History— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief context), then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes. I studied history throughout junior high, high school and senior school. For example, in high school we covered national history and important world events, which were taught through textbooks and regular classroom discussions.

Sugestão: Use a clear structure: topic sentence + supporting details with linking words. Be specific about methods and avoid vague phrases or unrelated comments.

Exemplo: I usually research history online and watch documentary videos. For instance, I read articles and watch historical documentaries on streaming services, and I sometimes visit museums to see real artifacts.

Sugestão: Give a clear main point and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid unclear phrases like “intelligent histories.”

Exemplo: Learning history helps us understand why societies behave the way they do because it explains past causes and effects. For example, studying world wars teaches lessons about diplomacy and the consequences of conflict.

Sugestão: Answer directly and support with two specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “intelligent giving some feedback.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think history is important because it helps us learn from past mistakes and understand cultural identities. For example, knowing a country’s past can explain current traditions and political decisions.

× Yeah, you know, our country, the history subject is so is necessary.

✓ Yes, history is a very necessary subject in our country.

The original sentence has redundant words and incorrect word order ('the history subject is so is necessary'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: remove unnecessary phrases, place subject 'history' before the verb, use appropriate modifiers 'a very necessary subject' and keep concise meaning.

× So in my senior school, high school and junior high school, uh, school, my school often says the history subject.

✓ In junior high, high school, and senior school, my school always taught the history subject.

The original has awkward noun ordering and 'says the history subject' is incorrect. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use proper sequence of school levels, and use a correct verb 'taught' (past tense) or 'teaches' depending on intended time; here 'my school always taught' fits earlier schooling context.

× Maybe, you know, I will research some information about history and I will looks some history videos or movies.

✓ Maybe I research information about history and I watch some history videos or movies.

The original mixes future 'will' with incorrect verb form 'looks'. This is an incorrect use of the present participle/verb form (ID 10). 'Looks' is wrong for 'watch'; use base form 'watch' with present or 'will watch' for future. Consistency: choose present simple 'I research... and I watch...' for habitual actions.

× It's so interesting for my very good at learning history because radio is so interesting.

✓ I find it very interesting and I am good at learning history because documentaries and lectures are interesting.

Original sentence is confused and contains irrelevant noun 'radio'. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Clarify the subject and reasons: 'I find it very interesting' and specify appropriate media like 'documentaries and lectures' instead of 'radio'. Use 'I am good at' for ability.

× The new history, maybe you have some history specific knowledge and history often give me more intelligent histories.

✓ By studying modern history, you can gain specific knowledge, and history often helps me become more knowledgeable.

The sentence is unclear and repetitive; 'intelligent histories' is incorrect. This is sentence structure error (ID 26). Rephrase to express that studying history gives specific knowledge and makes one more knowledgeable.

× Even the world history human can give some feedback.

✓ Even world history can provide useful insights about people.

'World history human' is an incorrect noun phrase and pronoun usage. This is incorrect use of pronouns/nouns (ID 12). Replace with 'world history' and clarify object 'insights about people' to make sense.

× Yeah, I think it is important because we can know about so many information about the past things, your countries or other countries.

✓ Yes, I think it is important because we can learn many facts about the past, about our country and other countries.

Original uses 'so many information' (uncountable noun) and awkward phrasing 'past things' and 'your countries'. This is sentence structure error (ID 26) and also quantifier/article misuse. Use 'many facts' or 'a lot of information' and correct possessive to 'our country'.

× These things can give some more detail and I we can learn about some so many knowledge and intelligent giving some feedback.

✓ These things can provide more details, and we can learn a lot of knowledge and receive useful feedback.

Original contains 'some so many knowledge' and 'intelligent giving some feedback' which misuse quantifiers and noun forms. This is incorrect use of quantifiers (ID 14). Use 'a lot of knowledge' or 'much information' and correct expressions 'receive useful feedback'. Also remove accidental extra pronoun 'I'.