Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tenses and prepositions, and avoid filler words.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy drawing. When I go outside I often notice interesting subjects like flowers and animals, and I sketch them with a pencil on paper to capture details and practice observation.

Sugestão: Make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Give a clear reason and one specific example of what you enjoy in galleries. Omit fillers like 'you know' and correct article use (a/an).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because they display a wide range of styles and techniques. For example, I like seeing contemporary paintings and sculptures that inspire my own sketches.

Sugestão: Give a focused reason and describe specific aspects you want to learn. Use complete sentences and link ideas logically with words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, I definitely want to learn more about art because I want to improve my detailing and composition. For example, I'd like to study shading techniques and proportions to make my drawings neater and more structured.

Sugestão: Use correct past tense and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear topic sentence about past experience, then add a specific detail about how it helped you develop skills.

Exemplo: Yes, I started drawing as a child and practiced sketching with a pencil on plain paper. This practice helped me develop observation skills and build my confidence in creating art.

× Yes, I do like drawing because then when I go out I saw different things, different types of like flowers, animals and I just draw it with my pencil in paper.

✓ Yes, I do like drawing because when I go out I see different things, different types of flowers and animals, and I just draw them with my pencil on paper.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly ('go' present with 'saw' past). Use present tense 'see' to match 'go out'. 'draw' should be 'draw them' to refer to plural 'flowers and animals' and 'on paper' is the correct preposition. Also remove filler 'like' for clarity.

× Well, yes, I love to go to the gallery because there is so much beautiful art, pictures that everyone is showing and I, you know, I love watching a different kind of art and I am a art person, so I love it.

✓ Well, yes, I love to go to galleries because there is so much beautiful art and pictures that everyone is showing, and I, you know, love seeing different kinds of art. I am an art person, so I love it.

Use plural 'galleries' or 'the gallery' consistently; 'so much' works with uncountable 'art' but 'pictures' is plural so join with 'and'. 'Watching' is acceptable but 'seeing' or 'looking at' is more natural. Article before a vowel sound requires 'an' not 'a' ('an art person'). Also 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to match 'different types'.

× Umm, absolutely yes. I would like to learn more about art because art is a talent that not everyone can have, so I want to learn it. Improve more detailing, more neatness, structure, everything.

✓ Umm, absolutely yes. I would like to learn more about art because art is a talent that not everyone has, so I want to learn it and improve my detailing, neatness, structure, and everything else.

Use present tense 'has' instead of 'can have' for a general statement. The fragment 'Improve more detailing...' lacks a subject and verb; combine into one sentence with 'and improve my...' to make it grammatical. Use possessive 'my' to specify what to improve and list items parallelly.

× Yes, I when I was a child I start doing drawings and I I try to sketch with my pencil in a simple paper.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I started drawing and I tried to sketch with my pencil on simple paper.

When referring to past time 'when I was a child' use past tense 'started' and 'tried' rather than present forms 'start' and 'try'. Use 'on simple paper' or 'on a simple piece of paper' rather than 'in a simple paper'. Remove redundant 'I'.

× Also it's helped me to develop that art in me.

✓ Also it has helped me to develop the art in me.

Use present perfect 'has helped' to connect past action with present result. 'The art in me' is more natural than 'that art in me' in this context; 'the' specifies the ability previously mentioned.