Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap doğrudan ve istekli ama dilbilgisi hataları ve düzensiz yapı anlaşılırlığı azaltıyor. Daha doğal olmak için zaman ifadelerini ve amaç cümlelerini netleştir; gereksiz tekrarları çıkar; 2-3 cümleyle sınırlı kal ve bağlaçlar kullan. Örneğin, 'since my childhood which is my age, it's 13 until now' yerine 'since I was a child; I am 13 now' diyebilirsin. Ayrıca 'drawer' yerine 'illustrator' veya 'artist' kullan.

Exemplo: Yes, I have liked drawing since I was a child. I am 13 now and I practise every day to improve my skills because I want to become an illustrator in the future.

Sugestão: Cevap kısa ve içerik uygun ama zaman uyumsuzluğu ve yanlış kelime kullanımı var ('gallery' tekil/plural, 'all of the gallery' yerine 'many galleries' veya 'all the galleries'). Ayrıca bağlaçları düzelt ve nedenini daha açık ver: 'because we had to include them in our school projects.' şeklinde söyle.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed visiting galleries, especially when I was in Istanbul. I visited many galleries there with my sister because we had to include them in our school projects.

Sugestão: Niyet açık ama dilbilgisi ve ifadeler hatalı ('I'm lack of in a technical way' doğal değil). Daha doğal bir yapı: 'I lack technical skills' veya 'I need to improve my technical skills'. Ayrıca 'practice every day and watch YouTube tutorials' şeklinde bağlaç kullanarak iki eylemi bağla.

Exemplo: Yes, I want to learn more because I lack technical skills. I try to practise every day and watch YouTube tutorials to learn new techniques instead of only practising on my own.

Sugestão: Cevapta fikir var fakat karışık ve anlaşılması güç. Zaman ifadeleri ve sebep-sonuç ilişkisini net kur; sınav veya yetenek yarışması adını açık ve doğru söyle; gereksiz tekrarları kaldır. Örneğin: 'I learned to draw as a child because I wanted to enter a talent show called Bill Sam, so I practised every day.' gibi açık ve kısa cümleler kur.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned to draw when I was a child because I wanted to enter a talent show called Bill Sam. I practised every day to prepare for the competition.

× Yes, I like drawing since my childhood which is my age, it's 13 until now.

✓ Yes, I have liked drawing since my childhood; I am 13 years old now.

The student used 'like' with 'since' which requires present perfect (have liked) to show an action continuing from the past to present. The clause 'which is my age, it's 13 until now' is ungrammatical for stating current age; use 'I am 13 years old now.' Suggestions: use present perfect with since (I have liked drawing since I was a child) or 'I have liked drawing since my childhood' and state age as 'I am 13 years old.'

× I practice every day to improve my drawing because I need to be a drawer in my future life.

✓ I practice every day to improve my drawing because I want to be an artist in the future.

The phrase 'need to be a drawer in my future life' is awkward and uses 'need to be' incorrectly for a desire; use 'want to be' for future aspiration. 'Drawer' is the wrong noun for someone who draws; use 'artist' or 'drawer' is uncommon. Also 'in my future life' is redundant; use 'in the future.' Suggestion: say 'I want to be an artist in the future.'

× Yes, especially when I was in Istanbul.

✓ Yes, especially when I was in Istanbul.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for past context; no change needed. The original tense correctly refers to a past visit. No further suggestion.

× I went to all of the gallery in Istanbul with my sister, since we have to mention in our projects about this.

✓ I went to all of the galleries in Istanbul with my sister, since we had to mention them in our project.

Use plural 'galleries' because 'all of the' implies multiple places. 'We have to mention in our projects about this' mixes tenses and incorrect preposition; for a past action use 'had to mention' and 'in our project' (or 'in our projects') but 'mention them' refers back to galleries. Suggestion: 'I went to all of the galleries in Istanbul with my sister, since we had to mention them in our project.'

× Yes, because I'm lack of in a technical way so I need to practice every day from watching YouTube instead of just practicing by myself.

✓ Yes, because I lack technical skills, so I need to practice every day by watching YouTube videos instead of just practicing by myself.

The phrase 'I'm lack of' is incorrect; 'lack' is a verb and should be 'I lack' or 'I am lacking' followed by the object. 'In a technical way' is awkward; use 'technical skills.' Use 'by watching YouTube videos' to express method (verb+ -ing after 'by'). Suggestion: 'I lack technical skills, so I need to practice every day by watching YouTube videos.'

× Yes, I learned during when I was a kid since I had to enter the exam name as Bill Sam, which is a talent show and I did practice every day for this to last straight I I've.

✓ Yes, I learned when I was a kid because I had to enter an exam called Bill Sam, which is a talent show, and I practised every day for it.

Several tense and structure errors: 'learned during when I was a kid' should be 'learned when I was a kid.' 'Since' used for reason is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. 'Enter the exam name as Bill Sam' is incorrect phraseology; use 'enter an exam called Bill Sam.' Use past simple 'practised' for completed past actions. Remove unclear ending 'to last straight I I've.' Suggestion: 'I learned when I was a kid because I had to enter an exam called Bill Sam, a talent show, and I practised every day for it.'