes now or a gadget later.

Sugestão: Good clear opinion and example. Remove filler words ("uh", "umm") and tighten the delivery into two sentences: a topic sentence stating your view and a concise example. Add a linking phrase like "for instance" to improve coherence.

Exemplo: No, I don't think so; I value function and durability over price. For instance, I would choose a cheaper phone with a long battery life rather than an expensive model that has poor battery performance.

× I enjoy shopping. I like going to malls to buy clothes and other useful items because getting something new refreshes me, my mom and boasts my confidence, which makes me feel happier and more satisfied.

✓ I enjoy shopping. I like going to malls to buy clothes and other useful items because getting something new refreshes me, boosts my confidence, and makes me feel happier and more satisfied.

The original sentence uses 'my mom and boasts my confidence' which is incorrect conjunction and word choice. 'My mom' is irrelevant here and 'boasts my confidence' is incorrect verb and object. Use parallel structure with three verbs connected by commas and 'and': 'refreshes me, boosts my confidence, and makes me feel happier and more satisfied.' This corrects the conjunction use and ensures parallelism.

× Yes, I often compile prices because I want to buy items that are both attractive and practical while standing with my budget.

✓ Yes, I often compare prices because I want to buy items that are both attractive and practical while sticking to my budget.

'Compile prices' is the wrong verb; 'compare prices' is the correct collocation. 'Standing with my budget' uses wrong preposition; the correct phrase is 'sticking to my budget' or 'within my budget.' This fixes verb choice and prepositional phrase to convey intended meaning.

× I usually check different shops and websites to make sure the products are quality, quality and features a good value for money since I need to be careful with my spending.

✓ I usually check different shops and websites to make sure the products are of good quality and offer good value for money since I need to be careful with my spending.

'Products are quality, quality and features a good value' is ungrammatical. 'Quality' is a noun; use the adjective phrase 'of good quality.' 'Features a good value' is incorrect; use 'offer good value for money.' This corrects adjective use and noun phrases for clarity.

× Yes, it's a bit difficult for me because I often like several items but I only have enough money for one, so I have to prioritize for.

✓ Yes, it's a bit difficult for me because I often like several items but I only have enough money for one, so I have to prioritize.

The phrase 'prioritize for' is incorrect; 'prioritize' is transitive and does not need 'for' here. The present tense is fine; removing the extra preposition corrects the sentence structure.

× For example, when I go shopping I sometimes have two choses between buying new clothes or a small gadget, and I try to avoid impulse purchases by making a list and. Comparing prices first.

✓ For example, when I go shopping I sometimes have to choose between buying new clothes or a small gadget, and I try to avoid impulse purchases by making a list and comparing prices first.

'Two choses' is incorrect ('two choices' or 'to choose'), and word order and punctuation are wrong: the period after 'and' should not be there. Use 'have to choose between' and keep 'comparing' attached to the sentence. This fixes word choice, structure, and punctuation.

× Not really, the most important thing about a product for me is function and durability, not its price.

✓ Not really. The most important things about a product for me are function and durability, not its price.

The original mixes singular/plural agreement: 'the most important thing...is function and durability' lists two items, so plural 'things' and plural verb 'are' are required. This corrects subject-verb agreement and sentence division for clarity.

× Uh, for example, I would choose a cheaper phone with a long battery life over an expensive one that looks better but dies quickly. Umm.

✓ For example, I would choose a cheaper phone with a long battery life over an expensive one that looks better but dies quickly.

Fillers 'Uh' and 'Umm' are unnecessary in writing; remove them. The sentence structure is otherwise fine. This improves formality and clarity.