Websites— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example and a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like "and so on."

Exemplo: I often visit academic websites because I'm a student. For example, I use sites for language learning and literature writing to find tutorials and sample essays that help with my coursework.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, use precise vocabulary (e.g., "ticketing website" → "a ticketing website" or name one), and add one specific reason or example. Remove repetitive words like "definitely."

Exemplo: My favourite website is a ticketing site because I regularly buy concert tickets there. For example, I recently booked seats for a music festival that I had been looking forward to for months.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and be more specific. Start with a clear statement about whether your website habits have changed, then give one concrete example of a change and a reason, using linking words (e.g., "because," "so").

Exemplo: Yes, my website preferences change frequently because I like trying new things. For example, I used to visit only study forums, but recently I started using short-video platforms for quick language tips.

Sugestão: Be concise and use correct terms (e.g., "short-video apps" instead of "short websites"). Provide one specific reason and avoid colloquial exaggerations like "stick to TikTok for a whole day."

Exemplo: Short-video apps such as TikTok are very popular in my country because they are entertaining and easy to use. Many people watch short clips during breaks or while commuting.

Sugestão: Use more formal vocabulary and correct grammar ("use phones" not "use hand phones"). Give one clear reason and, if possible, mention one situation where books are better to show balance.

Exemplo: I prefer getting information from websites because I can access them quickly on my phone. However, I still use books for in-depth study when I need comprehensive explanations.

Sugestão: Give a direct response then provide one clear reason. Avoid vague phrases like "harm me in some aspects"—specify concerns such as privacy or time commitment.

Exemplo: Not at the moment. I don't have a clear purpose for a website and I'm concerned about privacy and the time required to manage it, so I might consider it when I'm older.

Sugestão: Provide a direct answer and then add one specific example of a skill or topic you improved because of websites or AI tools. Use linking words to connect reason and example.

Exemplo: Websites and AI tools have helped my studies because I can watch step-by-step tutorials that clarify difficult concepts. For example, online writing tools helped me improve essay structure and grammar for my coursework.

× I often visit academic websites since I'm a student and I had to focus on different fields of studies, for example like language learning and literature writing and so on.

✓ I often visit academic websites since I'm a student and I have to focus on different fields of study, for example language learning and literary writing.

Use 'have to' for present obligation rather than past 'had to' (tense). Also use the noun phrase 'fields of study' (no plural 'studies' after 'fields of') and 'literary writing' is more natural than 'literature writing'. Remove redundant 'for example like'. Suggested improvement: replace 'had to' with 'have to', use 'fields of study', and avoid combining 'for example' with 'like'.

× Well for me, my favorite is definitely ticketing website since I'm a big fan of music and I often buy tickets for concerts and definitely it makes me feel really excited about it.

✓ Well for me, my favorite is definitely ticketing websites since I'm a big fan of music and I often buy tickets for concerts; they definitely make me feel really excited.

Subject 'ticketing websites' should be plural to match general reference; 'it makes' is incorrect because the subject is plural, so use 'they make'. Also avoid redundant 'definitely' and trailing 'about it'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses.

× Sometimes I will abandoned that to do something new and sometimes I think something is too boring and I wanted to try something more fresh and so on.

✓ Sometimes I will abandon that to do something new, and sometimes I think something is too boring and I want to try something fresher.

After 'will' use the base form 'abandon' not past participle 'abandoned'. Keep tense consistent: 'want' (present) matches 'sometimes' and 'will' context. Use comparative 'fresher' rather than 'more fresh'. Remove 'and so on' for clarity.

× I always can't concentrate on one thing.

✓ I can never concentrate on one thing.

Negative adverb placement: use 'can never' rather than 'always can't' which is unnatural in English. 'Can never' clearly expresses inability to concentrate on one thing.

× Well, as I've observed, Tiktok and short websites are the most popular in our country since we are the original country of Tiktok and everyone used to stick to Tiktok for a whole day and it's really common.

✓ Well, as I've observed, TikTok and short-video websites are the most popular in our country since TikTok originated here and many people spend much of the day on it.

Use correct capitalization 'TikTok' and a clearer term 'short-video websites'. 'Original country of TikTok' is unnatural; say 'TikTok originated here'. 'Everyone used to stick to TikTok for a whole day' mixes past habit 'used to' with present reality; use present tense 'many people spend much of the day on it'.

× Well, I prefer getting information from websites, definitely, since I'm a person who often use hand phones instead of reading books, and books are obviously too clumsy to carry everywhere you need.

✓ Well, I prefer getting information from websites, definitely, since I often use my phone instead of reading books, and books are obviously too bulky to carry everywhere.

Use 'use my phone' rather than 'use hand phones'; 'hand phones' is nonstandard. Use 'bulky' rather than 'clumsy' for objects. Remove 'you need' and keep sentence general. Also correct subject-verb agreement 'I often use'.

× Actually, not really 'cause I don't know what I'm going to make for this website and I'm too young to own a website that will maybe harm me in some aspects, so I will observe and consider it when I'm older.

✓ Actually, not really, because I don't know what I would make for a website and I'm too young to have a website that might harm me in some ways, so I will observe and consider it when I'm older.

Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause'. Use 'would make' to express hypothetical planning and 'might' rather than 'will maybe' for possibility. 'Have a website' is more natural than 'own a website' here. 'In some ways' is clearer than 'in some aspects'.

× Websites and AI tools have helped me a lot with my studies because I can watch tutorials that explain difficult concepts step by step.

✓ Websites and AI tools have helped me a lot with my studies because I can watch tutorials that explain difficult concepts step by step and use AI tools to get feedback on my writing.

Original sentence is grammatically acceptable, but adding a second clause develops the idea as suggested in the feedback. The correction adds parallel structure and specifies how AI tools help. No major grammar error; improvement is stylistic to provide fuller answer.