Part 1
Examinador
Do you like drawing?
Candidato
No, I don't like drawing. I am not good at drawing a picture. When I was a child in elementary school, there are first of all drawing festival. I don't like it because I'm not good at drawing.
Examinador
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Candidato
I neither like ordinary like going to gallery. I'm not I don't have concerning the gallery but someday I like to go to Galide and watching drawing.
Examinador
Do you want to learn more about art?
Candidato
Yes, I want to because the more The more know about art, the more expand my life so in ten years I'd like to learn art.
Examinador
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Candidato
No, I didn't learn drawing when I'm kids. I don't want to do that and I don't interest I was not interesting in drawings, but if I were I learned my drawings is better.
Do you like drawing?
Pontuação: 45.0Sugestão: 回答は直接的だが、文法や表現の誤りが多く、理由の説明も繰り返しで具体性が不足しています。改善点:1) 文法を正しくし、時制を統一する(例:過去の話は過去形で)。2) 冗長な表現を避け、理由を一度明確に述べる。3) 具体例(どんな点が苦手か、思い出の出来事)を1つ加える。4) 文は3文以内に収める。
Exemplo: No, I don't enjoy drawing because I'm not very good at it. For example, at an elementary school art festival I felt embarrassed by my work compared with my classmates. Since then I usually avoid drawing as a hobby.
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Pontuação: 40.0Sugestão: 答えは混乱しており、意味がはっきりしません。改善点:1) はっきりした立場(はい/いいえ/時々)で始める。2) 接続詞や副詞を使って理由や頻度を説明する(e.g. sometimes, occasionally)。3) ギャラリーで何を見たいのか具体的に述べる。4) 発音や語彙の間違い(gallery, like)に注意する。
Exemplo: I don't visit galleries very often, but I do enjoy going occasionally. For instance, I like visiting contemporary art exhibitions because I find the ideas behind the works interesting.
Do you want to learn more about art?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: ポジティブな意欲は示されていますが、表現や構造が不自然です。改善点:1) 主題文で明確に答える。2) 理由は簡潔で具体的に(どのように人生が広がるのか)。3) 未来計画は簡潔に述べる。4) 冗長な繰り返し(the more the more)を避ける。
Exemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it can broaden my perspective and inspire creativity. For example, in ten years I hope to take courses in painting or art history to understand different styles and cultures.
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Pontuação: 35.0Sugestão: 過去の話なのに時制や文法が乱れ、意味が取りにくくなっています。改善点:1) 過去形を正しく使う(I didn't learn… / I wasn't interested…)。2) 理由を簡潔に述べる(なぜ学ばなかったか)。3) 仮定法の誤用を避け、もし〜だったらという条件は正しい構文で。4) 文は2〜3文以内にまとめる。
Exemplo: No, I didn't take drawing lessons as a child because I wasn't interested at the time. Looking back, if I had studied drawing, I think my skills would have improved.
× I am not good at drawing a picture.
✓ I am not good at drawing pictures.
『drawing picture』は不自然な組み合わせで、複数形の方が一般的です。また 'drawing' は一般に行為やスキルを指すため 'drawing pictures' とするのが自然です。改善策: 可算名詞 'picture' を複数形にし、慣用表現 'good at drawing' と組み合わせる。
× When I was a child in elementary school, there are first of all drawing festival.
✓ When I was a child in elementary school, there was, first of all, a drawing festival.
時制は過去を示すので 'there are' は誤りで、過去形の 'there was' が必要です。また 'a drawing festival' の冠詞が欠けていることと語順の調整が必要です。改善策: 過去を示す 'was' を使い、冠詞 'a' を補い、句読点で区切る。
× I don't like it because I'm not good at drawing.
✓ I didn't like it because I wasn't good at drawing.
文脈は過去の出来事(小学校時代)を説明しているため、現在形 'don't/I'm not' ではなく過去形 'didn't/wasn't' を使うべきです。改善策: 一貫して過去形にする。
× I neither like ordinary like going to gallery.
✓ I don't really like going to galleries.
構文が混乱しており 'neither...like' は誤用です。さらに 'gallery' は通常複数形で一般的に話すとき 'galleries' を使います。改善策: 否定の自然な表現 'don't really like' を使い名詞を複数形にする。
× I'm not I don't have concerning the gallery but someday I like to go to Galide and watching drawing.
✓ I don't have strong feelings about galleries, but someday I would like to go to a gallery and see some drawings.
複数の誤りがあり、代名詞とフレーズの使い方が不適切です。'I'm not I don't have concerning' は意味不明で、'someday I like to' は意向の表現として 'would like to' を使う方が自然です。また 'watching drawing' は不適切で 'see drawings' や 'look at drawings' にする必要があります。改善策: 意図を明確にし、適切な動詞句と冠詞を用いる。
× I'm not I don't have concerning the gallery but someday I like to go to Galide and watching drawing.
✓ I don't have strong feelings about galleries, but someday I would like to go to a gallery and see some drawings.
元の文に現在形 'like' と 'watching' が混在していますが、希望を表す際には 'would like to' を使い、本動詞は不定詞で続けます。改善策: 'would like to' + 動詞の原形(see)を使う。
× Yes, I want to because the more The more know about art, the more expand my life so in ten years I'd like to learn art.
✓ Yes, I do, because the more I know about art, the more it will expand my life, so in ten years I'd like to study art.
'I want to' は文脈に応じ 'I do' や 'I want to learn more' とするのが自然です。比較の構文では主語と動詞が抜けているため 'the more I know' とし、結果の節に主語(it)と未来を示す助動詞 'will' を入れると明確になります。また 'learn art' より 'study art' が自然です。改善策: 比較構文の主語と動詞を明示し、'study art' を用いる。
× No, I didn't learn drawing when I'm kids.
✓ No, I didn't learn drawing when I was a kid.
時間を示す節は過去を示すので 'I'm kids' は誤りで、主語と時制の一致が必要です。単数 'a kid' または複数 'kids' に合わせて 'was' を使う。改善策: 'when I was a kid' の定型表現を使う。
× I don't want to do that and I don't interest I was not interesting in drawings, but if I were I learned my drawings is better.
✓ I didn't want to do it and I wasn't interested in drawing, but if I had practiced, my drawings would be better.
複数の時制と語法の誤りがある: 過去の否定は 'didn't want'、感情を表す 'be interested in' は過去形 'wasn't interested'、仮定法過去完了の形 'if I had practiced' と結果の助動詞 'would be' または 'would have been' を適切に使う必要があります。改善策: 意図した意味(過去に練習していれば現在より上手だった)に合わせて仮定法過去完了と条件結果を用いる。