Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and give one or two concise supporting details with correct grammar and word order. Use linking words (for example, so) correctly and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I'm not especially good at giving gifts, but I do give them on special occasions. For example, when my daughter got an A in her exams, I bought her a laptop to reward her hard work. I chose it because she needed a device for studying.

Sugestão: Make a clear topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use correct pronouns and smoother linking phrases (for example, usually, for instance, because). Provide a specific example and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I usually give gifts when someone achieves something important, such as graduating from school. For instance, when a family member finishes university I give a thoughtful present to show my pride and to celebrate their achievement.

Sugestão: Organize the answer: state the main consideration first (age and interests), then give one or two specific examples. Correct grammar (e.g., "what the person likes", ages as numbers, avoid incorrect statements like "children cannot have electronics"). Use linking words like "for example" and "however" appropriately.

Exemplo: The main things I consider are the person's age and interests. For example, for a two-year-old I would choose a safe toy rather than an electronic device; for a ten-year-old I might choose an educational tablet or a game that supports learning.

Sugestão: Give a concise, chronological answer with correct dates and clearer detail. Avoid hesitations and unclear words (e.g., "stealing"). Mention purpose and a brief result or reaction. Keep within 3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. On May 24 last year I bought three handmade bracelets for my supervisors, each featuring a flag to represent their nationality. They appreciated the personal touch and wore them at work.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with a concise reason and an example. Improve grammar (e.g., "it doesn't matter", "cheap"/"inexpensive", "expensive") and avoid repetitive phrases. Use linking words like "for example" and "because" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. For example, a small handmade present bought during travel can be more meaningful because it shows thought and effort, whereas a costly local purchase may feel impersonal.

× Not really, but sometimes yes, I give gift to people a care who did something good.

✓ Not really, but sometimes I give gifts to people who did something good.

The sentence has extra words and incorrect word order. 'Give gift' should be plural 'give gifts' (singular/plural issue) and relative clause should be 'people who did something good'. Remove 'a care' which is meaningless here. Suggestion: simplify to 'I give gifts to people who have done something good.'

× For example, uh, I remember one day I gave gifts to my kid after she was successful get a grade A in her studies.

✓ For example, I remember one day I gave gifts to my child after she successfully got an A grade in her studies.

The phrase 'was successful get' is incorrect. Use the adverb 'successfully' and the past tense 'got' or the present perfect 'had gotten'. Also 'kid' is informal; 'child' fits exam tone. Suggestion: 'after she successfully got an A grade' or 'after she had gotten an A.'

× So I gave her laptop, which was more expensive of course, and I think that is very often because. Press feelings towards her.

✓ So I gave her a laptop, which was, of course, quite expensive, and I think it was because I felt proud of her.

Missing article 'a' before 'laptop' (article error). 'More expensive' needs a comparison context; use 'quite expensive'. The fragment 'Press feelings towards her' is incorrect structure; replace with 'I felt proud of her' or 'to express my feelings toward her.' Suggestion: use clear clause to express emotion: 'because I was proud of her.'

× I think when someone achieves something, let's say for example complete their studies, you can I always try to give some something which shows the affection between me and him or and her, and that of course bring us together and of course see how important that achievement is.

✓ I think when someone achieves something, for example completes their studies, I always try to give something that shows the affection between us, and that, of course, brings us together and shows how important the achievement is.

Multiple issues: verb form 'complete' should be 'completes' to agree with 'someone' (present tense and subject-verb agreement). Extra words 'you can I' and duplicate 'some something' are incorrect (sentence structure). Pronoun 'me and him or and her' is awkward; use 'us' or 'them'. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'that'. Suggestion: simplify and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'someone completes... I always try... that brings us together.'

× I guess something which is very important to consider is the age or what that person like for example, someone who is young, of course you cannot buy something like electronic.

✓ I guess something very important to consider is the person's age or what they like. For example, if someone is young, you cannot buy electronic devices for them.

Use of 'what that person like' is incorrect; use 'what they like' (pronoun and verb agreement). 'Something like electronic' is ungrammatical; use 'electronic devices' or 'electronics'. Suggestion: use possessive 'person's' and plural 'electronics' or 'electronic devices.'

× So someone, let's say if he's two years old, you cannot buy electronic things.

✓ So if someone is two years old, you cannot buy electronic things for them.

The original mixes 'someone' and 'he's'; better to use gender-neutral 'they/them' or match pronoun. Also add 'for them' to clarify purpose. Suggestion: use 'they' to match 'someone' or specify gender consistently.

× But let's say someone is older, maybe around about 10 age, you can buy something like electronics timetable which help those people to do.

✓ But if someone is older, maybe around ten years old, you can buy electronics such as a tablet or educational devices that help them study.

Phrases 'around about 10 age' and 'electronics timetable' are incorrect. Use 'ten years old' and provide correct nouns like 'tablet' or 'educational device.' 'Which help those people to do' is incomplete; clarify 'help them study.' Suggestion: use clear nouns and complete relative clauses.

× Yeah, yes, I did. I think it was on 20/24 around May 24.

✓ Yes, I did. I think it was on May 24, 2024.

The date '20/24 around May 24' is unclear. Use proper past tense phrasing and standard date order: 'May 24, 2024.' Suggestion: keep date format clear and use full year.

× I bought bracelets to my supervisors.

✓ I bought bracelets for my supervisors.

Use 'for' when buying something intended for someone, not 'to.' Suggestion: 'buy something for someone.'

× I have 3 supervisors, so all of them I bought those uh, bracelets which resemble their flags.

✓ I have three supervisors, so I bought each of them bracelets that resembled their flags.

Word order and article usage: 'all of them I bought those bracelets' is awkward. Use 'each of them' and past tense 'resembled'. Also write numbers in words in formal speech. Suggestion: 'I bought each of them a bracelet that resembled their flag.'

× So it was one for stealing to one for uh, New Zealand flag and one for I think it was for Spain or something like something like that.

✓ So there was one for Sri Lanka, one for New Zealand, and one, I think, for Spain or something like that.

'stealing' is likely misheard for 'Sri Lanka' or another country; replace with correct country name. Use parallel structure: 'one for X, one for Y, and one for Z.' Suggestion: list items clearly and use commas.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question sentence is grammatically acceptable as is; no correction necessary.

× I think it it doesn't matter really.

✓ I think it doesn't really matter.

Duplicate 'it' and adverb placement is awkward. Move 'really' after 'doesn't' for natural word order. Suggestion: 'I think it doesn't really matter.'

× So for example, if someone buys something which is very cheap from far away, I think that can mean a lot compared to someone who buy someone something which evoke very costly from less in the same area.

✓ For example, if someone buys something that is cheap from far away, I think that can mean a lot compared to someone who buys an expensive gift from nearby.

Multiple errors: 'who buy someone something' should be 'who buys' (third person singular). 'Which evoke very costly from less in the same area' is incoherent; clarify meaning: 'buys an expensive gift from nearby.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and concise comparative structure. Suggestion: use parallel verbs and clear comparative phrases.

× I think which is more important is, is how that thing, how that gift represent or take emotions of the person who want to give.

✓ I think what is more important is how the gift represents or conveys the emotions of the person who wants to give it.

Use 'what is' not 'which is' for clause. 'Represent or take emotions' is wrong; use 'represents or conveys emotions.' 'Person who want' requires 'wants.' Also add 'it' to refer to the gift. Suggestion: use 'what is more important is how the gift conveys the giver's emotions.'