Gifts— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct noun forms (college → colleague), and use one or two specific supporting details linked with a contrast or reason. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts, especially to my club friends and colleagues, because it shows my appreciation for their support. For example, when my previous colleague who trained me resigned, I gave her a small farewell gift to thank her for her help.

Sugestão: Correct grammar (do gift → give gifts; classmate → classmates), reduce hesitation, and provide one clear example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid vague numbers or unfinished sentences. Be specific about the gift and reason.

Exemplo: I usually give gifts to friends, classmates, and family on their birthdays. I prefer practical presents, such as phone accessories or notebooks, because I want them to use the gift and remember our relationship; for example, I often buy tech gadgets for my father because he likes electronics.

Sugestão: Remove filler questions ('Why?') and correct vocabulary ('trashing up' → 'dressing up'). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: I consider whether a gift is practical and whether the recipient will actually use it. For example, I would buy lipstick for my sister because she loves dressing up and wears makeup regularly.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and correct word choices (clubmate → clubmate or club member; gap → gift; 'appreciation for their help' not 'health'). Start with a clear past-tense sentence, then explain reason with a specific detail. Avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes. Once I made a jar of tiny paper stars and gave it to a club member as a small gift to show my appreciation for their help and support with my studies.

Sugestão: Organize into a clear opinion plus contrasting clause. Fix grammar and word choice: say 'I don't think so' then explain why handmade or thoughtful gifts can be more meaningful. Provide a coherent example. Avoid hesitations and fragmented sentences.

Exemplo: I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. Instead, thoughtful or handmade gifts often mean more because they show time and effort; for example, I would treasure a photo album my friend made for me more than an expensive item.

× Uh, yes, I am good at giving it, especially to my club friends and college because it's a way, uh, to show my appreciate appreciation for their support for, for instance, like when my previous college, she was the one who trained me to do my job.

✓ Uh, yes, I am good at giving gifts, especially to my club friends and college friends, because it's a way to show my appreciation for their support. For instance, my previous college friend was the one who trained me to do my job.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and nouns: 'giving it' is unclear (use 'gifts'), 'college' is used incorrectly instead of 'college friend' or 'classmate', and 'she was the one who trained me' should be attached clearly to that person. Also 'appreciate appreciation' is redundant. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with specific nouns, remove redundancy, and split into two sentences for clarity.

× And when she resigning, I give her a small, uh, farewell gift to everything that she.

✓ When she resigned, I gave her a small farewell gift to thank her for everything she did.

This sentence has tense and structure problems. Use past tense 'resigned' and 'gave' because the action is completed. 'to everything that she' is ungrammatical; use 'to thank her for everything she did.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense and a clear phrase expressing purpose.

× I usually do gift to friends, classmate or family members on their birthday.

✓ I usually give gifts to friends, classmates, or family members on their birthdays.

'Do gift' is incorrect; use 'give gifts'. Also plural forms needed: 'classmates' and 'birthdays' (each person has a birthday). Suggestion: use the verb 'give' with plural nouns and commas in a list.

× I I always prefer giving out practical presents like uh phone accessories or 9 notebooks because I want them to use the GIF and remember our relationship.

✓ I always prefer giving practical presents like phone accessories or notebooks because I want them to use the gift and remember our relationship.

Remove duplicated 'I', 'giving out' can be 'giving' here, '9 notebooks' is likely unintended digit—use 'notebooks', and 'GIF' is wrong (should be 'gift'). Suggestion: proofread for typos and extra words, and choose correct nouns.

× For instance, I know my dad will like technical uh stuff so I will buy.

✓ For instance, I know my dad will like technical stuff, so I will buy something for him.

The original lacks an object after 'buy' and missing comma. 'Technical stuff' is acceptable colloquially but add 'something for him' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always include the object of 'buy' and use commas to join clauses.

× Well, when you're seeing a gift, I always think whether it's practical and whether the recipient will actually use it.

✓ Well, when I see a gift, I always think about whether it's practical and whether the recipient will actually use it.

'When you're seeing a gift' is awkward and incorrectly uses present continuous. Use simple present 'when I see' for general habits. Also 'think whether' should be 'think about whether.' Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and include 'about' after 'think.'

× For instance, I would buy lipstick for my sister because I know she loved trashing up and wearing makeup, so I know it would be useful for her daily life.

✓ For instance, I would buy lipstick for my sister because I know she loves dressing up and wearing makeup, so it would be useful in her daily life.

Mixed tenses and wrong verbs: 'loved' should be 'loves' for a habitual preference; 'trashing up' is incorrect—use 'dressing up'. Maintain conditional 'would' for hypothetical 'I would buy.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms and consistent tense.

× I think once I make a jar of tiny handmade paper stars and give it to one of my clubmate.

✓ Once, I made a jar of tiny handmade paper stars and gave it to one of my clubmates.

Tense and number issues: use past tense 'made' and 'gave' because it's a past event. 'Clubmate' should be plural or singular 'clubmate' with article—'one of my clubmates' is correct. Suggestion: choose proper past tense and plural form after 'one of.'

× I give it as a small gap to show my appreciation for their health and support in class because back then I remember that person that supported me with my study.

✓ I gave it as a small gift to show my appreciation for their help and support in class because I remember that this person supported me with my studies.

Many errors: 'gap' should be 'gift'; 'health and support' is incorrect—likely 'help and support'; tense needs past 'gave'; 'with my study' should be 'with my studies.' Suggestion: correct wrong words, use past tense for past events, and choose appropriate nouns.

× Well, I don't think so that expensive gift sometime can show, uh, the efforts and the time invested by the by the giver to the person receiving it.

✓ Well, I don't think that an expensive gift necessarily shows the effort and time invested by the giver for the recipient.

Unclear modal/auxiliary and phrasing: remove extra 'so' and 'sometime'; use 'necessarily shows' to express doubt; article 'an' needed before 'expensive gift'; remove repeated 'by the.' Suggestion: streamline sentence, use 'necessarily' and correct articles.

× But on the other hand, it would have, would, wouldn't be meaningful as something that as Han Hen make.

✓ But on the other hand, it may not be as meaningful as something handmade by a close friend.

This fragment is garbled: remove repeated modals, use 'may not be as meaningful as something handmade,' and clarify 'Han Hen' (probably meant 'handmade'). Suggestion: use 'may not be as meaningful' and 'handmade by a friend.'

× For instance, if my friend give me an album, does she make for me?

✓ For instance, if my friend gave me an album that she made for me, I would appreciate it more.

Use past subjunctive 'gave' in conditional and past participle 'made'. The original word order and question form are incorrect. Suggestion: use conditional structure 'if ... gave ... I would ...' and use 'made' for 'create.'