Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and linking words (e.g., "so", "and", "for example") to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "a day of school or."

Exemplo: Yes. I had a small light-pink bike when I was a child. I often rode it with friends, and during school holidays we held informal races in my neighborhood, which was a lot of fun.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use formal register (avoid slang like "wanna") and clearer linking words ("because", "however", "for example"). Be precise about why people prefer walking to cycling and avoid repeating the same idea.

Exemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer walking for short distances and exercise. For example, in cities people often choose to walk to nearby shops to increase their daily step count, while bicycles are more common only among students or cycling enthusiasts.

× I would use it to go out with my friends and we will also do competitions like bike racing on occasions like when we have a holiday we have like a day of school or.

✓ I used it to go out with my friends, and we also had competitions like bike racing on occasions such as school holidays or days off.

The student mixed past and future/modal forms ('would', 'will') while describing past habitual actions. Use simple past or 'used to' for past habits. Also streamline phrases for clarity: 'on occasions like when we have a holiday' becomes 'on occasions such as school holidays or days off'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense (simple past or 'used to') when talking about childhood habits.

× It was the color pink, descriptively light pink.

✓ It was pink, a light shade of pink.

The phrase 'the color pink, descriptively light pink' is awkward and redundant. Use a concise adjective phrase: 'pink' or 'a light shade of pink'. Suggestion: Keep adjective phrases simple and avoid repeating the same idea.

× I think bikes are definitely a personal choice cause mostly people often wanna go for walks often than using a bike for transportation they would wanna walk more.

✓ I think choosing to ride a bike is a personal decision because most people prefer to walk rather than use a bike for transportation.

The original mixes informal contractions ('wanna'), repeats adverbs ('often' twice), and uses present simple awkwardly. Improve register and clarity: use 'prefer to' and 'rather than' for comparisons. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to' + infinitive and avoid informal slang in formal answers.

× So they could have like walk their walking steps be achieved, The Walking step achieved, yeah.

✓ This way they can get their walking steps in.

The sentence misuses pronouns and noun phrases ('they could have like walk their walking steps be achieved') and has redundant fragments. Replace with clear subject-verb structure: 'they can get their walking steps in.' Suggestion: Use simple, direct constructions: subject + modal/auxiliary + verb + object.