Dreams— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and give one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct verb forms (e.g., 'I dreamed' or 'I dream of being a makeup artist').

Exemplo: I can remember one dream clearly: I dream of running my own makeup-artist business. In the dream I felt confident and independent while applying makeup for a client, and I enjoyed managing appointments and helping people look their best.

Sugestão: Clarify your meaning, correct grammar, and organize into a topic sentence plus supporting reason. Avoid vague phrases and use linking words like 'because' or 'however.'

Exemplo: No, I usually don't share my dreams because I consider them personal and private. However, I am interested in hearing other people’s interesting dreams because they can be entertaining and reveal something about a person.

Sugestão: Fix word choice and grammar (e.g., 'dreams' not 'gym'), give a clear topic sentence, and support it with a specific example using linking words like 'for example' and 'this may mean.'

Exemplo: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our ambitions and personality. For example, dreaming about a famous athlete may mean you admire their determination and hope to achieve similar success in your own life.

Sugestão: Use natural phrasing and avoid extreme statements. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms, and provide one or two specific reasons or plans. Replace 'assume' with 'achieve' and soften 'failure of my life.'

Exemplo: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because I am passionate about my career in makeup and it gives me direction. For example, I plan to gain experience by taking courses and building a client portfolio to become a confident, disciplined professional.

× Yes, I can remember 1 dream clearly.

✓ Yes, I can remember one dream clearly.

Use the word 'one' instead of the numeral '1' in formal speech and writing; this is not strictly a grammatical error but improves register and clarity. Also ensure singular 'dream' matches 'one'.

× I dream that I have a makeup artist.

✓ I dreamed that I had a makeup artist.

The student is describing a past dream, so use past tense. 'Dream' should be past 'dreamed' (or 'dreamt') and 'have' should be past 'had' to maintain tense consistency. Use past tense when reporting dreams that occurred previously.

× I have a makeup artist business and I felt confident and independent while while giving a client service.

✓ I have a makeup artist business, and I felt confident and independent while giving client services.

Use a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. 'Makeup artist business' is acceptable but consider 'a makeup-artist business' or 'a makeup artist's business'; hyphenation or possessive can improve clarity. Remove duplicate 'while'. Use plural 'services' because it refers generally to providing services to clients. Maintain consistent tense: 'have' (present) with 'felt' (past) can be acceptable if referring to general possession and a past feeling, but better is: 'I had a makeup-artist business, and I felt...'. Here corrected to keep original but fix article and plurality.

× No, I can't share my dreams with others because I feel that my dreams also some private privacy that's do not inter interpret others.

✓ No, I can't share my dreams with others because I feel my dreams are private and should not be interpreted by others.

The original has pronoun and noun errors: 'also some private privacy' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'are private' for correct verb and adjective agreement. Replace 'that's do not inter interpret others' with 'should not be interpreted by others' to use correct passive structure and verb form. 'Interpret' was misspelled and misordered.

× I also like other interesting dream others.

✓ I also like hearing about other people's interesting dreams.

Original sentence is structurally incorrect and unclear. Use 'hearing about' to express interest in others' dreams. Use possessive 'people's' and plural 'dreams' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I think gym has special meaning because they often reflect our ambition and the kind of person who want to become.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meaning because they often reflect our ambitions and the kind of person we want to become.

'Gym' is a typo for 'dreams'. Use plural 'dreams' to match 'they'. 'Ambition' should be plural 'ambitions' or can remain singular; plural is more natural with 'they'. 'Who want to become' is incorrect: use 'we want to become' to refer to people generally. Maintain subject-verb agreement.

× For example, dreaming about a famous athletic might show that admire their qualities and want to achieve similar success in your own life.

✓ For example, dreaming about a famous athlete might show that you admire their qualities and want to achieve similar success in your own life.

Use 'athlete' not 'athletic' (adjective). Include subject 'you' before 'admire' to form a complete clause. 'Their' as a singular generic pronoun is acceptable, but 'your' later should match 'you'; keep 'you' consistent. Ensure verb agreement: 'admire' needs a subject.

× Obviously, I want to make my dreams come true because I'm passionate about my dream and I believe that if I cannot assume my dreams, it should be failure of my life.

✓ Obviously, I want to make my dreams come true because I'm passionate about them, and I believe that if I cannot achieve my dreams, it would be a failure in my life.

'Assume my dreams' is incorrect verb choice; use 'achieve' or 'fulfill'. Conditional sentence requires 'would be' rather than 'should be' for hypothetical result. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'dreams'. Add article 'a' before 'failure' and preposition 'in' before 'my life'. Maintain tense consistency.

× My dreams show me how I passionate about my work, discipline and about my career.

✓ My dreams show how passionate I am about my work, discipline, and career.

Missing verb 'am' after 'I' is required for correct sentence structure. Use correct word order: 'how passionate I am' not 'how I passionate'. Remove redundant 'about' before 'career' and list items with commas. This fixes adjective use and sentence structure.