Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., ‘ride a bicycle’, ‘help me to learn balance’).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have an electric bike as a child. I used to ride a bicycle because it helped me develop balance and confidence. For example, learning to balance on two wheels made it easier for me to learn to ride motorcycles later on.

Sugestão: Answer directly and then give one or two clear reasons with linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘motorbikes’, ‘take up less space’, ‘have lower running costs’) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences complete and limit to max five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is because motorbikes and bicycles take up less road space and are cheaper to run than cars. For instance, many commuters prefer scooters since they cost less for fuel and parking, which makes them practical in crowded cities.

× 'No ma'am. Well, when I was a child I used to ride bicycle instead of any electric bike or motorbike because riding a bicycle can help us to maintain our balance.'

✓ 'No ma'am. Well, when I was a child I used to ride a bicycle instead of an electric bike or a motorbike because riding a bicycle can help us maintain our balance.'

'ride bicycle' is missing the article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'bicycle', causing a subject-noun/verb agreement style error; also 'any' is unnecessary before 'electric bike' in this context and article 'an' should be used before a vowel sound. Suggestion: use 'a' or 'an' with singular countable nouns and remove unnecessary 'any'. Additionally, remove 'to' before 'maintain' because 'help' is followed by the bare infinitive or 'to' but not both; use 'help us maintain'.

× 'That can help us to. To ride greater vehicles.'

✓ 'That can help us to ride larger vehicles.'

'That can help us to. To ride greater vehicles.' is fragmented and ungrammatical: there is an unnecessary sentence break and the adjective 'greater' is not the correct collocation for vehicle size. Combine into one sentence and use 'larger' to describe size. Also keep 'to' only once: 'help us to ride' or 'help us ride'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and choose correct adjective collocations.

× 'Yes ma'am. Bikes are very popular in our country because people here used to ride on bicycles and motorbikes rather than using cars because they they take a lot of space on the roads and also have a large maintenance amount.'

✓ 'Yes ma'am. Bikes are very popular in our country because people here used to ride bicycles and motorbikes rather than use cars, because cars take up a lot of space on the roads and also require a lot of maintenance.'

Several issues: 'ride on bicycles' is nonstandard; use 'ride bicycles' or 'ride on' consistently. Repetition 'they they' is a typographical error. 'take a lot of space' should be 'take up a lot of space'. 'have a large maintenance amount' is ungrammatical; use 'require a lot of maintenance'. Also keep verb tense consistent: contrast 'used to ride' (past habitual) with present generalization; consider 'often ride' or 'tend to ride' if speaking generally. Suggestion: revise to 'people here often ride bicycles...' if describing current habits.