Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "materialistic" used twice) and simplify phrasing ("handmade" instead of "hand made by yourself").

Exemplo: Yes. I usually give thoughtful, handmade gifts because I believe they are more meaningful than expensive items. For example, I often crochet small items or make personalized cards that reflect the recipient’s hobbies, which always seems to make them happy.

Sugestão: Correct repetition and unclear phrases. Provide a concise topic sentence and one or two specific examples. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "such as") and correct prepositions ("to others" not "to other").

Exemplo: I give gifts on many occasions, such as birthdays, anniversaries and festivals. For example, at Diwali or Christmas I usually give handmade items or small personalized presents to family and close friends.

Sugestão: Organize answer with a clear topic sentence and use smoother phrasing. Replace lists like "materialistic stuff" with clearer terms ("store-bought items"). Use linking words ("first", "then", "for example") and avoid small errors ("who I am, whom I am gifting to" is awkward).

Exemplo: I consider the recipient’s tastes and needs when choosing a gift. First, I think about what they like or dislike; then I decide between a store-bought item and a personalized gift — for example, a book for a reader or a crocheted scarf if they like handmade things.

Sugestão: Be more specific and avoid exaggeration like "1000 times". Use one or two concise examples and link the reason why handmade gifts matter. Correct phrasing: "on their birthdays" or "at graduation".

Exemplo: Yes. I often give handmade gifts to close family and friends, such as a knitted scarf for my mother or a handmade card for a friend’s graduation. I think personalized gifts feel more thoughtful and memorable than generic presents.

Sugestão: Make a clear position in one sentence, then support with one or two reasons and an example. Avoid awkward repetition and improve grammar (e.g., "not expensive stuff" -> "not expensive gifts").

Exemplo: Not necessarily. I believe meaningful gifts that reflect shared memories express feelings better than expensive items. For instance, a photo album of shared moments meant more to my friend than an expensive accessory.

× I am a person that gives very thoughtful, creative and personal gifts, usually made by myself only, but accompanied by a lot of materialistic gifts too, as I feel materialistic gifts are not as valuable as the gifts that you give with your own hand made by yourself.

✓ I am a person who gives very thoughtful, creative, and personal gifts, usually made by myself, but I also give many material gifts, because I feel material gifts are not as valuable as gifts you make with your own hands.

The relative pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'who' for people; 'only' is redundant and misplaced, 'hand made by yourself' is incorrect word order and word choice — use 'make with your own hands'. 'Materialistic gifts' is awkward; use 'material gifts'. Maintain parallel structure and proper comma use. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use 'who' for people, and 'make with your own hands' for handmade gifts.

× I give give to other on various occasions such as personal locations, birthdays, some anniversaries or or any festival, Diwali, Holi etcetera, Christmas and I usually gift them a lot of personal things.

✓ I give gifts to others on various occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and festivals like Diwali, Holi, and Christmas, and I usually give them many personal things.

There are repeated words ('give give', 'or or') and incorrect phrase 'personal locations'. Use 'give gifts to others' and plural 'others'. 'A lot of' before countable 'personal things' should be 'many'. Also reorder list for clarity and use commas. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use correct collocations ('give gifts to others'), and use 'many' for countable nouns.

× 1st I look at the person who I am, whom I am gifting to. Then I look what he or she likes, dislikes.

✓ First, I consider who the person is and whom I am gifting to. Then I look at what he or she likes and dislikes.

The original 'who I am, whom I am gifting to' is confusing and redundant. Use 'who the person is' to identify them and 'whom I am gifting to' as the object (though 'who I am gifting' is acceptable informally). Also add 'at' after 'look' when examining preferences and link 'likes and dislikes' with 'and'. Suggestion: use clear clause order and correct preposition 'at' with 'look'.

× According to that I choose some materialistic stuff and some personalized touch stuffs such as crocheted items, books, clothing etcetera.

✓ Based on that, I choose some material items and add a personalized touch with things such as crocheted items, books, and clothing.

'Materialistic' is incorrect here; use 'material' or 'material items'. 'Stuffs' is not standard; use 'things' or 'items'. 'Personalized touch' should be used as a noun phrase 'add a personalized touch'. Also add commas and 'and' before the last item in the list. Suggestion: use countable nouns 'items' and correct collocations like 'add a personalized touch'.

× Yes, I have given handmade gifts to people that I love, for example, my mother, brother, father, my boyfriend, my friends on various occasions such as graduation ceremony on their birthdays.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to people I love, for example my mother, brother, father, boyfriend, and friends on various occasions such as graduations and birthdays.

Use 'people I love' not 'that I love' for people. The list needs parallel structure and commas. 'Graduation ceremony on their birthdays' is awkward; separate occasions like 'graduations and birthdays'. Suggestion: make lists parallel and use appropriate plural forms for repeated occasion types.

× I feel a personalized gift can make someone day 1000 times better than it was before.

✓ I feel a personalized gift can make someone's day a thousand times better than before.

Missing possessive apostrophe: 'someone day' should be 'someone's day'. Use 'a thousand' instead of numeric '1000' in formal writing and remove redundant 'it was'. Suggestion: use possessive form and cleaner comparative phrase 'a thousand times better than before'.

× For me, not expensive stuff, but a lot meaningful stuff, a lot of memory, memorable stuff matters more and it better expresses my feelings about how I want that person to be happy on that day, shows in that valuable present.

✓ For me, not expensive items but meaningful things and memories matter more, and they better express my feelings about wanting that person to be happy on that day; this is shown in a thoughtful gift.

The original has many nonstandard phrases: 'not expensive stuff' should be 'not expensive items', 'a lot meaningful stuff' is incorrect—use 'meaningful things', 'a lot of memory' is awkward—use 'memories'. Subject-verb agreement: 'memorable stuff matters' vs 'they better express' — clarify plural subjects and pronouns. 'Shows in that valuable present' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'this is shown in a thoughtful gift'. Suggestion: use clear nouns ('items', 'things', 'memories'), ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations like 'thoughtful gift'.