Dreams— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류와 의미 전달의 불명확성이 많습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하는 주제 문장이 약하고 추가 설명은 혼란스럽습니다. 구체적인 내용(언제 어떤 꿈을 꾸었는지, 꿈의 내용과 감정)을 논리적으로 연결하여 최대 3~4문장으로 간결하게 말하세요. 예를 들어 과거 시점을 분명히 하고 연결어(when, because, so 등)를 사용해 이유와 결과를 설명하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I can remember a recent dream. In that dream I saw myself becoming an actor because I enjoyed performing in front of people. I felt very happy and confident in the dream, which made it memorable.

Sugestão: 의도 전달이 불분명하고 문법과 어휘 선택이 적절하지 않습니다. 질문에 대한 명확한 주제 문장(공유하는지 여부)을 먼저 말한 뒤, 이유와 구체적인 상황을 연결어로 설명하세요. 간단한 이유(부끄러움, 연습 필요 등)와 예시(누구에게 말하는지, 어떻게 연습하는지)를 포함하세요.

Exemplo: I usually don’t share my dreams with others. I prefer to practice and improve by myself because I feel shy about other people’s opinions. For example, I rehearse scenes alone or take notes from lectures I attend.

Sugestão: 답은 긍정적이지만 문장의 논리와 어휘 사용이 혼란스럽습니다. 의견을 제시한 뒤 그 이유를 논리적으로 뒷받침하세요(예: 꿈이 희망을 제공하거나 무의식의 표시라는 점). 구체적 사례나 결과를 하나 들어 설명하면 좋습니다. 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I do think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our hopes and fears. For example, someone who dreams about succeeding may be very motivated in real life. So dreams can sometimes predict or influence a person’s actions.

Sugestão: 의도는 분명하나 문법과 표현이 반복적이고 어색합니다. 주제 문장으로 원하는지 여부를 분명히 밝히고, 이유와 구체적인 계획(어떤 준비를 하고 있는지)을 덧붙이세요. 문장 길이는 2~4문장으로 유지하고 불필요한 중복은 피하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true; I would like to become an actor because I enjoy acting. To achieve this, I take acting classes and practice monologues regularly so I can improve my skills.

× Second time I found a dream, uh, when I was look, I want him to become the actor because I enjoy putting in front of others. In this situation, our girl who was happy.

✓ The second time I had a dream, I saw that I wanted him to become an actor because I enjoy performing in front of others. In the dream, there was a girl who looked happy.

The original contains multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect verb forms ('found a dream' -> 'had a dream'), wrong tense and phrasing ('when I was look' -> 'I saw'), incorrect article and noun form ('the actor' -> 'an actor'), and unclear clause ordering. Break the content into two clear sentences and use correct verbs and articles. Suggestion: plan sentences with subject + verb + object and use simple past for past dream descriptions.

× I hide my dream because I was fine if other new farm dreams do I just practice myself to do that and just tell me from the lecture in Canada.

✓ I keep my dream to myself because I am fine if others have different dreams; I just practice on my own and I learned this from a lecture in Canada.

This sentence has confusing structure and incorrect tense and pronouns. 'I hide my dream' is better as 'I keep my dream to myself'; 'I was fine' should be 'I am fine' for general present state; 'other new farm dreams' is unintelligible and likely means 'others have different dreams'; 'do I just practice myself' should be 'I just practice on my own'; 'tell me from the lecture' should be 'I learned this from a lecture'. Suggestion: separate ideas with semicolons or conjunctions and use present simple for habitual facts.

× Yes, absolutely. Dreams being no dissent as dreams come true. I think dream is most pressured in conscience. Someone just pursue deafening and he's just there. We will see in their lives.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Dreams are sometimes a sign that they might come true. I think dreams reflect our deepest concerns of conscience. Some people just pursue their dreams relentlessly, and you can see the results in their lives.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'being no dissent', wrong noun/verb agreement, and unclear vocabulary ('most pressured in conscience', 'pursue deafening'). Use present simple and plural agreement for general statements: 'Dreams are', 'dreams reflect'. Replace unclear words with accurate terms like 'reflect', 'pursue their dreams relentlessly'. Suggestion: choose precise vocabulary and ensure subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

× I know, but I really would like to become the actor because I really enjoy that enjoy acting and I don't really interested in other things or reality love so it's OK.

✓ I know, but I would really like to become an actor because I enjoy acting, and I'm not very interested in other things or romantic relationships, so that's okay.

Problems: incorrect article 'the actor' should be 'an actor'; awkward repetition 'really enjoy that enjoy acting'; wrong verb form 'don't really interested' should be 'I'm not very interested'; 'reality love' is unclear—interpreted as 'romantic relationships'. Use 'would like to' + base verb for desire, and 'become an actor' without 'the'. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and use correct adjective/verb forms (be + adjective) for states.