Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid hesitation; finish sentences and use clear tense and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Reduce filler words (umm) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "started drawing" instead of "started to Draw Something").

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I started drawing this year after my boyfriend gave me a sketchbook when we visited Venice, and that gift inspired me to practice regularly. Since then, I try to draw at least once a week to improve my skills.

Sugestão: Use a clear topic sentence and simpler, correctly structured supporting sentences. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense or word forms (e.g., "I really like going to galleries", not "I really like go to the gallery"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain reasons and keep sentences within 3–4 short sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I love studying the details in paintings. If there is an exhibition in my city, I usually visit the museum straight away. Looking closely at brushwork and composition makes me feel joyful and inspired.

Sugestão: Be slightly more formal and precise: use full sentences, correct titles and examples, and avoid vague phrasing. Offer one specific reason why you want to learn more and mention concrete details from the book. Use linking words like "for example" correctly with accurate titles (e.g., "Girl with a Pearl Earring").

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I recently bought The Story of Art, which summarizes major works from Western art history. For example, it discusses pieces such as Vermeer’s Girl with a Pearl Earring and explains why their composition and color are significant, which I find fascinating.

Sugestão: Organize your response: begin with a clear statement about learning drawing, then give a concise anecdote with past-tense consistency and a linking word to show result (e.g., "as a result"). Avoid trailing off and correct tense ("I did" not "I do" for past). Show reflection on how that experience affected you and possibly how you overcame it.

Exemplo: Yes, I did learn to draw as a child. I remember in kindergarten a teacher told me not to use too many colors, which upset me and made me cry because I wanted to express myself freely. However, that experience later motivated me to experiment more with color as I grew older.

× I started to Draw Something this year, so not very long ago.

✓ I started drawing this year, so not very long ago.

Use the verb + -ing form after 'start' when referring to beginning an activity. 'Draw Something' appears to be a game title but in this context the general activity is intended; use lowercase and the gerund 'drawing' for natural phrasing.

× And the reason I started to do that is because umm, I got a sketchbook from my boyfriend when we traveled together in Venice.

✓ And the reason I started doing that is because I got a sketchbook from my boyfriend when we traveled together in Venice.

'Start' is followed by the -ing form when describing beginning an activity. 'Started doing' is more natural than 'started to do' here.

× So that's the point where I started to draw and I.

✓ So that's the point where I started to draw.

The sentence ends with an incomplete clause 'and I.' Remove the fragment to complete the sentence and maintain clarity.

× I really like go to the gallery.

✓ I really like going to the gallery.

After 'like' when speaking about general preferences, use the gerund 'going' not the base form 'go.'

× I would go to the gallery if I knew if I know any exhibition that's going on in my city and I would immediately go to, for example, the museum or the gallery.

✓ I would go to the gallery if I knew of any exhibition that was going on in my city, and I would immediately go to, for example, the museum or the gallery.

Conditional sentence mixing tenses and extra 'if' cause problems. For a hypothetical present condition use 'if I knew of any exhibition that was going on' (or 'if I knew of any exhibitions') and keep past tense 'was' to match 'would.' Also remove the redundant 'if I know.'

× I really enjoy to look closer to the details in paintings and it made me feel really joyful and satisfied after when I can analyze.

✓ I really enjoy looking closely at the details in paintings, and it makes me feel really joyful and satisfied when I can analyze them.

Use 'enjoy' + gerund 'looking.' 'Look closer to' is incorrect; use 'look closely at.' Maintain consistent tense: present 'enjoy' requires present result 'makes' and refer back to 'paintings' with 'them.'

× I bought the book. It's called The Short Story of Art, and it introduces the famous and popular paintings in Western art history.

✓ I bought a book called The Story of Art, and it introduces famous and well-known paintings in Western art history.

Minor correction: article 'the book' to 'a book' sounds more natural when first mentioning it. Title corrected to plausible 'The Story of Art' (if title was intended). 'Famous and popular' is redundant; use 'famous and well-known' or just 'famous.'

× For example, the girl wearing a Pearl earrings or the girl on the swim.

✓ For example, the Girl with a Pearl Earring or The Girl with a Pearl Earring (the Girl on the Shore / The Girl on the Shore).

The student attempts to refer to specific paintings: correct titles use articles and proper nouns: 'Girl with a Pearl Earring' and 'The Girl on the Shore' (or correct title intended). Also 'Pearl earrings' should be singular 'Pearl Earring' for the famous painting. Use correct titles and capitalization for artworks.

× Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?

✓ Did you learn to draw when you were a kid?

With 'learn' use the infinitive 'to draw' to indicate acquiring a skill, not the gerund 'drawing.'

× Yes I do, but I have some very sad memories regarding drawing when I was a kid.

✓ Yes I did, but I have some very sad memories regarding drawing from when I was a kid.

Question used past tense 'Did you learn...' so answer should be 'Yes, I did.' 'Regarding drawing when I was a kid' is clearer as 'regarding drawing from when I was a kid.'

× I remember that I started to draw when I was in kindergarten and then there was one time a teacher came to me and then said that I shouldn't use too much color on my paintings and I feel so sad after that I cried because I wanted to use my way to express but.

✓ I remember that I started drawing when I was in kindergarten, and then one time a teacher came to me and said that I shouldn't use too much color on my paintings. I felt so sad after that and I cried because I wanted to use my own way to express myself.

Consistent past tense is needed: 'started drawing' (gerund after start), 'came to me and said' (past), 'I felt so sad' (past). Remove repeated 'then.' Use reflexive 'my own way to express myself' for correctness. End the sentence without trailing 'but.'