Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid missing words and unclear phrases (e.g. “on my” should be “on my phone”); replace vague phrases like “some similar advertisements” with precise descriptions (e.g. sponsored posts or targeted ads). Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes — I often see advertisements on my phone because I shop on social media. For example, after looking at sneakers, I usually get targeted sponsored posts for similar shoes and clothing.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide one concrete anecdote with correct nouns and chronology. Fix confusing or incorrect words (e.g. “Barbados” → “Barbie ad”; “House of them” → “a new dollhouse”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like when or so to make the story coherent.

Exemplo: Yes — Barbie commercials left a big impression on me. When they advertised a new Barbie dollhouse, I asked my aunt to take me to the toy store, and I remember feeling so excited that I saved my allowance to buy it.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give specific examples. Use correct terminology (e.g. “FMCG products” is fine, but explain what you mean) and connect ideas with linking words (for example, and, such as). Avoid generic phrases like “our audience”; instead say “passengers” or “commuters.”

Exemplo: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses, especially for FMCG products such as snacks and personal care items. For example, big posters often feature celebrities promoting a new shampoo, which catches commuters’ attention.

Sugestão: Be natural and avoid hesitation or invented words. Start with a direct opinion (Yes/No/Somewhat), then give a reason and an example. Use correct collocations (e.g. “quite ambivalent” not “quite envi ambivalent”), and replace awkward phrases like “get kicked out of spotting” with clear expressions such as “enjoy spotting” or “notice.”

Exemplo: I’m somewhat ambivalent about advertisements: I dislike intrusive ads, but I appreciate clever ones. For instance, humorous or story-based ads often stick in my mind and make me remember the brand.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence then support with specific reasons and examples. Remove fillers like “umm” and avoid repetition. Explain what you find appealing about luxury ads (celebrity endorsements, high-quality visuals) and link reasons with words like because or for example.

Exemplo: I prefer luxury brand advertisements because I enjoy their high-quality visuals and celebrity endorsements. For example, a fashion campaign with elegant photography and a well-known actor often captures my attention.

× Yes, I often see advertisements on my because I like to purchase stuff on social media such as the top or some trendy shoes in some similar advertisements would just come out to me.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone because I like to purchase things on social media, such as clothing or trendy shoes, and similar ads just pop up for me.

The original sentence is missing the word 'phone' after 'on my' and contains several structural issues: awkward phrases ('the top'), incorrect word choice ('stuff' is informal), and a run-on with mismatched clauses. Correct by supplying the missing noun, choosing clearer vocabulary ('things', 'clothing'), and combining clauses with appropriate conjunctions and verbs ('pop up'). Keep tense present simple to match habitual action. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, there were several advertisements about Barbie dolls when I was a child and one of the most memorable memories was that once I saw the Barbados to introduce a new House of them, I took my auntie to go to the toy store to buy that.

✓ Yes, there were several advertisements about Barbie dolls when I was a child, and one of my most memorable experiences is that once I saw an ad introducing a new line of Barbies, so I took my auntie to the toy store to buy one.

The sentence contains incorrect words ('Barbados' instead of 'Barbie ad' or 'an ad'), redundancy ('most memorable memories'), and awkward structure. Replace redundant phrasing with 'most memorable experiences', correct the noun reference to 'an ad' or 'an advertisement', and clarify 'new line of Barbies'. Use 'one' instead of 'that' for the object. Maintain past context but present 'is' can be 'was' depending on nuance; here 'is' emphasizes lasting memory but 'was' is also acceptable. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and buses, especially for some FMCG industry products.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and buses, especially for FMCG products.

The phrase 'FMCG industry products' is wordy and uses an unnecessary article 'the' if present; simplify to the common collocation 'FMCG products' (fast-moving consumer goods). Removing 'industry' improves naturalness. Keep present simple for habitual observation. Grammar problem type ID:22

× They will often have some celebrities to introduce their products and those photos are really memorable for our audience.

✓ They often feature celebrities who promote their products, and those images are really memorable to the audience.

'Have some celebrities to introduce' is non-idiomatic; use 'feature celebrities who promote' or 'hire celebrities to promote'. 'Photos' can be better as 'images' or 'ads', and 'for our audience' is unclear—use 'to the audience' or 'for viewers'. Also change 'will often' to 'often' for habitual action. This fixes pronoun/reference and idiomatic usage. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I would have to say I'm quite envi ambivalent about advertisements, although I do appreciate the clever ones.

✓ I would have to say I'm quite ambivalent about advertisements, although I do appreciate the clever ones.

The original contains a typo or garbled word 'envi' before 'ambivalent'. Removing the extraneous fragment yields the correct adjective 'ambivalent'. 'Quite ambivalent' correctly modifies 'about advertisements'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× There's something about an ad that tells us little story or uses humor that really sticks your mind, and I often get kicked out of spotting a particular creative campaign.

✓ There's something about an ad that tells a little story or uses humor that really sticks in your mind, and I often get excited when I spot a particularly creative campaign.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'little story', wrong pronoun 'your' should match speaker perspective ('in your mind' is generic but 'in my mind' could be used), incorrect idiom 'get kicked out of spotting' is wrong—use 'get excited when I spot'. Also change 'particular creative campaign' to 'a particularly creative campaign' for correct modifier placement and form. Maintain present simple for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I usually stick to luxury brands advertisements because I like to, umm, give my attention to celebrities and some aesthetic images.

✓ I usually stick to luxury brand advertisements because I like to focus my attention on celebrities and aesthetic images.

Use 'luxury brand advertisements' (singular noun as modifier) or 'luxury-brand advertisements' and prefer 'focus my attention on' rather than 'give my attention to'. The gerund structure is fine but 'give my attention to' is less natural here. This corrects the modifier order and verb phrase choice. Grammar problem type ID:8

× So yeah, I do really like luxury advertisements.

✓ So yeah, I really do like luxury advertisements.

This sentence is grammatical but sounds more natural with the adverb order 'really do' rather than 'do really'. Adjusting adverb placement improves emphasis and fluency. Also 'luxury advertisements' is fine; no article needed. Grammar problem type ID:22