Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and repetition, and correct grammar (use gerunds and agreement). Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. For example, say why those subjects appeal to you and give a short example.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy drawing, especially scenes that depict local culture and everyday life. For example, I like sketching traditional festivals because they have rich colours and interesting costumes, which help me capture unique details.

Sugestão: Make your response smoother and grammatically correct: begin with a topic sentence, use linking words to add details, and avoid filler words. Be specific about what you enjoy seeing and why, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because they are a relaxing place to spend time with friends. Also, I appreciate seeing different painting styles and design techniques, such as modern abstracts and detailed landscapes, which often inspire my own sketches.

Sugestão: Give a clear, concise answer and organise reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (use correct clauses and verb forms) and reduce hesitation. Provide one specific alternative interest to make your answer concrete.

Exemplo: To be honest, I don't plan to study art further because, although I admire artists for their creativity and patience, I'm more focused on technology and creative writing. For instance, I am learning web development, which I find more relevant to my future career.

Sugestão: Respond with a clear past-tense statement, avoid fillers, and give a specific detail or example about what you learned. Use linking words to connect sentences and stay within a short, natural length.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned some drawing when I was in primary school. My teacher taught basic techniques like shading and proportions, so I could complete simple paintings by myself, which I found very enjoyable.

× Uh, yes, definitely I am, uh, very, uh, enjoy drawing, uh, especially when they're show uh, local culture history or uh, real life. So, uh, I think it is very beautiful. I'm very enjoy it.

✓ Uh, yes, I definitely enjoy drawing, especially when they show local culture, history, or real life. I think it is very beautiful. I really enjoy it.

The original uses 'very enjoy' and 'I'm very enjoy it', which is incorrect because 'enjoy' is a verb and should not be modified by 'very' directly; use adverbs like 'really' or 'definitely' before the verb. Also 'definitely I am' is awkward; place adverb before the verb: 'I definitely enjoy'. 'They're show' is incorrect subject-verb form and pronoun: use 'they show' or 'when it shows'; here 'they show local culture' is acceptable if referring to drawings or paintings. Add commas and correct coordination for clarity.

× especially when they're show uh, local culture history or uh, real life.

✓ especially when they show local culture, history, or real life.

'They're' is a contraction of 'they are' and does not fit before a verb 'show'. Use the subject pronoun 'they' to form 'they show'. Also add commas to separate list items and include 'or' appropriately.

× I can, uh, and I can, uh, also, uh, looking at beautiful paintings and designs.

✓ I can, and I can also look at beautiful paintings and designs.

The gerund 'looking' is incorrectly used after auxiliary-like phrase 'I can'. After 'can' use the base verb 'look'. Remove redundant fillers and place 'also' in its normal position: 'I can also look'. This fixes verb form and adverb placement.

× because they're need to, uh, because they have creativity and patience,

✓ because they need to, as they have creativity and patience,

'They're need to' mixes contraction 'they're' (they are) with 'need'; the correct form is 'they need to'. Also 'because' repeated is redundant; replace second 'because' with 'as' or restructure the clause. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'they need'.

× Uh, yes, I learn a little drawing when I am, I'm very young, uh, probably in my primary school.

✓ Uh, yes, I learned a little drawing when I was very young, probably in primary school.

The sentence refers to a past time, so use past tense 'learned' and 'was' rather than present 'learn' and 'am'. Also 'a little drawing' is better phrased as 'learned a little drawing' or 'learned some drawing'; remove unnecessary filler words and article before 'primary school' depending on variety, 'in primary school' is natural.

× Uh, my teacher told me some, uh, drawing skills.

✓ Uh, my teacher taught me some drawing skills.

'Told me some drawing skills' is incorrect collocation: you 'teach' skills rather than 'tell' them. Use past tense 'taught' since it's a past event. 'Drawing skills' is a noun phrase that is fine.

× Uh, I can, uh, uh, painting by myself.

✓ Uh, I can paint by myself.

After modal verb 'can' use base form 'paint', not the present participle 'painting'. Remove fillers and ensure correct verb form.