Watch— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (use present simple), and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences. Use linking words if adding reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I often wear a watch. I check it regularly to keep track of time so I don't miss appointments, and I find it more convenient than using my phone.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and tidy up details. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition of brand/name. Give one or two specific details (when, who gave it, appearance, why it mattered) with smooth linking words.

Exemplo: Yes. My parents gave me a gold Casio watch for my birthday in 2021. I liked it because it was stylish and sturdy, and it cost around CN¥1000, so it felt like a special present.

Sugestão: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear opinion and support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid vague or repetitive phrasing and make comparisons grammatically correct.

Exemplo: People often wear expensive watches to signal their social status. For example, wearing a luxury brand can indicate success or wealth, and some people do it to make a good impression at work or social events.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting points. Correct grammar (watch shows the time), remove repetition, and use linking words (also, additionally). Be specific about functions (heart rate monitor) and why they help.

Exemplo: Yes, I think wearing a watch is useful because it provides a quick way to check the time. Also, modern smartwatches have health features—such as heart-rate monitoring and activity tracking—which help people manage their fitness.

× Yes, I will watch from time to time as I need to check the check the clock as soon as possible, which is very convenient for me to to ensure that I'm not late for any important occasions.

✓ Yes, I check the time from time to time when I need to know the time, which is very convenient and helps me ensure that I'm not late for any important occasions.

The original sentence misuses 'will watch' (future and wrong verb) and repeats words. Use present simple 'check' for habitual action. Remove duplicated words and unneeded phrases. Also change 'check the clock as soon as possible' to 'when I need to know the time' for clarity and naturalness. Use 'helps me ensure' to link clauses correctly.

× Yes, I remember that I have got a watcher as a gift for my birthday in 2021, my parents purchased the CAS Casio Casio watch and which is the gold, which is gold and it it values about CN¥1000. So yeah.

✓ Yes, I remember that I got a watch as a gift for my birthday in 2021. My parents bought a Casio watch that is gold and costs about CN¥1000.

Multiple problems: 'watcher' is incorrect noun, 'have got' is unnecessary with a past time reference, repeated words and incorrect relative clauses. Use simple past 'got' and 'bought' for past events. Replace 'which is the gold' with 'that is gold' and 'it it values about' with 'costs about' for correct vocabulary and grammar.

× Well, it is a very complex reason. I think, uh, while for me, I think that for people they were expensive what to show their status in the society and to, to and want to, uh, show that they are, they are superior. They are any common ordinary people.

✓ Well, there are several reasons. I think some people wear expensive watches to show their status in society and to appear superior to ordinary people.

Original has wrong pronouns and verb forms: 'it is a very complex reason' is awkward, use 'there are several reasons.' 'they were expensive' uses past tense incorrectly and misplaces subject. Use present 'wear' for general truth. Remove fillers and repetition. Use 'appear superior to ordinary people' for clear comparison.

× Yes, I think it is important to wear a watch as watch can not can shows what time is it now. Also, some of the watches have a series of functions like detecting your heart rate or your blood rate, which is very which is very convenient for people to know their health health.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to wear a watch because a watch can show the time. Also, some watches have functions like measuring your heart rate or blood pressure, which is very convenient for people to monitor their health.

Original contains modal/auxiliary errors ('can not can shows') and word order issues ('what time is it now'). Use 'because' to link reasons, 'can show the time' for correct verb form and word order. Replace 'detecting' with 'measuring' and 'blood rate' with 'blood pressure.' Remove repetition and use 'monitor their health' for natural phrasing.