Advertisement— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific detail about the ad (e.g., slogan, character, or scene) and finish with a brief personal effect. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes. One childhood advert I remember featured a cheerful jingle encouraging kids to eat vegetables. The song had a catchy chorus and colorful characters, so it made vegetables seem fun; as a result, I actually started asking my parents for them.

Sugestão: Clarify and tighten sentences, correct prepositions and avoid redundancy. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific examples (posters, digital screens, audio announcements), and use linking words to make the response coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I often notice many adverts on public transport, particularly on trains. For example, there are posters on the walls and digital screens above the seats, and sometimes short audio ads play on the train, so they are hard to miss.

Sugestão: Make the contrast clearer and fix grammar (remove duplicate words). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your mixed view, then briefly explain two reasons with linking words (e.g., however, because). Keep it within three sentences.

Exemplo: I have mixed feelings about adverts. Initially I disliked them because they interrupt films or apps; however, since studying advertising I appreciate the creativity and psychology behind effective campaigns.

Sugestão: Be more specific about what you mean by 'static ad' and give a concrete example of double meaning. Use linking words to explain why you like it and how you would apply it. Keep length under five sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer static adverts with a double meaning, such as a poster that looks ordinary at first but reveals a secondary message on closer inspection. I like these because they reward careful viewers and show creative thinking, and I would use this technique to engage my audience emotionally and intellectually.

Sugestão: Correct comparative grammar ('more on my phone than on my computer') and be specific about ad types and frequency. Start with a direct comparison, then give a brief reason and one example (video ads, banner ads).

Exemplo: Yes, I see far more adverts on my phone than on my computer, mainly because many apps and social media platforms use targeted ads. For instance, I often encounter short video ads in apps and banner ads when I scroll through feeds.

× Growing up watching TV, I always remember this one commercial that had a catchy Jingle talking about vegetables.

✓ Growing up watching TV, I always remembered this one commercial that had a catchy jingle about vegetables.

The sentence mixes past and present reference; 'Growing up' and 'had' indicate past, so 'remember' should be in past tense 'remembered' to maintain consistent past narration. Also 'jingle' should be lowercase. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when recounting past events by using past verbs (e.g., 'remembered').

× As a child, you're not really used to eating a lot of vegetables or it's the last thing you'd think about eating, so coming up with a catchy Jingle made me more interested about it.

✓ As a child, I wasn't really used to eating a lot of vegetables or it was the last thing I'd think about eating, so coming up with a catchy jingle made me more interested in them.

The original shifts from 'As a child' to 'you're' which is an inconsistent pronoun; use first person 'I' for personal recollection. 'Made me more interested about it' is incorrect collocation: 'interested in' is correct and 'vegetables' is plural, so use 'them'. Also keep tense consistent using past forms.

× I do see a lot of advertising and public transport, especially in trains.

✓ I do see a lot of advertising on public transport, especially on trains.

Preposition 'in' is less natural here; 'on public transport' and 'on trains' are the standard collocations in English. Also the original missed 'on' before 'public transport'.

× I think there are more advertisements in a train more than people realize, especially when they look around on the different seats.

✓ I think there are more advertisements on trains than people realize, especially when they look around at the different seats.

Use plural 'trains' rather than 'a train' for general statements. Use 'on trains' not 'in a train'. Also 'more than people realize' should follow directly; 'especially when they look around at the different seats' needs preposition 'at'.

× It would have different advertisements or whenever a catchy Jingle would play on the radio or the sound system.

✓ There would be different advertisements, or a catchy jingle might play on the radio or the sound system.

Original mixes conditional 'would have' awkwardly; use 'there would be' for existence and 'might play' for possible occurrence. Also 'jingle' lowercase. Use clear subject 'there' for existence statements.

× This is an interesting question because my answer is both yes and no.

✓ This is an interesting question because my answer is both yes and no.

No grammatical change needed; included to show tense is appropriate. Keep present 'is' because the question is immediate.

× I grew up disliking advertisements whenever I would come across them, whether it's through my phone or in a movie.

✓ I grew up disliking advertisements whenever I came across them, whether through my phone or in a movie.

When recounting past habitual actions use simple past 'came across' rather than 'would come across'. Also remove unnecessary 'it's' and keep parallel structure 'through my phone or in a movie' -> 'through my phone or in a movie' is acceptable; removing 'it's' makes sentence cleaner.

× But having have studied advertising, it allowed me to look more and understand the actual psychology it takes for it to be effective.

✓ But having studied advertising allowed me to look more closely and understand the psychology it takes for advertising to be effective.

'Having have studied' is ungrammatical; use 'having studied' for perfect participle. 'Look more' is vague; 'look more closely' is natural. Also avoid redundant 'it' and clarify 'the psychology... for advertising to be effective.' Maintain past reference.

× Having a degree in advertising has exposed me to different kinds of advertisements.

✓ Having a degree in advertising has exposed me to different kinds of advertisements.

No change needed; present perfect 'has exposed' correctly links past attainment with present effect.

× To be specific, one of my favorites would be a static ad, but it would have a double meaning.

✓ To be specific, one of my favorites would be a static ad that has a double meaning.

Original 'but' is unnecessary and slightly contradictory; 'that has' states the defining feature. Maintain conditional 'would be' if hypothetical; otherwise use 'is' if certain.

× It really allows me to look beyond what I see, and I enjoy having to impart that to my viewers if I were to create an ad as well.

✓ It really allows me to see beyond the surface, and I would enjoy imparting that to my viewers if I were to create an ad.

'Look beyond what I see' is awkward; 'see beyond the surface' is clearer. 'Enjoy having to impart' is awkward; 'would enjoy imparting' fits the conditional 'if I were to create an ad'.

× To be honest, I do see a lot of advertisements on my phone than my computer, more than I would like to see them.

✓ To be honest, I see more advertisements on my phone than on my computer, more than I would like.

Use comparative 'more... than' correctly: 'see more advertisements on my phone than on my computer'. Remove redundant 'do' unless emphasizing. 'More than I would like to see them' is wordy; 'more than I would like' is sufficient.

× It's one of the advancements that I do see in our technology today and it's really a growing industry where ads can be seen more than a train or in public.

✓ It's one of the advancements I see in our technology today, and it's really a growing industry where ads can be seen more than on trains or in public.

Replace 'seen more than a train' with 'seen more than on trains' to use correct preposition 'on'. Remove extra 'do' for naturalness. Clarify 'seen more on trains or in public' for parallel structure.