Art— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, mention when you started and how drawing affects you now, using connectors such as “because” or “so”.

Exemplo: Yes, I love drawing. I started when I was two, according to my mother, and since then it has been my main way to express my emotions and personality. Because I practise regularly, drawing also helps me feel more focused and mature.

Sugestão: Make the response more concise and natural: use one clear reason with a specific example and linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘paintings’ or ‘artworks’ instead of ‘photos’; ‘artists’ not ‘artist’).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and forget about stress. For example, viewing paintings by contemporary artists often inspires me and gives me new ideas for my own work.

Sugestão: Give a clear, structured answer: state your desire to learn more, explain one specific reason, and avoid exaggerated or unclear statements. Use correct grammar and choose precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘fulfills me’ rather than ‘really full’).

Exemplo: Yes, I want to learn more about art because studying techniques and art history motivates me and improves my own work. For instance, learning colour theory has helped me make my drawings more expressive and satisfying.

Sugestão: Organise the answer: give a clear topic sentence (‘Yes, I did’), then one or two specific details about who taught you and what you learned. Fix grammar (tense, pronouns) and use correct words (e.g. ‘was a professional artist’, ‘drew’ not ‘drove’).

Exemplo: Yes, I did learn drawing as a child. My grandmother was a professional artist and she taught me to draw animals and horses; I copied her sketches and learned basic techniques like proportion and shading.

× When I was 2 years old I put my first pencil on the paper that my mom recalls and it is way that I can express myself and combination of my personality and keeps me more mature after.

✓ When I was 2 years old I put my first pencil on paper, as my mom recalls, and it became a way I could express myself; it combined with my personality and helped me become more mature later.

Errors include incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Put my first pencil on the paper that my mom recalls' is awkward; use 'as my mom recalls' and omit 'the' before 'paper'. 'It is way that I can express myself' uses present participle/structure incorrectly and tense mismatch; change to 'it became a way I could express myself' to match past reference. 'Combination of my personality' is a noun phrase used incorrectly in context; use 'it combined with my personality'. 'Keeps me more mature after' is incorrect verb tense and phrasing; use 'helped me become more mature later'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when speaking about childhood and use clear verb phrases instead of literal translations.

× And if you're in stress, it is the best way to reduce your stress.

✓ And if you're stressed, it is the best way to reduce your stress.

'In stress' is incorrect; use the adjective 'stressed' or the phrase 'under stress'. Also avoid repeating 'your stress' if redundant, but here corrected to keep meaning. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'stressed' or 'under stress' for natural phrasing.

× And if you're looking at photos, you can see artist.

✓ And if you're looking at photos, you can see the artists.

Missing article and pluralization: 'artist' should be plural 'artists' or 'the artist' depending on meaning, and article 'the' is needed for singular. Here plural fits context. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and include articles when referencing a group.

× Absolutely, because when I'm learning about art I feel like more motivated about it.

✓ Absolutely, because when I learn about art I feel more motivated by it.

Mixed and unnatural tense: 'I'm learning' implies ongoing action, but general statement about learning should use simple present 'I learn'. 'Feel like more motivated about it' is incorrect collocation; use 'feel more motivated by it' or 'feel more motivated to learn'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/general statements and correct preposition 'by' for cause.

× So it is keeps me really full, energetic and without art I'm nothing.

✓ So it keeps me really fulfilled and energetic, and without art I'm nothing.

'So it is keeps' has extra 'is' and wrong verb form; use 'it keeps me'. 'Really full' is not a natural collocation for emotional satisfaction; 'fulfilled' is appropriate. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'is' and choose correct adjectives for feelings.

× It's just express, not my personality.

✓ It just expresses my personality, not something else.

'It's just express' uses base verb instead of conjugated form; use 'expresses'. The original sentence order and meaning are unclear: clarify that art expresses the speaker's personality. Suggestion: use subject-verb agreement and arrange sentence to clearly convey intended meaning.

× I would say definitely yes because when I was early teens my grandma used to be in a mature artist and drove me lots of horses, animals and I copied him and learned how to try and also he taught me a lot of things.

✓ I would definitely say yes, because when I was in my early teens my grandma used to be a mature artist and drew many horses and animals; I copied her and learned a lot from her.

Multiple issues: 'would say definitely yes' reordered to 'would definitely say yes' for natural adverb placement. 'When I was early teens' needs 'in my early teens'. 'Used to be in a mature artist' is incorrect; use 'used to be a mature artist'. 'Drove me lots of horses, animals' is wrong verb and pronoun gender: likely 'drew many horses and animals'. 'Copied him' should match gender of 'grandma' so 'her'. 'Learned how to try' is unclear; simplified to 'learned a lot from her'. Suggestion: use correct verbs ('drew' not 'drove'), correct pronouns, place adverbs before main verb, and keep consistent subject references.