Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'afraid' instead of repeating 'scared', and avoid saying 'to be honest' twice).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I wasn’t interested in cycling and I felt afraid of falling, so learning seemed too difficult for me. As a result, I preferred walking or taking the bus to school.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and coherence: use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'in my opinion' instead of 'for my notion'; 'urban areas' instead of 'place where there are lots of highways buildings'). Keep sentences shorter and provide one concrete reason or example.

Exemplo: In my opinion, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in urban areas. For example, many children and teenagers ride bikes to school or to meet friends, which makes cycling a common and practical pastime.

× To be honest, no, because I was that kind of person who was not into riding a bike and to be honest, I didn't own a bike because I was scared of riding it and it was too difficult for me at that time.

✓ To be honest, no. I was the kind of person who was not into riding a bike, and I didn't own one because I was scared of riding and found it too difficult at the time.

The original sentence is a long run-on with repetition ('to be honest' twice) and awkward phrasing ('that kind of person who was not into'). Split into two clauses to improve clarity and conciseness; replace 'a bike' with 'one' in the second mention to avoid repetition; change 'it was too difficult for me at that time' to 'found it too difficult at the time' for more natural, concise wording. Use simple past consistently for past habits and feelings.

× For my notion, yes, because whenever you go out and especially when you live in a place where, uh, there are lots of highways buildings, you can see that the kids are riding their own bikes with their friends and they're just talking while riding and I think that it is very important.

✓ In my view, yes, because whenever you go out, especially if you live in a place with lots of high-rise buildings, you can see kids riding their bikes with friends, talking while they ride, and I think that is very common.

'For my notion' is unnatural; use 'In my view'. 'Highways buildings' is incorrect: likely meant 'high-rise buildings' or 'highways' — chosen 'high-rise buildings' for context. Use 'if you live in a place with' instead of 'where there are lots of'. Remove redundant 'their own' and tighten phrasing ('riding their bikes with their friends' -> 'kids riding their bikes with friends'). Change 'it is very important' to 'it is very common' to match likely intended meaning; if original meant 'important', adjust wording to justify why. Overall, fix preposition use and reduce redundancy.