Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and correct minor grammar (e.g., "rode one" not "rode in one", "we did not have money"). Use a linking word to connect reasons.

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. The first time I rode one I fell and got hurt, so I felt afraid to try again. Also, my family couldn’t afford a bicycle at the time, so we didn’t buy one.

Sugestão: Give a clearer topic sentence, reduce hesitations and filler words, and add one specific example or statistic to support your view. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" to make your answer coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys. For example, I often see commuters and students cycling to work or school, and some cities have dedicated bike lanes to make cycling safer.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child because when I first rode in one I got myself really hurt badly.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because when I first rode one I got really hurt.

The phrase 'rode in one' is incorrect for riding a bicycle; use 'rode one' or 'rode a bike'. 'Got myself really hurt badly' is wordy and uses redundant intensifiers ('really' and 'badly'); 'got really hurt' is clearer. Maintain past tense consistently; the corrected sentence keeps past simple verbs ('did not have', 'rode', 'got').

× So I decided that a bike is not for me and also we do not have a money for a bike so there's no point in getting one.

✓ So I decided that a bike was not for me and also we did not have money for a bike, so there was no point in getting one.

Use past tense to match the time reference ('decided' -> surrounding verbs should be past: 'was', 'did not have', 'was no point'). 'A money' is incorrect because 'money' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'; use 'money' without 'a'. Also ensure punctuation and clause linking with commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because umm, whenever I I go outside, I see people on the road uh, riding bikes to travel to short uh distances or destinations.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because whenever I go outside, I see people on the road riding bikes to travel short distances.

Remove filler words ('umm', 'uh') and duplicate 'I'. 'To travel to short distances or destinations' is awkward and redundant; use 'to travel short distances'. The corrected sentence simplifies structure and keeps present simple tense for general truth ('think', 'are', 'go', 'see').

× It's popular and there are bike lanes in some of the places here.

✓ They are popular and there are bike lanes in some places here.

Subject reference 'It' is ambiguous; 'bikes' is plural, so use 'They are popular'. 'Some of the places here' is wordy—'some places here' is more natural. Maintain present tense for general statements.