Shopping— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I enjoy shopping), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" or "so").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping. When I was a high school student I rarely had money, so I could only buy essentials like water. Now I have a steady job and a higher salary, so I can afford nicer items and shop more often.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one example. Use correct tense and avoid filler words and repetition. Begin with a topic sentence (Yes, I compare prices), then add a reason and a concrete example using a linking word like "because" or "for example."

Exemplo: Yes, I always compare prices because it helps me save money. For example, I check online and in-store prices for clothes before buying to make sure I get the best deal.

Sugestão: Be more coherent and give a clear, structured answer. Start with a direct statement (No, it's not difficult / Yes, sometimes it is), explain why, and provide a specific example. Eliminate hesitations and incomplete sentences.

Exemplo: Sometimes it is difficult to choose because I often hesitate between similar items. For example, when I need a new phone I compare two models' battery life and camera quality before deciding.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and support it with reasons and an example. Use linking words like "however" to contrast ideas and avoid repetition and fillers. Keep the answer concise and specific.

Exemplo: I don't think expensive products are always better. Expensive items often have higher quality or better design; however, some cheaper products work just as well. For example, a mid-range phone can have almost the same features as an expensive model for everyday use.

× Yes I do. Originally I was when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I do. Originally I wasn't when I was a high school student.

The speaker intended to say they did not like shopping in high school. The original sentence omits the negation 'not' after 'was'. Use 'wasn't' (was not) to correctly express past negative. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural pauses.

× I do not have options to buy something, water, whatever I need.

✓ I did not have many options to buy things like water or whatever I needed.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and uses 'something' and 'whatever' awkwardly. Change tense to past ('did not have') to match 'when I was a high school student'. Use plural 'things' and 'whatever I needed' for consistency and clarity. 'Many options' is more natural than 'options' alone.

× But now I already started my career and I received a huge salary to buy whatever I need.

✓ But now I have started my career and I receive a good salary to buy whatever I need.

The speaker describes a change that began in the past and has relevance now, so present perfect 'have started' is appropriate. 'Received' is past; use present 'receive' if referring to current salary. 'Huge' can be acceptable but 'good' is more neutral. Ensure tense consistency within the sentence.

× Yes, I do what I was high school students.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a high school student.

The original mixes present 'do' with past context and uses 'students' incorrectly. Use past 'did' to match 'when I was a high school student' and correct noun number to singular 'student'.

× My mother told me that I need to compare the price and I I should buy cheaper and cheaper.

✓ My mother told me that I needed to compare prices and that I should buy the cheaper option.

Shift verbs to past 'needed' to report advice given in the past. Use plural 'prices' and 'the cheaper option' for clarity. Remove duplicated 'I'. Repeating 'cheaper and cheaper' is ungrammatical; use 'cheaper option' instead.

× So uh, even even I have enough salary, whatever, whatever I could buy.

✓ So even though I have a sufficient salary now, I can buy whatever I want.

Use 'even though' for concession and present 'have' to describe current salary. 'Enough salary' is awkward; 'a sufficient salary' is natural. Use modal 'can' for ability in present, and 'want' rather than 'could' for current ability.

× Now it is that a bird, uh, I tend to hesitate deciding which is the better uh, for me to buy it.

✓ Now I tend to hesitate when deciding which is better for me to buy.

Remove irrelevant phrase 'it is that a bird' which seems accidental. Use 'tend to hesitate when deciding' for natural phrasing. Place 'for me' before 'to buy' for correct word order and drop redundant 'it'.

× For example, I have uh, what I, what I need to tap and I have two options. I.

✓ For example, when I need to buy something, I sometimes have two options to choose from.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Rephrase to 'when I need to buy something' and 'two options to choose from' to form a complete, grammatical sentence. Remove filler repetitions.

× Why not, uh, basically there, there are a tendency in that expensive product is much better than cheapest one, but it, it, it, it will not uh, fit to all of the product.

✓ Why not? Basically, there is a tendency to think that expensive products are better than cheaper ones, but that is not true for all products.

Use 'there is a tendency' (singular) not 'there are a tendency'. Use plural 'products' and contrast 'cheaper ones'. 'Fit to' is incorrect; say 'true for' or 'apply to'. Remove filler repetitions and restructure for clarity.