Dreams— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and grammatically correct, use a clear topic sentence and a short supporting detail. Avoid tense errors and redundancy. Use linking words for contrast (e.g., 'but' or 'however') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: It depends on the dream. If a dream is boring I usually forget it as soon as I wake up, but if it is vivid or unusual I remember details and sometimes write them in a notebook.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement answering the question, then give one concise reason and an example. Correct word choices (e.g., 'dreams' not 'streams') and use linking words like 'however' to show contrast.

Exemplo: I usually don't share my dreams because I consider them private. However, I am interested in other people’s dreams and sometimes watch videos about dreams on YouTube or Bilibili.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with a short reason. Fix grammatical errors (subject-verb agreement, word choice) and avoid unclear words like 'sabbatical'. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'since'.

Exemplo: I don't think dreams have special meanings from a scientific point of view because they are often just a mixture of past experiences and memories.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one or two specific examples and a brief reason. Correct grammar (infinitive form after 'to', punctuation, and avoid redundant phrases like 'excellent good'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. For example, I dream of getting a PhD and becoming a successful businessman, so I work hard now to try to make those goals come true.

× If the dream was boring, I would forget it as soon as I wake up.

✓ If the dream is boring, I forget it as soon as I wake up.

This sentence mixes second conditional/modal 'would' with present simple 'wake up'. The speaker is describing a habitual reaction, so use present simple for both clauses: 'If the dream is boring' and 'I forget it as soon as I wake up.' Alternatively, use past for a hypothetical past. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for habitual actions. Note: changed 'was' to 'is' and 'would forget' to 'forget' to indicate a general habit.

× If the dream is impressive and I will remember the detail of it and record it in my notebook.

✓ If the dream is impressive, I will remember the details and record them in my notebook.

Do not use 'if' with 'will' in the if-clause for real future conditions. Use present simple in the if-clause and 'will' in the main clause. Also 'detail' should be plural 'details' and pronoun must agree ('them'). Suggestion: use 'If the dream is impressive, I will...'.

× To be honest, I don't like to share my dream with others because I think it is my privacy.

✓ To be honest, I don't like to share my dreams with others because I think they are my private matters.

'Dream' should be plural if talking generally. 'Privacy' is uncountable and not used with 'my' in this sense; better: 'my private matters' or 'my privacy' without 'my'. Also pronoun agreement: 'they are' for 'dreams'. Suggestion: use plural 'dreams' and a clearer noun phrase like 'private matters.'

× It is not suitable to expose to others.

✓ It is not suitable to expose to others.

This sentence is awkward rather than strictly ungrammatical; better alternatives: 'It is not suitable to share with others' or 'It is not appropriate to expose them to others.' Recommended rewrite to clarify the subject: 'It is not appropriate to share them with others.'

× But I would like to watch some interesting videos about other streams on websites such as YouTube and Bilibili.

✓ But I would like to watch some interesting videos about other people's dreams on websites such as YouTube and Bilibili.

The word 'streams' is likely a typo for 'dreams' or 'streams' of online content; context indicates 'dreams.' If 'streams' is intended, 'other streams' needs a clarifying modifier like 'other people's streams.' Suggestion: use 'other people's dreams' for clarity.

× Well, to be frank, in a scientific view I think dreams has no specific or sabbatical meaning because it is just a combination or repeat the things happened in the past or you have experienced.

✓ Well, to be frank, from a scientific point of view I think dreams have no specific or mystical meaning because they are just a combination or repetition of things that happened in the past or that you have experienced.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('dreams have' not 'dreams has'); preposition and phrase use ('from a scientific point of view'); word choice ('sabbatical' is wrong; likely 'mystical' or 'symbolic'); noun forms ('repetition' not 'repeat'); clause structure ('things that happened' and include 'that'). Suggestions: correct agreement, improve word choice, and fix relative clauses.

× it is just a combination or repeat the things happened in the past or you have experienced.

✓ it is just a combination or repetition of things that happened in the past or that you have experienced.

After 'combination or' the noun form 'repetition' is needed, not the verb 'repeat.' Also include 'of' before 'things' and add 'that' for the relative clause. Suggestion: use parallel noun forms and proper relative clauses.

× Of course, in some of my dreams I achieved my ultimate goal, such as obtaining my PhD degree or become a successful businessman, So I sincerely hope that this excellent good dreams will come true one day.

✓ Of course, in some of my dreams I achieved my ultimate goal, such as obtaining my PhD degree or becoming a successful businessman, so I sincerely hope that these excellent dreams will come true one day.

Parallel structure: use gerund 'becoming' to match 'obtaining.' Capitalization: 'So' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. 'This excellent good dreams' has number and adjective order issues; use 'these excellent dreams' or 'these good dreams.' Suggestion: ensure parallel gerunds and correct adjective order and plural agreement.