Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details (what happened and how you feel now). Remove filler words like “umm” and avoid contradictory statements (saying you had a bike but then ‘haven’t had the chance to ride’ is confusing). Use one linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, after a few accidents I became scared to ride, so I stopped practicing. As a result, I still find two-wheeled bikes difficult to ride, though I’m comfortable on four-wheeled balance bikes.

Sugestão: Organize the response: state your opinion clearly, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because” and “for example”). Avoid repetition and filler words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “commuting,” “recreation,” “fitness”).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting and exercise. For example, cyclists often ride long distances on weekends for fitness, and urban commuters prefer bikes to avoid traffic.

× Yes I did umm, I tried practicing riding a bike, but after a few accidents I got scared to try again.

✓ Yes I did. I tried practicing riding a bike, but after a few accidents I became scared to try again.

The sentence originally uses 'got scared' which is colloquial; for a clearer past tense narrative, 'became scared' is more appropriate. Use a clear past tense verb form to match other past actions ('did', 'tried'). Suggestion: use 'became' or 'was' to indicate past state.

× So umm, To this date I haven't had umm the chance to ride a bike.

✓ So, to this date I haven't had the chance to ride a two-wheeled bike.

The sentence uses present perfect 'haven't had' correctly, but needs clarity and consistent casing/punctuation. Also specify 'two-wheeled bike' to contrast with four wheels mentioned later. Suggestion: keep 'haven't had' for continuing past-to-present situation and remove unnecessary fillers.

× Maybe I can ride a bike with four wheels, but with two wheels I don't think I can.

✓ Maybe I can ride a four-wheeled bike, but I don't think I can ride a two-wheeled one.

The original is understandable but awkward. Reordering and repeating the verb 'ride' clarifies the contrast; using 'one' as pronoun avoids repetition. Modal verbs 'can' and 'don't think I can' are acceptable; improvement is in word order and specificity.

× Yes, it's quite popular because umm some use it as mode of transportation and I think now umm, it got more popular because umm, so I'm used to work out umm for their lifestyle, like going on umm, long trips using bike.

✓ Yes, it's quite popular because some people use it as a mode of transportation, and I think it has become more popular now because people include cycling in their lifestyle, such as going on long trips by bike.

Multiple errors: missing plural subject ('some' should be 'some people') and missing article ('a mode'). 'It got more popular' is past tense casual; use present perfect 'has become' to show change up to now. 'I'm used to work out for their lifestyle' is incorrect pronoun/reference and verb form; replace with 'people include cycling in their lifestyle' to match meaning. Also use 'by bike' for correct preposition. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree, use articles where needed, and choose appropriate tense (present perfect) for recent trends.