Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Not really") then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (umm) and avoid repeating the same idea. Focus on current ability and a brief past contrast.

Exemplo: Not really. I can't draw well at the moment, although I enjoyed drawing as a child because I used to paint scenes from nature. However, I haven't practiced for years, so my skills have faded.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a direct response, then explain with specific details and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing (e.g., 'the Kazakhstan'). Use linking words like 'however' and 'so' to connect ideas and mention one concrete example of what you'd like to see.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. However, there are no galleries in my hometown, so I rarely get the opportunity to visit one. If I had the chance, I would travel to a larger city or even to Kazakhstan to see famous exhibitions, especially the jewelry collections I've read about.

Sugestão: Give a clearer, more natural explanation and correct grammar. Begin with a direct response, then provide one or two concise reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid slang ('gonna', 'wanna') and fillers. Provide a contrast if relevant.

Exemplo: No, I don't plan to learn more about art because I'm not really interested in it. Learning a new subject requires time and motivation, and I prefer to spend that time on topics I enjoy more.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and give specific, grammatically correct supporting detail. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and add a brief explanation for the loss of skill. Avoid vague phrases like 'learned how to try' and fix verb agreement.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I took drawing lessons in primary school, and my art and music teachers encouraged me a lot. Over the years I stopped practising, so my drawing skills have declined.

× I am not good at drawing right now.

✓ I am not good at drawing right now.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present continuous and 'right now' to indicate current state.

× But if you had asked me this question when I was a child, I would definitely say that I love it because I had the ability and the, umm, great sense of painting there.

✓ But if you had asked me this question when I was a child, I would definitely have said that I loved it because I had the ability and the great sense of painting then.

This is a third conditional mixed-tense error. In a hypothetical past condition ('if you had asked'), the result clause should use perfect conditional ('would have said') and past tense consistently ('loved', 'had'). Also 'there' is incorrect for time/place; use 'then'. Suggestion: use 'would have said' and keep verbs in past tense for a past hypothetical scenario.

× I really love that in the past, but not anymore.

✓ I really loved that in the past, but not anymore.

Refers to a past preference, so use past simple 'loved' rather than present 'love'. Keep tense consistent when describing past habits or feelings.

× Definitely, but we don't have any galleries in my hometown so there is no any chances to visit.

✓ Definitely, but we don't have any galleries in my hometown so there are no chances to visit.

Subject-verb agreement and quantifier use: 'chances' plural requires 'are' not 'is'. Also 'no any' is ungrammatical; use 'no' or 'any' alone. Suggestion: 'there are no chances' or better 'there are no opportunities'.

× But when I would have a chance I would definitely visit it in larger cities and the Kazakhstan.

✓ But when I have a chance I will definitely visit galleries in larger cities and Kazakhstan.

Incorrect conditional/future structure: use 'when I have a chance' for a real future possibility and 'will' for future action. Also 'visit it in larger cities and the Kazakhstan' is wrong: 'visit galleries in larger cities and Kazakhstan' is natural; remove 'the' before country names unless required.

× I've heard so many umm great jewelry, so it's my dream to visit them in the future.

✓ I've heard about so many great jewelry pieces, so it's my dream to see them in the future.

'Jewelry' is an uncountable noun; 'many' requires countable nouns. Use 'many pieces of jewelry' or 'so much great jewelry'. Also 'visit them' is odd for objects; use 'see them' or 'visit the exhibitions'. Suggestion: 'so many great pieces of jewelry' or 'so much great jewelry'.

× To be honest, no, I'm not gonna learn it because I'm not even interested in it.

✓ To be honest, no, I'm not going to learn it because I'm not interested in it.

Informal 'gonna' should be changed to 'going to' in formal speech. Also redundant 'even' is unnecessary. Use 'not interested in it' for clarity.

× I don't see any umm, great ideas to learn it if I am not interested in it.

✓ I don't see any great reason to learn it if I am not interested in it.

'Ideas to learn it' is unnatural collocation. Use 'reason to learn it' or 'point in learning it'. Also avoid filler words. Suggestion: 'I don't see any good reason to learn it'.

× Because if you wanna learn something new, you need to be fully, uh, understand and prefer it.

✓ Because if you want to learn something new, you need to fully understand and appreciate it.

Grammar and word choice errors: 'wanna' -> 'want to' for formal correctness. 'Be fully understand' mixes verb forms; use 'fully understand' (no 'be'). 'Prefer' is wrong choice; use 'appreciate' or 'be interested in'. Suggestion: 'fully understand and appreciate it'.

× But in my view it's not the same.

✓ But in my view it's not the same now.

Sentence is acceptable but adding 'now' clarifies contrast with past. No major grammatical error; optional improvement for clarity.

× Yes I did. I learned how to try in the primary schools.

✓ Yes, I did. I learned how to draw in primary school.

'Learned how to try' is incorrect collocation; likely 'draw'. 'Primary schools' plural is acceptable but 'primary school' singular as a period is more natural. Suggestion: 'I learned how to draw in primary school.'

× My music teachers and the art teachers helped me great on these fields.

✓ My music and art teachers helped me a lot in these areas.

'Helped me great' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me a lot' or 'were very helpful'. 'On these fields' should be 'in these areas' or 'in these fields'. Combine teachers for conciseness: 'music and art teachers'.

× But by the time my skills has decreased so I cannot do that anymore.

✓ But over time my skills have decreased, so I cannot do that anymore.

Subject-verb agreement: plural 'skills' requires 'have' not 'has'. 'By the time' is awkward here; 'over time' or 'since then' is better. Add comma before 'so' for clarity.