Websites— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 자주 끊기고 반복이 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 바로 답하는 주제문(예: I often use search engines like Google and Naver.)을 말한 뒤, 연결어(for example, because, so)로 이유나 구체적 사용 사례(정보 검색, 지도, 이메일 등)를 덧붙이세요. 단문을 사용해 문장을 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요.

Exemplo: I often use search engines such as Google and Naver. For example, I use them to look up facts for school projects and to find maps or news.

Sugestão: 답변이 혼란스럽고 논리 전개가 불분명합니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문(예: My favourite website is Naver.)을 말하고, 이유를 연결어(because, since, for example)로 설명하세요. 신문 열람, 이메일, 블로그 등 구체적인 기능을 예로 들면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: My favourite website is Naver because it offers many services in one place. For example, I read news, check emails, and use its blog platform to write posts.

Sugestão: 현재와 과거를 비교하려는 의도는 보이나 문법과 어휘 사용이 부정확합니다. 과거와 현재를 비교하는 문장 구조(I used to... but now...)를 사용하세요. 구체적으로 어떤 기능들이 추가되었는지 예를 들어 설명하면 점수가 오릅니다.

Exemplo: Yes. I used to use Naver mostly for email and online news when I was younger, but now it offers many more services like video streaming, shopping, and social features.

Sugestão: 응답이 불분명하고 단어 선택이 잘못되었습니다. 먼저 간단한 주제문(예: Search portals and social media are popular in my country.)을 말한 뒤, 각각 이유와 구체적 예(포털사이트, 쇼핑, 소셜미디어)를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 단어는 제거하고 의미가 분명한 어휘를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Portal sites like Naver and social media platforms are very popular in South Korea because people use them to read news, shop online, and communicate with friends.

Sugestão: 좋아하는 매체를 분명히 말했지만 이유 설명이 어색합니다. 선호 이유와 단점(정확성 문제)을 연결어(However, but)로 정리하고, 정보를 확인하는 구체적 방법(verify, check sources, use books)도 제시하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer getting information from websites because they are fast and up-to-date. However, I check facts with books or reliable sources when accuracy is important.

Sugestão: 응답 의지는 있지만 이유와 계획을 더 명확히 표현해야 합니다. 목표(예: portfolio website), 용도(share work, research interests), 구체적 계획(timeline: after graduation) 순으로 간결하게 말하세요. 불필요한 울음소리나 단어를 제거하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to create a personal website to showcase my portfolio and research interests. I plan to build it after I finish my master's degree to help with job or graduate school applications.

Sugestão: 의도는 분명하나 표현이 어색하고 문장이 끝나지 않습니다. 먼저 주제문(예: Writing blog posts has helped me improve my writing.)을 말하고, 구체적 학습 효과(organize ideas, choose themes, edit drafts)와 예시를 간결한 문장으로 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Writing blog posts has helped me improve my writing skills. For example, I plan topics, organize my ideas in Word, and revise my drafts before publishing.

× I often visit storage website like Google and the neighbor it is Korean website because I. I always use this searching website to find information about what I know want to.

✓ I often visit storage websites like Google and Naver, which is a Korean website, because I always use this search website to find the information I want.

The sentence uses incorrect prepositions and articles and has word order issues. Use plural 'websites' when speaking generally. Use 'Naver' (proper noun) instead of 'neighbor.' Replace 'searching website' with 'search website' or 'search engine.' Use 'which is' to add a clause. Correct word order: 'find the information I want.' Improve by practicing noun phrases with articles and relative clauses and using correct prepositions: 'visit websites,' 'use a search engine.' (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× My favorite website is neither. This website is Korean Search. This is currently platformed and everyone every most Korean people use it every day, because we can't read the newspaper online newspaper and send emails and write.

✓ My favorite website is Naver. It is a Korean search platform that most people in Korea use every day because they can read online newspapers, send emails, and write posts there.

The sentence has sentence structure and article errors and wrong word choices. 'Neither' is incorrect here; use the website name. 'Platformed' is not correct — use 'platform' or 'search platform.' 'Everyone every most Korean people' is redundant; use 'most people in Korea.' Fix list of activities with parallel structure: 'read online newspapers, send emails, and write posts.' Practice forming clear subject-verb-object sentences and parallel lists. (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× Yes, they are. They are is when I was young, neighbor is just neighbor was just focused on e-mail or newspaper or an online cafe. But these days their neighbor has a lot of had to do a lot of things like online.

✓ Yes. When I was young, Naver focused just on email, online newspapers, or online cafes. But these days Naver does a lot of things online.

Original sentences show subject-verb agreement and pronoun/reference errors. Remove 'they are' and 'they are is.' Use the proper singular subject 'Naver' and correct verb forms: 'focused' for past and 'does' for present. Remove redundant phrases like 'has a lot of had to do a lot.' Improve by ensuring subject and verb match (singular/plural) and by using concise phrasing. (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× Unlike neighborhood, Holy Moon problem is very popular popular in South Korea because in this platform PE people can't everything such as send emails and read online newspaper.

✓ Unlike Naver, 'Holy Moon' is very popular in South Korea because on that platform people can do many things, such as send emails and read online newspapers.

This sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear references. 'Unlike neighborhood' is incorrect; likely meant 'Unlike Naver.' 'PE people can't everything' is wrong — change to 'people can do many things.' Use 'on that platform' as the correct preposition. Also fix plural 'newspapers.' Practice clear referent usage and correct auxiliary verbs ('can' vs 'can't'). (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× Yes I do. I prefer getting information from websites but to be honest the information from online website sometimes is an incorrect or false information so I have to write a essay or. Stat the essay.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer getting information from websites, but to be honest, information from online websites is sometimes incorrect or false, so I have to write an essay or start the essay.

Tense is mostly present but wording and article use are wrong. Use plural 'websites' and remove 'an' before 'incorrect' which is unnecessary. Use 'an essay' (not 'a essay') and correct verb 'start' instead of 'stat.' Ensure adjective-noun order: 'incorrect or false information.' Practice articles (a/an/the) and spelling of verbs. (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× Yes, I would definitely because. My own website, I can download my works and interests. It is very important to search field, so if I graduate master, uh, graduate schools, I will make my own website to.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to. With my own website, I can showcase my work and interests. It is very important for searching in the field, so if I graduate from a master's program or from graduate school, I will create my own website.

Modal and verb forms are misused and phrases are incomplete. Add 'like to' after 'would definitely' to complete the idea. Use 'showcase' or 'show' instead of 'download my works and interests.' Use 'important for searching in the field' and correct phrase 'graduate from a master's program' or 'graduate school.' Use 'create' instead of 'make ... to.' Practice completing modal verb phrases and standard collocations ('graduate from'). (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)

× I usually write A blog post and it is very helpful to learn how to write on contact text because before writing I have to choose the theme and organize my thinking to write in Word before so it is.

✓ I usually write a blog post, and it is very helpful for learning how to write content. Before writing, I have to choose a theme and organize my thoughts in Word.

The sentence misuses gerunds and infinitives and has awkward phrasing. Use 'write a blog post' (lowercase 'a') and 'helpful for learning' or 'helpful in learning.' 'Contact text' should be 'content.' Use 'organize my thoughts' not 'thinking.' Remove redundant 'before' at the end. Practice using verb+ -ing correctly ('learning,' 'writing') and choosing correct nouns ('content,' 'thoughts'). (Note: Explanation provided in English as requested.)