Dreams— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır fakat birkaç dilbilgisi hatası ve tekrar var. Cümleleri daha kısa ve net kur; zaman uyumuna dikkat et (örn. "would love" yerine "wanted" veya "used to want"). Neden değiştiğini açıkça ve kısa destekleyici bir cümleyle belirt; bağlaçlar (because, so) doğru ve tutarlı kullanılmalı. 5 cümleyi geçmemeye dikkat et.

Exemplo: I can remember some childhood dreams. For example, I used to want to be an actor. However, now I want to be an economist because acting pays less and I don't see a long-term career there. Therefore, I decided to study economics to have more stable opportunities.

Sugestão: İçerik iyi fakat çok sayıda telaffuz/kelime hatası ve tekrar var (ör. "shame" yerine "share"; "supports" yerine "support"). Cümleleri daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçları düzgün kullan ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkar. Tek bir ana fikir ver, sonra 1-2 destekleyici örnek ekle.

Exemplo: I usually share my dreams only with people I trust. If I tell strangers or people I'm not close to, they might discourage me. But my close friends and family support me, which motivates me to keep working on my goals.

Sugestão: Fikir açık ama dilbilgisi ve mantık akışı zayıf; birçok gereksiz tekrar ve anlamsal belirsizlik var ("have a name" ne demek belirsiz). Daha spesifik örnekler veya nedenler ver, cümleleri sadeleştir ve zaman/madde uyumuna dikkat et.

Exemplo: I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our childhood interests and values. For example, wanting to help others as a child might explain a later desire to become a doctor. In that way, dreams can encourage us to work harder toward our goals.

Sugestão: Mesaj net fakat tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var ("when we are child" → "when we were children"; "I have the brain" → "I am able" veya "I have the maturity"). İki zıt fikri (çocukluk hayalleri vs. yetişkin kararları) daha açık ayır ve kısa örnek ekle.

Exemplo: Yes, I want to make my current dreams come true. I no longer pursue some childhood dreams because I think I lacked the maturity to choose wisely back then. Now that I'm older and more realistic, I focus on goals that fit my skills and future plans.

× For example, when I was a child, I would love to be an actor, but right now I would like to be an economist because the salary of the actors are not that much and I know that I couldn't continue to work in that domain and that's why I don't want it.

✓ For example, when I was a child, I loved to be an actor, but right now I would like to be an economist because actors' salaries are not that high, and I know that I couldn't continue to work in that field, so I don't want to.

The original sentence mixes modal and tense forms incorrectly and uses incorrect possessive and noun forms. 'Would love to be' in past context should be 'loved to be' (present participle issue affecting verb form). 'The salary of the actors are' has subject-verb agreement and possessive issues; use plural possessive 'actors' salaries' and singular/plural agreement 'are' with 'salaries' is acceptable but 'not that high' is more natural. 'Domain' is replaced with 'field' for natural collocation. Also 'that's why I don't want it' is unnatural; use 'so I don't want to.' Suggestion: match tense consistently, use correct possessive for plural nouns, and prefer natural collocations (field, salaries, high).

× So me, I prefer to shame my dreams with others but just with the people that I love.

✓ As for me, I prefer to share my dreams with others but only with the people I love.

'So me, I' is incorrect; use 'As for me' or 'I'. 'Shame my dreams' is a wrong verb choice; the correct verb is 'share'. 'But just with the people that I love' should be 'but only with the people I love' for natural English. Suggestion: use appropriate introductory phrases and correct verb 'share' and quantifier 'only'.

× Because sometimes when I share my dream with someone that I don't like, they can make me feel that that dream is not that important.

✓ Sometimes when I share my dream with someone I don't like, they can make me feel that the dream is not important.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' here creates a sentence fragment and is unnecessary. 'Someone that I don't like' should be 'someone I don't like'. Repeated 'that that' is incorrect; use 'the dream' or a single 'that'. 'Not that important' is informal; 'not important' is clearer. Suggestion: avoid beginning sentences with 'Because' unless attaching to a main clause, remove repetition, and simplify phrasing.

× But when I share that dream with the person that I love, they always supports me and that makes me feel better.

✓ But when I share that dream with the person I love, they always support me and that makes me feel better.

'Person that I love' should be 'person I love'. 'They always supports' has subject-verb agreement error with plural pronoun 'they' taking a singular verb; use 'support'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun-verb agreement and use 'who' or omit 'that' for people: 'person I love'.

× I think that dreams have special meanings because our dream are usually comes from our childhood and that's why when we have a dream means that we have a name and it makes us it force us to work hard to realize that dream and that's why I think our dreams are encouraging us to work more.

✓ I think that dreams have special meanings because our dreams usually come from our childhood, and when we have a dream it means we have a goal and it forces us to work hard to realize that dream; that's why I think our dreams encourage us to work more.

Multiple issues: 'our dream are' should be 'our dreams' (plural) and 'usually come' (not 'comes') — subject-verb agreement. 'When we have a dream means that' is ungrammatical; use 'when we have a dream it means'. 'We have a name' is likely intended as 'a goal' or 'an aim'; 'name' is incorrect. 'It makes us it force us' is garbled; use 'it forces us'. 'Are encouraging us to work more' is less natural than 'encourage us to work more.' Suggestion: correct plural agreement, use 'come' not 'comes', replace unclear words ('name' -> 'goal'), and simplify clauses to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I would like to make my dreams come true, but I do not want to make my childhood dreams because when we are child we couldn't make the right decisions because we're child, we're not an adult.

✓ Yes, I would like to make my dreams come true, but I do not want to pursue my childhood dreams because when we are children we couldn't make the right decisions; we were not adults.

'When we are child' is incorrect; use 'when we are children' or 'when we were children' depending on tense. Since referring to past ability, 'were' fits better: 'we were not adults.' 'Couldn't' is past tense and matches 'were', so change phrasing to 'we couldn't make the right decisions; we were not adults.' 'Make my childhood dreams' is unnatural; use 'pursue my childhood dreams.' Suggestion: use correct plural 'children' and match past tense consistently.

× But right now I have the brain to make the right decisions and that's why right now I would like to make them.

✓ But right now I have the maturity to make the right decisions, and that's why I would like to pursue them now.

'I have the brain' is unnatural; use 'I have the maturity' or 'I am able' to express decision-making capacity. Repeating 'right now' is redundant. 'Make them' is vague; use 'pursue them' or 'make them come true.' Suggestion: choose more natural collocations ('maturity', 'pursue'), avoid repetition, and keep tense consistent.