Sharing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Correct grammar (use past tense and subject-verb agreement), make the answer more coherent and relevant to childhood rather than present living situation, and avoid redundancy. Start with a direct topic sentence about parents teaching sharing, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For instance, they encouraged me to give snacks and toys to my cousins during family visits, so I learned to consider others’ needs and cooperate with them.

Sugestão: Fix countable/uncountable nouns and grammar (information is uncountable; subject-verb agreement). Be concise and add a linking word to show reason. Include a specific example and outcome to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: I usually share useful information with my colleagues, such as recent research findings and tips on using AI tools effectively, because this helps our team improve efficiency and generate new ideas.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity (use plural/singular consistently, add articles). Use linking words to explain consequences and give a brief specific example of private information. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: I think we should not share private information, such as ID numbers or bank details, because leaks can harm individuals and organizations. For example, posting someone’s personal documents on social media can lead to identity theft.

Sugestão: Clarify meaning (phrases like 'after charge' are unclear) and use past tense correctly. Provide a clear topic sentence about a recent sharing event, then one specific detail about the event and why it was enjoyable. Remove filler words (uh, umm).

Exemplo: Recently I shared food with friends after our church Bible study. We held a potluck dinner where everyone brought a dish, and it was enjoyable because we connected and exchanged recipes.

Sugestão: Correct small grammar issues and avoid contractions/slang (’wanna’). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example of the kind of news you would share. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: The first person I would share good news with is my wife because she always supports me. For example, if I receive a promotion, I would tell her right away so we can celebrate together.

Sugestão: Clarify whether you mean friends or colleagues and correct grammar. Use linking words to explain why you share research news and give a specific example of the type of news and its benefit. Keep sentences shorter and more natural.

Exemplo: I usually share recent medical research news with my colleagues because we are researchers and such findings can inspire new projects. For instance, I recently circulated a paper on a novel diagnostic method that could improve our study design.

× Yes, when I was a child, my parents teach me to share because I live with my daughter, so I have to share a lot of things with her like snacks and toys.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my parents taught me to share. Now I live with my daughter, so I have to share many things with her, like snacks and toys.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb forms: 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to match 'when I was a child'. 'I live with my daughter' refers to present, so separate into two sentences and use 'Now' to indicate present. Use 'many things' rather than 'a lot of things' for slightly more natural phrasing and add a comma before 'like'.

× Umm, I usually share useful informations with my colleagues.

✓ Umm, I usually share useful information with my colleagues.

Uncountable noun: 'information' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'informations'. Use 'information' without 's'.

× For example, I always share a recent research results and how to use AIR effectively.

✓ For example, I always share recent research results and how to use AIR effectively.

Number agreement: 'a recent research results' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove 'a' to match plural 'results', or change to 'a recent research result'.

× Sharing these informations are very important in my workplace.

✓ Sharing this information is very important in my workplace.

Subject-verb agreement and uncountable noun: 'information' is uncountable and should be singular; the gerund phrase 'Sharing this information' requires singular verb 'is', not 'are'. Also use 'this information' instead of 'these informations'.

× I think we should not share the private information because the private information leakage has serious consequences for both individuals organizations.

✓ I think we should not share private information because private information leakage has serious consequences for both individuals and organizations.

Article and coordination issues: 'the private information' is overly specific; use 'private information' generally. Missing 'and' between 'individuals' and 'organizations'. Also 'for both individuals and organizations' is correct parallel structure.

× I have to take care of that, especially using social media like Facebook, Instagram or others.

✓ I have to be careful about that, especially when using social media like Facebook, Instagram, and others.

Preposition and phrasing: 'take care of that' is awkward; 'be careful about that' is more natural. Need 'when' before 'using' to indicate time and include comma and 'and' before 'others'.

× Uh, usually I join the Bible study at the church and recently I share my food with my friends after charge.

✓ Uh, I usually attend Bible study at church, and recently I shared my food with my friends after the service.

Tense and word choice: 'join' should be 'attend' for habitual action; 'recently I share' should be past 'I shared' when referring to a recent event. 'After charge' is incorrect—likely meant 'after the service' or 'after church'. Added 'the' before 'service'.

× I think it was a very enjoyable moment.

✓ I think it was a very enjoyable moment.

This sentence is grammatically correct given past reference; no change needed. (Included to indicate checked — no error matching the list.)

× Is my wife because she always supports me and I always turn to her when I have trouble.

✓ It is my wife because she always supports me and I always turn to her when I have trouble.

Sentence fragment and pronoun issue: The answer should be a complete sentence. 'Is my wife' lacks a subject; add 'It' to form 'It is my wife'. Pronoun 'her' is used correctly later.

× So if I have uh, good news, I usually share with her as soon as possible. I wanna share my happy feeling with her.

✓ So if I have good news, I usually share it with her as soon as possible. I want to share my happy feelings with her.

Colloquial language and pronoun reference: Remove filler 'uh'. Add pronoun 'it' to clarify 'share it with her'. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Use plural 'feelings' or 'my happiness' for natural phrasing.

× I always share the recent medical news with my colleagues because we now work as a researcher in this country, so recent research result is associated with our performance and always we can find new insights to proceed with new research in our field.

✓ I always share recent medical news with my colleagues because we now work as researchers in this country, so recent research results are associated with our performance and we can always find new insights to proceed with new research in our field.

Multiple agreement errors: 'work as a researcher' should be plural 'work as researchers' to match 'we'. 'Research result' should be plural 'research results' and take plural verb 'are'. Also move 'always' to a more natural position: 'we can always find'.